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183"As we acquire more knowledge, things do not become more comprehensible, but more complex and more mysterious."

I concede that you will find that it is getting more complex and difficult to learn new knowledge when you gave mastered some.  But it does not mean that the knowledge you learned is useless in that you are going into a deeper step.

It is true that people who study new knowledge will feel no easier to get to more knowledge or even harder.  Take me myself as an example, when I began to study the subject of Biochemistry, I thought  before class  I had already mastered not a little of basic knowledge so as to learn much deeper forward of the course only to find that I could not get the ideal or even could not get what the author's main topics.  It is not to say that what I had learned before is useless.  It is just because that the extent of knowledge is not easy enough for me to learn by myself.  This is really where a good teacher's value lies.  That is what I mean-all the difficulty you find in your learning is because you are going deeper.

However, the knowledge will never feel too much for it will have its position to work at when a proper time comes.  And we can still get the idea from my Biochemistry learning.  Although I was bogged down in learning by myself, I was so happy to find that I could quickly and easily digest the new knowledge during the class even a daily review was superfluous.  Why? It was the knowledge I learned already that I could absorb the new air more comfortably as if I was doing a daily review instead of a new knowledge class.  So we can conclude that knowledge is never too much to learn or that is never useless, it may just stay in your mind waiting for a chance to come out and do a great deal.

Furthermore, study itself is such a course that goes from easy to difficult and from single to complex, so to speak, when you want to get real and precise knowledge from one subject you would face the difficulties getting harder and harder.  That is a reason why a famous academician puts all his life into maybe a very small point of some field but would gain a great success.  The deeper the knowledge goes the harder the learners would face; maybe when it is just a little drop in the sea, but a climax of a mountain as well.

To sum up, it is very natural to face a harder difficulty to do deeper learning, and we should arm ourselves well with the fundamental knowledge with an eye to getting our own success.  


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2004-03-10

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I concede that you建议正式议论文里不要用you这种不正式的说法。 will find that it is getting more complex and difficult to learn new knowledge when you gave（have吧？） mastered some. But it does not mean that the knowledge you learned is useless in that you are going into a deeper step.

It is true that people who study new knowledge will feel no easier to get to more knowledge or even harder. Take me myself as an example, when I began to study the subject of Biochemistry, I thought before class（少that） I had already mastered not a little（直接说some即可） of basic knowledge so as to learn much deeper forward of the course only to find （这个短语不错，可是得不是地方，前面的半句太长了，放在这里反而让人摸不着头脑）that I could not get the ideal（idea吧？） or even could not get what the author's main topics. It is not to say that what I had learned before is useless. It is just because that the extent of knowledge is not easy enough for me to learn by myself. This is really where a good teacher's value lies. That is what I mean-all the difficulty you find in your learning is because you are going deeper.本段时态混乱。

However, the knowledge will never feel （feel的主语只能是人，而不是knowledge）too much for it will have its position to work at when a proper time comes. And we can still get the idea from my Biochemistry learning. Although I was bogged down in learning by myself, I was so happy to find that I could quickly and easily digest the new knowledge during the class even a daily review was superfluous. Why? It was the knowledge I learned already that I could absorb the new air more comfortably as if I was doing a daily review instead of a new knowledge class. So we can conclude that knowledge is never too much to learn or that is never useless, it may just stay in your mind waiting for a chance to come out and do a great deal.这段偏题了

Furthermore, study itself is such a course that goes from easy to difficult and from single to complex, so to speak, when you want to get real and precise knowledge from one subject you would face the difficulties getting harder and harder. That is a reason why a famous academician puts all his life into maybe a very small point of some field but would gain a great success. The deeper the knowledge goes the harder the learners would face; maybe when it is just a little drop in the sea, but a climax of a mountain as well.这段只是在重复ISSUE题目，而不是论证。如果上面已经论证得比较透彻，那么这段是不错的，问题是上文几乎没有任何论述，且有些偏题，具体看我文末评论。

To sum up, it is very natural to face a harder difficulty to do deeper learning, and we should arm ourselves well with the fundamental knowledge with an eye to getting our own success.

你并没有围绕给你的题目展开论述。题目要你论述的是“随着我们学习的深入，事物并非越来越容易理解，而是越来越复杂难测”，是否是这样？也就是说，你只要说“的确，事物越来越复杂难测”或者说“不，事物变得简单了”即可，然后对你的论点展开论述。如果我把你的第一段作为你的主题思想的话，你就偏题了。“已经学到的东西是否无用”与题目毫无关系。而你却把这一点作为你的主要论点在后文论证了好多。

而到底“事物是变复杂了还是变简单了”这一点，你却没有说。唯一有关的是你的生物课的例子。第一，光有例子没有论述是不能令人信服的，第二，我觉得这个例子也不太恰当。这只能说明你要学的东西还没弄懂而已，与题目要你论述的境界相差太远。题目的境界是什么呢？是爱因斯坦的话里的境界：“知识好象是一个圆，我学会的就是圆内的部分，而我不知道的是圆周外的部分。我学的越是多，越是感觉到自己的无知。”

你的语言还不错，但是随意了一些。最好严谨些。另外下次麻烦自己先改改再让别人帮你改。

建议你看看精华区的范文，分析他们是怎么说理的。还有这篇文章里讲的思路，非常值得学习。https://bbs.gter.net/showthre ... =%BD%CC%C2%DF%BC%AD


你这篇文章，类似的和相关的文章可能有许多前人写过，或者还有范文。你可以搜索一下，对照一下这些文章。 或参照该帖：《在本版找前人作文的方法》http://211.151.90.54/bbs/showthr ... hlight=%CC%E2%BA%C5


希望你也能多多修改其他朋友的文章。尤其是提点结构上和想法上的建议。因为你不可能每个题目都练过来啊，看别人的题目，自己脑子过一遍,既可以给别人提建议，自己又多了一次训练的机会.为别人服务的人优先得到斑竹的修改哦！

平时最好也能多多阅读，不要读过就算，要注意人家的谋篇布局、用词、构思等等，对你的作文大有好处，同时也有助于你的GRE阅读