Issue4 （commented by gdhdanny）

narkUID: 156496

4[/SIZE] "No field of study can advance significantly unless outsiders bring their knowledge and experience to that field of study."

Can one field of study get significant advancement, without any knowledge and experience from outside? The speaker asserts that the answer is no and I strongly agree with this viewpoint. Especially in this era of high-developed world, if people want to get some remarkable advancement, they need the help from other fields.

The progress in every scientific field is interacting. Nowadays, no one can predict what a significant influence may take place in the future, once one important progress in a field has been made. It may affect not only its own field of study, but also many other fields. The development in material science is one good example. We may all have the memory of a large, heavy and expensive cell phone, but what we used today is quit small, light and cheap. This is for one of the greatest advancement in material science, by which people make the capacitance and resistance smaller and cheaper, therefore the chip, widely used in modern electronic industry, can be made smaller and cheaper. Not only cell phone, most electronic appliances get benefit from this advancement. The development in the field of material science has greatly pushed the field of electronic industry forward.

Most studies now are complex and are the mixtures of various sciences. One can not expect a significant advancement without the support of experts of many other fields. Experts, of all the fields involved, work together, so that there may be a great advancement. The Manhattan project, for instance, is a program to produce atomic bomb. At the every beginning, scientists of theoretical science just knew that power in atom might be used to set off a bomb. After the scientists of quantum science proving that U235 may break down and release great power, the bomb still could not be made, because the experts of weapon manufacture could not get high-pure U235. Only when the scientists of material science got the thin film of Ni, which was used to purify U235, the first atomic bomb was born. This example illustrates the point that many studies or researches now are on the basis of many other fields. They can not make advancement alone.

To sum up, different fields of study are significantly influencing each other. Knowledge and experience in one field may be used by the people of other fields. One study work can not be separated from others. Different fields of study are also merging. Modern study work often involves work of many fields of science. With the knowledge and experience of all these fields, there may be some significant advancement.

gdhdannyUID: 125843

Can one field of study get significant advancement, without any knowledge and experience from outside? The speaker asserts that the answer is no and I strongly agree with this viewpoint. Especially in this（the） era of high-developed（highly-developed） world, if people want to get some remarkable advancement, they need the help from other fields.

The progress in every scientific field is interacting（with each other）. Nowadays, no one can predict what a significant（如果意思上有比较的意思，这里最好选一个比较级） influence may take place in the future, once one important progress in a field has been made. It may affect not only its（指代不清） own field of study, but also many other fields. The development in material science is one good example. We may all have the memory of a large, heavy and expensive cell phone, but what we used today is quit small, light and cheap. This is for one of the greatest advancement in material science, by which people make the capacitance and resistance smaller and cheaper, therefore the chip, widely used in modern electronic industry, can be made smaller and cheaper. Not only cell phone, most electronic appliances（also） get benefit from this advancement. The development in the field of material science has greatly pushed the field of electronic industry forward.
这段写的不错，例子比较到位。

Most studies now are complex and are the mixtures of various sciences（并列句写得有问题，And前后的两个分句或者短语一定是由相同语法成分构成的）. One can not expect a significant advancement without the support of experts of many other fields. Experts, of all the fields involved, work together, so that there may be a great advancement. The Manhattan project, for instance, is a program to produce atomic bomb. At the every beginning, scientists of theoretical science just knew that power in atom might be used to set off a bomb. After the scientists of quantum science proving that U235 may break down and release great power, the bomb still could not be made, because the experts of weapon manufacture could not get high-pure U235. Only when the scientists of material science got the thin film of Ni, which was used to purify U235, the first atomic bomb was born. This example illustrates the point that many studies or researches now are on the basis of many other fields. They can not make advancement alone.
例子确实太专业了。

To sum up, different fields of study are significantly influencing each other. Knowledge and experience in one field may be used by the people of other fields. One study work（study work?） can not（cannot） be separated from others. Different fields of study are also merging. Modern study work often involves work of many fields of science. With the knowledge and experience of all these fields, there may be some significant advancement.

总体来说不错，例子和论证过程把握的都很好。
语言上注意动词的使用和并列句的成分。
你的基础很好，希望能加入互助的行列中。自己提高也会很快的。

LiunaUID: 150270

感觉很好

narkUID: 156496

谢谢指教，btw，是否觉得例子太专业了不会太好？

gdhdannyUID: 125843

有点这种感觉，特别是电阻电容这类的东西，还有化学元素，看得比较头大。最关键的是，如果在专业的例子后前加上适当的引导性语言（像第二段最后一句就有些突兀），避免直接由例子说明论点，会让人感觉好些。

narkUID: 156496

恩，谢谢～