ISSUE90 （学科选择 － 找工作） 欢迎大家批评

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ISSUE90. "College students should be encouraged to pursue subjects that interest them rather than seek programs that promise entry into the job market."

应该鼓励大学生学习他们感兴趣的课程，而不是那些有工作保证的课程。

1〉        许多学生迫于压力更关注于与工作有关的课程；
2〉        学科需要均衡发展，每个学科都有其重要性，尤其要注重培养学生对基础学科的兴趣；
3〉        许多基础学科或冷门学科只要专心学习，必定有其用武之地。


College, a place equipping people with advanced knowledge and specialized skills, usually offer various courses for students and nowadays students can freely choose their favorite major. But unfortunately, many undergraduates seek programs that promise entry into the job market rather than according to their own interest, which was the original intention of the offer mentioned above. To rectify such trend, college students should be encouraged to pursue subjects that interest them.

The phenomenon that today’s students concern more on the relation between their learning and their future jobs itself should not be criticized too much, since few students follow such trend according to their own will. With the competition in job market becoming more and more drastic, students have to pay attention to their future more or less, especially his/her intention is just to lead a comfortable life which make a good job more important. The pressure is not only from inside, but also from outside. As a society changes as fast as ours, people become more pragmatic than they used to be, which in turn influence their next generations. Many students now concern much about how to manage their life after graduation, since house, car, medical, insurance, etc are all items that they must face inevitably. Thus, students surely have enough reasons to pursue programs that would benefit their searching job after graduation.

Though the phenomenon has its excuse to exist, educators should hold perspective that every discipline should be developed harmoniously and basic science should be seriously emphasized. Many students now pursuit popular majors such as computer science, electronic engineering, MBA, medicine, etc, which in turn cools down many basic disciplines. However, many natural and social science such as mathematics, chemistry, physics, biology, anthropology, economics, etc, are the foundation of various disciplines including those popular ones. If educators neglect the importance of impartment of those basic sciences, society would surely lack the energy to advance in a few decades. If no one continues to research in basic science, which in fact needs more intellectuals to engage in, the improvement of most science and technology will slow down and finally cease. From this point of view, educators should try their best to encourage students who have interest in basic science to pursue their favorites.

Nevertheless, students whose majors are not popular ones are really needed while those who take popular subjects are not always welcome. As more and more graduates of popular majors appear in the job markets, the supply has overweighed the demand in some places and will continue to happen in other areas. On the other hand, graduates of others majors have more opportunities to choose. Furthermore, student who studies for his/her interest will have a lot of fun during further education such as entering graduate school. Unutterably pleasure would appear when a new phenomenon has been discovered or a novel theory has been found during research. Thereafter as a scholar, he would gain public deference that is invaluable.

In sum, for the reasonable construction of disciplines in our society and for helping students hold a appropriate view towards knowledge, educators should encourage students to pursue their interest rather than the public fashion.

body 3感觉写得很一般，花了不少时间，希望大家多提意见。

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我要去写提纲了，晚上回来看：）

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ISSUE90. "College students should be encouraged to pursue subjects that interest them rather than seek programs that promise entry into the job market."

应该鼓励大学生学习他们感兴趣的课程，而不是那些有工作保证的课程。

1〉 许多学生迫于压力更关注于与工作有关的课程；
2〉 学科需要均衡发展，每个学科都有其重要性，尤其要注重培养学生对基础学科的兴趣；
3〉 许多基础学科或冷门学科只要专心学习，必定有其用武之地。


College, a place equipping people with advanced knowledge and specialized skills, usually offer various courses for students and nowadays students can freely choose their favorite major. But unfortunately, many undergraduates seek programs that promise entry into the job market rather than according to their own interestrather than according to....觉得有些别扭, which was the original intention of the offer mentioned above. To rectify such trend, college students should be encouraged to pursue subjects that interest them.

The phenomenon that today’s students concern more on the relation between their learning and their future jobs itself should not be criticized too much, since few students follow such trend according to their own will. With the competition in job market becoming more and more drastic, students have to pay attention to their future more or less大体上？, especially when his/her intention is just to lead a comfortable life which makes a good job more important. The pressure is not only from inside, but also from outside. As a society changes as fast as ours这句话怎么读怎么有问题, people become more pragmatic than they used to be, which in turn influence their next generations. Many students now concern much about how to manage their life after graduation, since houses, cars, medical, insurance, etc are all items that they must face inevitably. Thus, students surely have enough reasons to pursue programs that would benefit their searching job after graduation.

Though the phenomenon has its excuse to exist, educators should hold perspective that every discipline should be developed harmoniously and basic science should be seriously emphasized on?. Many students now pursuit popular majors such as computer science, electronic engineering, MBA, medicine, etc, which in turn cools down many basic disciplines基础性学科是这么说吗？我也不知道. However, many natural and social science such as mathematics, chemistry, physics, biology, anthropology, economics, etc, are the foundation of various disciplines including those popular ones. If educators neglect the importance of impartment of those basic sciences, society would surely lack the energy to advance in a few decades. If no one continues to research in basic science, which in fact needs more intellectuals to engage in, the improvement of most science and technology will slow down and finally cease. From this point of view, educators should try their best to encourage students who have interest in basic science to pursue their favorites.

Nevertheless, students whose majors are not popular ones可省略 are really needed while those who take popular subjects are not always welcome. As more and more graduates of popular majors appear in the job markets, the supply has overweighed the demand inat? some places and this situation will continue to happen in other areas. On the other hand, graduates of otherss多余 majors have more opportunities to choose. Furthermore, student这是什么意思，单复数都说不通呀 who studies for his/her interest will have a lot of fun during further education such as entering graduate school. Unutterably pleasure would appear when a new phenomenon has been discovered or a novel theory has been found发现理论？create或者invent更好吧？ during research. Thereafter as a scholar, he would gain public deference that is invaluable.

In sum, for the reasonable construction of disciplines in our society and for helping students hold a appropriate view towards knowledge, educators should encourage students to pursue their interest rather than the public fashion.

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1、刚开始看提纲时，觉得有些摸不着头脑，等看完全文后，又琢磨了半天，突然发现楼主的提纲里，各个段落的展开有逻辑性在里面，一步一步的推进，呵呵
2、body3论证的不太充分，尤其是On the other hand，刚说完这一句，又来了一个Furthermore，伤其十指不如断其一指，这里不如把On the other hand那一句直接去掉，集中精力论证Furthermore
3、有些句子觉得比较费解，可我也提不出什么改进意见，水平不行呀，汗~~~~

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College, a place equipping people with advanced knowledge and specialized skills, usually offer various courses for students and nowadays students can freely choose their favorite major 用and来连接这两个部分好像怪怪的. But unfortunately, many undergraduates seek programs that promise entry into the job market rather than according to their own interest rather than前后的两个部分不对称, which was the original intention of the offer mentioned above.这个which引导的从句什么意思啊？ To rectify such trend, college students should be encouraged to pursue subjects that interest them.

The phenomenon that today’s students concern more on the relation between their learning and their 可省略 future jobs careeritself should not be criticized too much, since few students follow such trend according to their own will. With the competition in job market becoming more and more drastic, students have to pay attention to their future more or less, especially his/her intention is just to lead a comfortable life which make a good job more important 非限制性定语从句，前加逗号. The pressure is not only from inside, but also from outside. As a society changes as fast as ours, people become more pragmatic than they used to be, which in turn influence their next generations 为什么突然提到下一代？. Many students now concern much about how to manage their life after graduation, since house, car, medical, insurance, etc are all items that they must face inevitably. Thus, students surely have enough reasons to pursue programs that would benefit their searching job after graduation.

Though the phenomenon has its excuse to exist, educators should hold perspective that every discipline should be developed harmoniously and basic science should be seriously emphasized. Many students now pursuit popular majors such as computer science, electronic engineering, MBA, medicine, etc, which in turn cools down many basic disciplines. However, many natural and social science such as mathematics, chemistry, physics, biology, anthropology, economics, etc, are the foundation of various disciplines including those popular ones. If educators neglect the importance of impartment of those basic sciences, society would surely lack the energy to advance in a few decades. If no one continues to research in basic science, which in fact needs more intellectuals to engage in, the improvement of most science and technology will slow down and finally cease. From this point of view, educators should try their best to encourage students who have interest in basic science to pursue their favorites.

Nevertheless, students whose majors are not popular ones are really needed while those who take popular subjects are not always welcome. As more and more graduates of popular majors appear in the job markets, the supply has overweighed the demand in some places and will continue to happen in other areas. On the other hand, graduates of others other majors have more opportunities to choose. Furthermore, student who studies for his/her interest will have a lot of fun during further education such as entering graduate school. Unutterably pleasure would appear when a new phenomenon has been discovered or a novel theory has been found during research. Thereafter as a scholar, he would gain public deference that is invaluable.

In sum, for the reasonable construction of disciplines in our society and for helping students hold a an appropriate view towards knowledge, educators should encourage students to pursue their interest rather than the public fashion.

全文的思路挺清楚的，语言上我也看不出什么太大的问题，比我的强多了，继续努力吧！

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[QUOTE]No.1  ISSUE90 （学科选择 － 找工作） 欢迎大家批评
ISSUE90. "College students should be encouraged to pursue subjects that interest them rather than seek programs that promise entry into the job market."

应该鼓励大学生学习他们感兴趣的课程，而不是那些有工作保证的课程。

1〉 许多学生迫于压力更关注于与工作有关的课程；
2〉 学科需要均衡发展，每个学科都有其重要性，尤其要注重培养学生对基础学科的兴趣；
3〉 许多基础学科或冷门学科只要专心学习，必定有其用武之地。


College, a place equipping people with advanced knowledge and specialized skills, usually offer various courses for students and nowadays students can freely choose their favorite major. But unfortunately, many undergraduates seek programs that promise entry into the job market rather than according to their own interest, which was the original intention of the offer mentioned above. To rectify such trend, college students should be encouraged to pursue subjects that interest them.

The phenomenon that today’s students concern more on the relation between their learning and their future jobs itself should not be criticized too much, since few students follow such trend according to their own will. With the competition in job market becoming more and more drastic, students have to pay attention to their future more or less, especially his/her intention is just to lead a comfortable life which make a good job more important. The pressure is not only from inside, but also from outside. As a society changes as fast as ours, people become more pragmatic than they used to be, which in turn influence their next generations. Many students now concern much about how to manage their life after graduation, since house, car, medical, insurance, etc are all items that they must face inevitably. Thus, students surely have enough reasons to pursue programs that would benefit their searching job after graduation.

Though the phenomenon has its excuse to exist, educators should hold perspective that every discipline should be developed harmoniously and basic science should be seriously emphasized. Many students now pursuit popular majors such as computer science, electronic engineering, MBA, medicine, etc, which in turn cools down many basic disciplines. However, many natural and social science such as mathematics, chemistry, physics, biology, anthropology, economics, etc, are the foundation of various disciplines including those popular ones. If educators neglect the importance of impartment of those basic sciences, society would surely lack the energy to advance in a few decades. If no one continues to research in basic science, which in fact needs more intellectuals to engage in, the improvement of most science and technology will slow down and finally cease. From this point of view, educators should try their best to encourage students who have interest in basic science to pursue their favorites.

Nevertheless, students whose majors are not popular ones are really needed while those who take popular subjects are not always welcome. As more and more graduates of popular majors appear in the job markets, the supply has overweighed the demand in some places and will continue to happen in other areas. On the other hand, graduates of others majors have more opportunities to choose. Furthermore, student who studies for his/her interest will have a lot of fun during further education such as entering graduate school. Unutterably pleasure would appear when a new phenomenon has been discovered or a novel theory has been found during research. Thereafter as a scholar, he would gain public deference that is invaluable.

In sum, for the reasonable construction of disciplines in our society and for helping students hold a appropriate view towards knowledge, educators should encourage students to pursue their interest rather than the public fashion.

body 3感觉写得很一般，花了不少时间，希望大家多提意见。
整体来看，结构很完整，分论点层层推进，很值得我学习！！
但我觉得，有些地方论证的角度有问题！
分论点2，你列的computer science, electronic engineering, MBA, medicine, etc,是热门学科而mathematics, chemistry, physics, biology, anthropology, economics, etc是基础学科
MBA--economics，electronic engineering--physics，他们是包含于的关系。还是说清是纯理论的东西没人感兴趣！
body 3 感觉你认为都没出路了，才当大学教授 :D
你可以说，社会分工越来越细，每个领域都有工作机会。

一点建议，仅供参考！！