Issue63 To truly understand one culture by knowledge of other ones

galaxysongUID: 152834

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"To truly understand your own culture-no matter how you define it-requires personal knowledge of at least one other culture, one that is distinctly different from your own."
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In the age of globalization, more and more people have realized that a very effective and even the best way to truly understand their own culture is to learn at least one disparate culture for comparison. In fact, a new group of academic disciplines named comparative studies have risen recently, culture study included.

It is natural for people to overlook or ignore the things that no comparison stands along with them. An example in physics illustrates this point. Although our ancestors had long felt the move of air--wind, only when having discovered the emptiest emptiness, namely vacuum, did people began to deeply study and understand the nature of air. Before the discovery of vacuum, people took granted that an empty cup contained "nothing", while after, they knew there was something transparent in it. Contrast here made people aware of the existence of an important thing around us and revealed the nature of it.

Similarly, in day-to-day lives, people also experience but do not sense their own culture if they have ever known only this very one culture that cannot compare itself. Usually, people just take culture as transparent as air: inhaling it, exhaling it, but never recognize it. As a result, people can seldom find out the essential strengths and weaknesses of their culture, which therefore evolves very slowly.

One who returns homeland from a different culture often is particularly penetrating and insightful to the good and bad sides of his or her mother culture. That is not because experiences in another culture has endued him or her with more wisdom, but the result of the comparison between two disparate cultures occurs to him or her.

Comparison is like a mirror. Without the help of a mirror, people can hardly know what they (especially, their faces) look like. Comparison of different cultures works in the same way by reflecting the image of the front side of a culture in another one. It is the angle provided by such comparison that enlightens people to understand their own culture much better.

I, for example, recently am reading a book about Chinese, written by a Western missionary a century ago. It is really interesting to observe my ancestors in the eye of a westerner, whose culture shared little with that of Chinese. And I surprisingly realized many respects of my traditional culture, which appeared odd to the writer. One case impressed me most. We Chinese, even today, regard it a good manner to warmly welcome guests by over-treating. The writer, however, pointed out that this ostensibly polite treatment actually troubled the guests and took no respect to their real needs.

In the mirror of another distinctly different culture, people of one culture learns knowledge not only of the other culture but also of their own one. Usually, such comparison inspires people to take responsibility to ameliorate and even reform their culture, which will produce a more advanced culture that is worth a better sense of pride. That might be a reason why some declare that globalization does not uniform diverse cultures in the world but in fact make them more and more "local", helping them to truly understand themselves and evolve faster.

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DriverEntryUID: 143979

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"To truly understand your own culture-no matter how you define it-requires personal knowledge of at least one other culture, one that is distinctly different from your own."
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18:20
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In the age of globalization, more and more people have realized that a very effective and even the best way to truly understand their own culture is to learn at least one disparate culture for comparison. In fact, a new group of academic disciplines named comparative studies have risen recently, culture study included.
比较研究？有点意思

It is natural for people to overlook or ignore the things thatwith which，否则后面的那个THEM就不好理解了 no comparison stands along with them. An example in physics illustrates this point. Although our ancestors had long felt the move of air--wind, only when having discovered the emptiest emptiness, namely vacuum, did people began to deeply study and understand the nature of air. Before the discovery of vacuum, people took granted that an empty cup contained "nothing", while afterthe discovery.虽然罗嗦了点，不过偶觉得有必要, they knew there was something transparent in it. Contrast here made people aware of the existence of an important thing around us and revealed the nature of it.
类比来证明

Similarly, in day-to-day lives, people also experience but do not sense their own culture if they have ever known only this very one culture that不是很顺 cannot compare itself. Usually, people just take culture as transparent as air: inhaling it, exhaling it, but never recognize it. As a result, people can seldom find out the essential strengths and weaknesses of their culture, which therefore evolves very slowly.
文化自己不能比吗？过去的中国文化和当代文化是否一样？能否比较？也许你会说那是因为当代文化受到了西方的影响，但是我可以不了解西方文化就可以知道当代文化的特点啊。有点强词夺理，不过你可以考虑考虑

One who returns homeland from a different culture often is particularly penetrating and insightful to the good and bad sides of his or her mother culture. That is not because experiences in another culture has endued him or her with more wisdom, but the result of the comparison between two disparate cultures occurs to him or her.

Comparison is like a mirror. Without the help of a mirror, people can hardly know what they (especially, their faces) look like. Comparison of different cultures works in the same way by reflecting the image of the front side of a culture in another one. It is the angle provided by such comparison that enlightens people to understand their own culture much better.

I, for example, recently am放到I后面好象更顺一些 reading a book about Chinese, written by a Western missionary a century ago. It is really interesting to observe my ancestors in the eye of a westerner, whose culture shared little with that of Chinese. And I surprisingly realized many respects of my traditional culture, which appeared odd to the writer. One case impressed me most. We Chinese, even today, regard it a good manner to warmly welcome guests by over-treating. The writer, however, pointed out that this ostensibly polite treatment actually troubled the guests and took no respect to their real needs.

In the mirror of another distinctly different culture, people of one culture learns knowledge not only of the other culture but also of their和前面的learns矛盾了 own one. Usually, such comparison inspires people to take responsibility to ameliorate and even reform their culture, which will produce a more advanced culture that is worth a better sense of pride. That might be a reason why some declare that globalization does not uniform diverse cultures in the world but in fact make them more and more "local", helping them to truly understand themselves and evolve faster.

总的来说还不错，观点清楚，论证也比较充分，语言也不错。不过段落分的好象细了点。如果是限时完成的话，那你就赶紧考试去吧。呵呵

galaxysongUID: 152834

谢谢点评。
第一个body就发生了低级错误。
while after, they knew there was...这里的省略应该没有问题。我对过不少类似的英语名言，也是这样的。
if they have ever known only this very one culture的确不顺，但我当时想尝试一下，看来效果不行。
文化自己会发展，自然可以和过去的自己相比较。但这里已经举了mirror的比喻，强调的是当前的自我观察。毕竟，按你的建议走下去，就不得不与文化的历史扯上关系，恐怕会得不偿失。
I, for example, recently am...超级失败的结构。我原来还把am写成了is。
people of one culture learns knowledge not only of the other culture but also[这里少了一个that，指代knowledge。] of their own one.
“赶紧考试去”？DriverEntry不是开玩笑吧？我现在的速度还慢得很。

papajohnsUID: 127722

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"To truly understand your own culture-no matter how you define it-requires personal knowledge of at least one other culture, one that is distinctly different from your own."
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18:20
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In the age of globalization, more and more people have realized that a very effective and even the best way to truly understand their own culture is to learn at least one disparate culture for comparison. In fact, a new group of academic disciplines named comparative studies have risen recently, culture study included.including culture study

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Similarly, in day-to-day lives, people also experience but do not sense their own culture if they have ever known only this very one culture that cannot compare itself.用unless 起头除非他们也了解其他的文化用来作参照 Usually, people just take culture as transparent as air: inhaling it, exhaling it, but never recognize it. 应该认识到了自己的文化吧,只是觉得理所当然 As a result, people can seldom find out the essential strengths and weaknesses of their culture, which therefore evolves very slowly.用空气作比喻很不错

One who returns homeland from a country witha different culture often is particularly penetrating and insightful to the good and bad sides of his or her mother culture. That is not because experiences in another culture has endued him or her with more wisdom, but the result of the comparison between two disparate cultures occurs to him or her.后面不是句子怎么出现了occurs?

Comparison is like a mirror. Without the help of a mirror, people can hardly know what they (especially, their faces) 没必要提特别是,脸吧look like. Comparison of different cultures works in the same way by reflecting the image of the front side of a culture in another one. It is the angle provided by such comparison that enlightens people to understand their own culture much better. much better understand 更能强调

I, for example, recently amam recently reading a book about Chinese, written by a Western missionary a century ago. It is really interesting to observe my ancestors in the eye of a westerner, whose culture shared little with that of Chinese. And I surprisingly realized many respects of my traditional culture, which appeared odd to the writer. One case impressed me most. We Chinese, even today, regard it a good manner to warmly welcome guests by over-treating. The writer, however, pointed out that this ostensibly polite treatment actually troubled the guests and took no respect to their real needs. 是不是总结一下?

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水平较低,错误评点还请见凉.

sydUID: 151948

"To truly understand your own culture-no matter how you define it-requires personal knowledge of at least one other culture, one that is distinctly different from your own."
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18:20
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Similarly, in day-to-day lives, people also experience but do not sense their own culture if they have ever known only this very one culture that cannot compare itself. Usually, people just take culture as transparent as air: inhaling it, exhaling it, but never recognize it.GOOD SENTENCE ，I THINK As a result, people can seldom find out the essential strengths and weaknesses of their culture, which therefore evolves very slowly.I THINK HERE YOU MAY COMBINE THE FOLLOWING PARA WITH THIS ONE TO ILLUSTRATE THIS VIEWPOINT

One who returns homeland from a different culture often is particularly penetrating and insightful to the good and bad sides of his or her mother culture. That is not because experiences in another culture has endued him or her with more wisdom, but the result of the comparison between two disparate cultures occurs to him or her.

Comparison is like a mirror. Without the help of a mirror, people can hardly know what they (especially, their faces) look like. Comparison of different cultures works in the same way by reflecting the image of the front side of a culture in another one. It is the angle provided by such comparison that enlightens people to understand their own culture much better.

I, for example, recently am reading a book about Chinese, written by a Western missionary a century ago. It is really interesting to observe my ancestors in the eye of a westerner, whose culture shared little with that of Chinese. And I surprisingly realized many respects of my traditional culture, which appeared odd to the writer. One case impressed me most. We Chinese, even today, regard it a good manner to warmly welcome guests by over-treating. The writer, however, pointed out that this ostensibly polite treatment actually troubled the guests and took no respect to their real needs.

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总的来说，在限时后你的文章的复杂度有所降低，思考深度需要时间的支持，所以这个很正常，用词真的很好，我基本挑不出毛病，限时的影响可以随着时间慢慢减小。
BTW，希望你可以指点一下我的文章，谢谢。
另外，这个修改工具收费是不是有些违背GTER的传统的共享精神呢？ ;)