issue5 请大家批评 bow//(飘渺水云)

罗兰UID: 156443

Title : A nation should require all its students to study the same national curriculum until they enter college rather than allow schools in different parts of the nation to determine which academic courses to offer..

I think the purpose of the opinion is to eager to all of national students study completely when they are young, and decide which they really want to engage in until they are mature enough to decide correctly. So studying the same national curriculum before they go to universities are able to eliminate the unequal competition caused by different subjects so that students can receive the equal education to grow up. Although the opinion is very good, I disagree it to some extent.

First, people exit discrepancy since they are born, so some may be excellent in the math while others are prefer to arts. If they are ordered to study all national curriculum, majority of they will feel unhappy because some subjects by which they don't like have to study well. Meanwhile, some will feel very tired, by virtue of great many subjects to learn, especially the young. For instance, a famous physicist in China, YangZhenLing, is very good at theory of physics, not the experiments of Physics. So he chose the theory of physics as his main research diversion even in his high school, maybe it is impossible for him to be rewarded the praise of Nobel if he had learned all of subjects in a long time. Another example is about myself. While I was in high school, I was really long for mastering all subjects well and eager to win in all competitions, such as physics, math, chemist and so forth. I studied as hard as possible I could, but finally I not only found myself so
Worn out that I couldn't help snapping in classroom in the daytime but also found that all the subjects I learned became more and more unfamiliar with me and the effects became so poor that I even wanted to give them up. At the time, my mother told me the key point of the puzzle, she said that person only can do one thing at one time, and gasping all means losing all. So she persuaded me to give up some subjects and chose physics, my excellent subjects, as "the one thing" I devoted to. At last, like my mother said, I did well in the national competition of physics and the praise made me to enter the famous university successfully.

Another disagreement is the limit of a national education. It seems no problem in developed countries, because in these countries there are excellent teaching equipment and teachers. However, in developing countries, the conditions are totally changed. Being lack of essential teaching equipment and teachers has always happened. Taking a example, in my country, especially poor districts in southwest provinces, children are enough lucky that they are capable of entering school by virtue of their poor families and the inadequate teaching equipment and teachers. You can imagine the chaos and the poor quality of education in these districts. If they are forced to teach all national curriculum, according to their teaching conditions, it is unrealistic and the most difficult task for them.

All in all, there are two aspects mentioned above demonstrating my disagreements around the opinion. Maybe the best method I guess is to teach the same is teaching all national curriculum when children are very young and these curriculum are still easy. After the children have grown enough to determine which they want to study and the national curriculum are difficult in order to students have to go along with them wholeheartedly, it is better for students to study different parts of the national curriculum.

coolwitsUID: 149150

No.1 第一篇issue 请大家批评 bow//(飘渺水云)
[看到‘飘渺水云’4个字，不看也不行罗
只是这里发文章是有规矩的，issue要表明序号，issueXX， 中间不要空格
下次注意拉 ]
Title : A nation should require all its students to study the same national curriculum until they enter college rather than allow schools in different parts of the nation to determine which academic courses to offer..

I think the purpose of the opinion[purpose of opinion? 明显不对，assertion] is to eager[???] to all of national students study completely when they are young, and decide which they really want to engage in until they are mature enough to decide correctly.[别扭] So studying the same national curriculum before they go to universities areis[] able to eliminate the unequal competition caused by different subjects so that students can receive the equal education to grow up. Although the opinion is very good, I disagree [to]it to some extent.
[开头不要让步让那么长,Although the opinion is very good, I disagree [to]it to some extent., 这才是重点麻, 可以再扩展一两句]

First, people exit discrepancy[exit， 结束？] since they are born, so some may be excellent in the math while others are prefer to arts.[好多语法错误，这句] If they are ordered to study all national curriculum, majority of they will feel unhappy because some subjects by which they don't like have to study well.[by which 纸袋哪里？] Meanwhile, some will feel very tired, by virtue of great many subjects to learn, especially the young. For instance, a famous physicist in China, YangZhenLing, is very good at theory of physics, not the experiments of Physics[not the experimental one]. So he chose the theory of physics as his main research diversion even in his high school, maybe it is impossible for him to be rewarded the praise of Nobel if he had learned all of subjects in a long time.[这句话没有根据,不要乱讲] Another example is about myself. While I was in high school, I was really long for mastering all subjects well and eager to win [in all 删掉] competitions, such as physics, math, chemist and so forth. I studied as hard as possible I could, but finally I not only found myself so
Worn out that I couldn't help snapping in classroom in the daytime but also found that all the subjects I learned became more and more unfamiliar with me[从这里断句] and the effects became so poor that I even wanted to give them up. At the time[moment], my mother told me the key point of the puzzle,[句号] she said that person only can do one thing at one time, and gasping all means losing all. So[SO在正式英语里面很少用] she persuaded me to give up some subjects and chose physics, my excellent subjects, as "the one thing" I devoted to. At last, like my mother said, I did well in the national competition of physics and the praise made me to enter the famous university successfully.

Another disagreement is the limit of [a删掉] national education. It[there] seems no problem in developed countries, because in these countries there are excellent teaching equipment and teachers. However, in developing countries, the conditions are totally changed. Being lack[lacking] of essential teaching equipment and teachers has always happened. Taking a example, in my country, especially poor districts in southwest provinces, children are enough lucky that they are capable of entering school by virtue of their poor families and the inadequate teaching equipment and teachers. You can imagine the chaos and the poor quality of education in these districts. If they are forced to teach all national curriculum, according to their teaching conditions, it is unrealistic and the most difficult task for them.
[这一段你偷换概念， national curiculum != national education]

All in all, there are two aspects mentioned above demonstrating my disagreements around the opinion. Maybe the best method I guess is to teach the same is teaching all national curriculum when children are very young and these curriculum are still easy. After the children have grown enough to determine which they want to study and the national curriculum are difficult in order to students have to go along with them wholeheartedly, it is better for students to study different parts of the national curriculum.
[好多语法错误啊， 发文章前先用word检查一下
多看看别人的文章， 精华区有本电子书《the elements of style》,
建议看看
第一篇这样不错了拉，比我第一篇好多了， 嘿嘿]

发呆的小熊UID: 139071

Title : A nation should require all its students to study the same national curriculum until they enter college rather than allow schools in different parts of the nation to determine which academic courses to offer..

I think the purpose of the opinion is to eager to all of national students study completely when they are young, and decide which(what) they really want to engage in until they are mature enough to decide correctly(这一句的表达有很多问题，结构不清楚，词语选择不当等等). So studying the same national curriculum before they go to universities are able to eliminate the unequal competition caused by different subjects so that students can receive the equal education to grow up. （这一名的结构建议用IT做前置代语，以平衡句子结构）Although the opinion is very good, I disagree it to some extent.

First, people exit（是想用EXIST吧，其实也不妥） discrepancy since they are（WERE） born, so some may be excellent in the math while others are prefer to arts. If they are ordered to study all national curriculum, majority of they will feel unhappy because some subjects by which they don't like have to study well. Meanwhile, some will feel very tired, by virtue of great many subjects to learn, especially the young. For instance, a famous physicist in China, YangZhenLing, is very good at theory of physics, not the experiments of Physics. So he chose the theory of physics as his main research diversion even in his high school, maybe it is impossible for him to be rewarded the praise of Nobel if he had learned all of subjects in a long time. Another example is about myself. While I was in high school, I was really long for mastering all subjects well and eager to win in all competitions, such as physics, math, chemist and so forth. I studied as hard as possible I could, but finally I not only found myself so
Worn out that I couldn't help snapping in classroom in the daytime but also found that all the subjects I learned became more and more unfamiliar with me and the effects became so poor that I even wanted to give them up. At the time, my mother told me the key point of the puzzle, she said that person only can do one thing at one time, and gasping all means losing all. So she persuaded me to give up some subjects and chose physics, my excellent subjects, as "the one thing" I devoted to. At last, like my mother said, I did well in the national competition of physics and the praise made me to enter the famous university successfully.

Another disagreement is the limit of a national education. It seems no problem in developed countries, because in these countries there are excellent teaching equipment and teachers. However, in developing countries, the conditions are totally changed. Being lack of essential teaching equipment and teachers has always happened. Taking a example, in my country, especially poor districts in southwest provinces, children are enough lucky that they are capable of entering school by virtue of their poor families and the inadequate teaching equipment and teachers. You can imagine the chaos and the poor quality of education in these districts. If they are forced to teach all national curriculum, according to their teaching conditions, it is unrealistic and the most difficult task for them.

All in all, there are two aspects mentioned above demonstrating my disagreements around the opinion. Maybe the best method I guess is to teach the same is teaching all national curriculum when children are very young and these curriculum are still easy. After the children have grown enough to determine which they want to study and the national curriculum are difficult in order to students have to go along with them wholeheartedly, it is better for students to study different parts of the national curriculum.

没有把整篇都看完，文中存在的语法错误、用词不当等等现象比较多，建议发贴前自己先好好检查一下会好一些。整个问题分析得倒是比较清楚，只是显得不够深入，跟题目贴得不是特别的紧。不过刚刚开始嘛，要有信心。我也是刚开始练，快要郁闷死了。

罗兰UID: 156443

我这篇用时很长，用word版检查过的，没想到还是有这摸多错误，谢谢coolwits和小熊的批改，
大家一起努力！：—）