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继续Argument, 另外订购了Magoosh的服务把VQ提升下

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7点到现在了，一篇A还没写完...等下写完贴出来，请大家猛拍...

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本帖最后由 dafen5434 于 2013-12-17 11:57 编辑

组长，习作发在这里可以么？
东拼西凑的，基本没有原创...憋了一天，感觉好艰难，这样个写法，什么时候才能达到考试要求...
35) The following appeared in a letter from the owner of the Sunnyside Towers apartment complex to its manager.
One month ago, all the showerheads in the first three buildings of the Sunnyside Towers complex were modified to restrict maximum water flow to one-third of what it used to be. Although actual readings of water usage before and after the adjustment are not yet available, the change will obviously result in a considerable savings for Sunnyside Corporation, since the corporation must pay for water each month. Except for a few complaints about low water pressure, no problems with showers have been reported since the adjustment. I predict that modifying showerheads to restrict water flow throughout all twelve buildings in the Sunnyside Towers complex will increase our profits even more dramatically.
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the prediction and the argument on which it is based are reasonable. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the prediction.

In this letter, the author predicts that restriction of water flow throughout their all buildings will cut expenditure and increase profits. To support his argument the author cites the fact that no big problem with shower reported after the adjustment in three of their buildings and the corporation must pay for water each month. However, these evidences are not enough to provide credible support for the author's argument. To evaluate the argument and prediction in this passage, a number of relevant questions should be addressed.

In the first place, without the actual readings of water usage, the author hastily assumed that restriction of water flow will decline water usage and thus saving for the corporation. Admittedly, it is reasonable to reduce usage of water if the charge is expensive. However, if water fee merely occupies a few proportion of the corporation, I am afraid that the change will not as big as the author wanted. Furthermore, no evidence shows us that the water usage has decreased actually. It is equally possible that tenants in these buildings compensate for lower flow by either taking longer showers or by opening their shower valves further than they would otherwise.

In the second place, the author argues that there is no problem except a few complains about low water pressure after adjustment of the showerheads. Does the fact that a few people complained about water pressure necessarily indicate that all other clients are satisfied with the modification? Are there any negative effects of restricting the water flow? On the one hand, just one month is so short that many problems have not yet be found and if this month is slack season for water usage, it would be easy to understand that there are few complaints. On the other hand, more importantly, as a service corporation, Sunnyside should not only pay attention to profits but also take the demands of consumers into account. Thus, they should not ignore these few complaints which may transform serious problems. For example, it will lead to loss for corporation instead of making profits considered that tenant who care for water flow extremely, would move out if their need can not be satisfied for a long time.

The last but not the least important, based on the overly optimism of modification in the there buildings, the author rashly forecast spreading of the modification throughout the other buildings will make a considerable contribution to Sunnyside's interests. However, are these three buildings are comparable to the other buildings? Whether the amount of tenants, as well as the habits of their water using, are similar among all buildings. Before getting information to answer these questions, we cannot decide assertively whether other buildings are suited for modification of showerheads. To strengthen his/her argument, the author would benefit from implementing a comprehensive survey about the attitude to the modification of residents in the three buildings and weather residents of the other buildings would like to be modified.

In conclusion, the argument is unconvincing as it stands. To better assess the argument, we would expect the author to provide adequate information with respect to figures comparing water usage before and after modification, we also need to know more details of the complaints and particular situations of tenants both in the three buildings and in the other buildings.

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