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发表于 2004-3-14 03:38:30 |只看该作者 |倒序浏览

今天狒狒从睁眼到吃完晚饭都没离开电脑一直都在gter看文章以及扫荡精华区。经过批改几片同学们的作文，和看了精华区的一些景点材料，终于在狒狒最为苦恼的文章结构和段落展开上有所顿悟，逻辑思维似乎也开窍了，于是去教室潜心研究几篇经典sample的展开，突然感觉思维与之吻合了，于是写了（东方教程）sample 2的详细提纲，又拟成文，希望大家能拍砖，评论一下狒狒的文章。实在不知道该题目是否是issue题目。

Pp3中的 Topic2

"It is unfortunate that today's educators place so much emphasis on finding out what students want to include in the curriculum and then giving it to them.  It is the educators' duty to determine the curriculum and the students' duty to study what is presented to them."

提纲：
P：应当增加学生选课的自由度，但是一些学科还是要由学校来拟定必修。
b1：因为学生的情况各不相同，为了能扬其所长，应当让学生更多的选课
（学生情况如何不同；增加学生选课如何能对学生起正面作用）

小b2：Simply put, 用反证：如果都是学校制定的必修课，则会对学生起到什么负面作用

b3：因为目前学生选课自由度太低，大部分课程学校规定，所以应当增加选课度（事实论据）

b4：让步。尽管如此学校仍然要规定一些必修课。
   （有必要，有正面作用；因为基础课常常枯燥等，学生不会选，或忽视）

The speaker put a premise that the educators emphasis more on what students want to put in the curriculum rather than establish the curriculum for students, and claim that educators should take as a duty that they set down the curriculum.  However, as far as I am concerned, the premise is not true but opposite.  In my point of view, rights for students to decide their curriculum should be enhanced, on the other hand, the educators should set down a curriculum of some basic subjects of necessity.

First, the educators should offer more chances for students to select subjects with desirability in that students are rather different from each other, as to speak, everyone has strongpoint and weakness.  Endowed with rights to select the favorite subjects, students may devote themselves to their learning with high enthusiasms and great power for they love the subjects which are selected by them.  Furthermore, subjects in which students are interested. Generally speaking, are the subjects at which they are good.  Thus, young men would get down to their learning with a born predominance which may lead them to the very success much more directly and easily.  Also, we can save existed though few young prodigies by preventing them from sinking down into the mire of triteness with an eye to releasing them from the mental chains to dedicate their talent to what they like.  Accordingly, of course, educators should offer more chances for students to decide their own destiny.

Simply put, if the whole curriculum is made by the educators without students' participation, not only do the young have emotion of discontent, but would pull down those who may be Einsteins or Newtons in the future.  It is a tragedy for human society as well as a kind of crime of the scared educators.

Second, rights for students to make their favorite curriculums is so limited that the energy of the young is depressed; so the educators should take measures to change status in quo in order to lend a colorful stage for our suns of future.  Students in our Univ. always complain that there are a host of boring and useless in the curriculum, but those that they love and thought to be more useful are excluded.  There is convincing evidence that may be general to students all over China.  In Chinese universities, several kinds of subjects called public subjects, which are some means of political education, are compulsion subjects which are useless at all as known to all the students in China. Such subjects waste our golden youth and nibble at our enthusiasms.  Hence, such educational system should be improved at once.

Admittedly, educators must design the curriculum in a way so as to ensure that the basic subjects of great use ness would be taken by all the students.  There are mainly two reasons to sustain this point.  On the one hand, these subjects are so important that they are the bases for students' further learning and they could shape their minds in a logical and rational way.  Advanced Mathematics, a perfect example, may supply such ways of thinking for both arts' and philosophy's students.  On the other hand, students may ignore such fundamental subjects for that they are always goes without attainment and seems boring.  Accordingly, Educators should not give out all their rights.

To sum up, offered more chances to select subjects, the students would make it better in their learning fields with a proper guide of the educators.

狒狒写的时候已经很晚了~~可能神志不清了~~~所以似乎没达到预期的效果~~~太困了！

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