铁心奔北欧 发表于 2014-5-13 08:42
铁心奔北欧-20140513
交作业,stockholm.
有口误,应该是well developed
1、流畅度:
不错。
2、词汇:
还行。
3、语法:
"Stockholm is built on an island."同意masterpiece的说法,建议改为"Stockholm is located on an island."
"Due to my major is Mechanic Engineer,..."是不是"Mechanical Engineering"啊?听不清,如果是的话mechanical的ch读/k/。另外"due to"相当于"because of",后面只能接名词、名词性短语或名词性从句,不可以直接加从句。建议改为"Since I'm majoring in Mechanical Engineering,..."
3、语法:speaking of a person who I like to talk with,最好加上who引导从句,要不我会以为是两个句子。
and we shared our personal ~过去时
we gave out our prediction~过去时 give out 是公开宣布;分发 的意思,我觉得用give就行了
actors personalities 都要加s
he doesn't know how to talk to his boss 第三人称用does 我觉得这句话不完整啊,应该还要加上about sth ,要不感觉怪怪的