Issue63 revised by taft

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Issue63  第1篇 让砖头来得更猛烈些吧！
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作者：寄托家园作文版普通用户     共用时间：45分3秒     477 words
从2004年2月11日9时49分到2004年2月11日10时45分
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To truly understand your own culture—no matter how you define it—requires personal knowledge of at least one other culture, one that is distinctly different from your own.
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  Learning one's own culture maybe is the most meaningful thing for each individual to do.  The author suggest that we should have the personal knowledge of at least one other culture which ensures truly understanding the meaning and the essence of our own culture. As far as I am concerned, I totally agree with the author's conclusion and my standpoint will proved in the following discussion.

To begin with, if we want to learn one thing completely, we have to, as the author suggests, learn the distinctly opposite one. When we retrospect our childhood, how did we know the color black? How did our parents teach us what is the good thing we should do? It is obvious that we learn the black by the comparsion from the color of white, and we learned the good things include honest or brave after our parents showed something bad done by other children such as cheating or talking nervously with strangers. From what I mentioned above, I can assert that, the best or maybe the only way for us to learn knowledge or acquire experience is to get know the opposite one which is distinctly different from what we want to know.

So, when we are confronting of the culture, only by learning the characteristic of others, we can acquire the essence and the pith of our own. Everyone may have the same experience that we feel even more confused to acquire our own culture after observing our friends because we find out nearly everything of us seems the same such as the way of speaking and thinking, the view towards the social or political affairs.  However, after we have learned others' culture we will find out that Chinese are more modest, American are more humerous, Japanese are more serious, and French are more romantic.  Only after the comparison, we can defined us and became truly understand our own.

Moreover, Globalization, which is the irresistible trend, make the culture more alike from each other; unless we put more concentration on comparison, we will lost our own. Children in China now recognize the Mcdonald's and KFC as their own traditional food, Chinese no longer likes to go to see the Beijing opera but they are quite interested in see action movie produced by Hollywood.  As a result, if Chinese don't understand which culture comes from American and learn the difference from Chinese culture, they will be totally assimilate and lose their own culture, not to speak of learning them.

In sum, learning a different one is the way of learning : only by learning other culture we will see the distinct characteristic of our own, only by learning other culture, we can discriminate the difference and prevent from losing our own. So, I agree with the author that learning other knowledge is a indispensible factor contributes to one to learn his own culture.

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Learning one's own culture maybe is the most meaningful thing for each individual to do. The author suggests that we should have the personal knowledge of at least one other culture which ensures truly understanding the meaning and the essence of our own culture. As far as I am concerned, I totally agree with the author's conclusion and my standpoint will proved in the following discussion.

To begin with, if we want to learn one thing completely,(comprehensively) we have to, as the author suggests, learn the distinctly(distinct) opposite ones. When we retrospect our childhood, how did we know the color black? How did our parents teach us what is the good thing (good things we should do)we should do? It is obvious that we learn the black by the comparison(comparing) from the color of white(white color), and we learned the(去掉the) good things include(including) honest or brave after our parents showed something bad done by other children such as cheating or talking nervously with strangers. From what I mentioned above, I can assert that, the best or maybe the only way for us to learn knowledge or acquire experience is to get know the opposite one which is distinctly different from what we want to know.(日常生活的例子)

So, when we are confronting of the culture, only by learning the characteristic of others, we can acquire the essence and the pith of our own. Everyone may have the same experience that we feel even more confused to acquire our own culture after observing our friends because we find out nearly everything of us seems the same such as the way of speaking and thinking(and) the view towards the social or political affairs. However, after we have learned others' culture we will find out that Chinese are more modest, American are more humerous(humorous), Japanese are more serious, and French are more romantic. Only after the comparison, we can defined us and became truly understand our own.(最后立足于truly understand没有啊？)

Moreover, Globalization, which is the irresistible trend, make(s) the culture more (and more) alike from each other; unless we put more concentration on comparison, we will lost our own. Children in China now recognize the Mcdonald's and KFC as their own traditional food, Chinese no longer likes to go to see the Beijing opera but they are quite interested in see action movie produced by Hollywood. As a result, if Chinese don't understand which(改such) culture comes from American and learn the difference from Chinese culture, they will be totally assimilate and lose their own culture, not to speak of learning them.
(指出了文化侵略的问题，但这样的化就不应该学习外来文化哦，所以我觉得这个例子不好。)

In sum, learning a different one is the way of learning : only by learning other culture we will see the distinct characteristic of our own, only by learning other culture, we can discriminate the difference and prevent from losing our own. So, I agree with the author that learning other knowledge is a indispensible factor contributes to one to learn his own culture.


（作者立足于comparison between our own culture and the other cultures, 这个基本是正确的，但我觉得笔墨可以花在 truly understand our own culture 上，比如文化渊源问题。 How our culture comes to be the way it is? 例子有日本等中国的邻国。还有一个文化的trend,因为文化是运动的，作者也指出了Hollywood and KFC,那中国文化的trend也是我们 truly understand 的一个方面；另外，紧扣trend 我们子孙需要什么样的true culture,一个文化传承问题，你的文化是不是最优的，只有优秀的文化才能发展下去，那么必然会comparison）
作者在论证上要加强，紧扣题目。我才加入gter，希望大家互相帮助。

jordaneverUID: 139243

谢谢你的修改,这篇是我今天早上写的, 一边写一边在深深地痛苦,真的太差了.

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希望楼主也可以参与到版面的讨论和互相评改当中。多看看别人的文章提提意见，对自己的提高绝对有好处，而且别人也会更加愿意光顾你的文章哦。

Good luck.