Issue26 请多指教，倒数第八天！

caleUID: 150437

26."Most people would agree that buildings represent a valuable record of any society's past, but controversy arises when old buildings stand on ground that modern planners feel could be better used for modern purposes. In such situations, modern development should be given precedence over the preservation of historic buildings so that contemporary needs can be served."

After careful and objective analysis about the issue whether modern development should be given precedence over the preservation of historic buildings, I find my view principally contradicting with the author's. In my opinion, despite of the importance of the development of the modern
society, we cannot ignore the special point of the existence of the historic building and their indispensable position in people's hearts. In the following discussion, I will show my evidence to substantiate my view.

In the first place, usually, some old buildings can be considered as a combination of aesthetic, architectural, cultural and historical values. Their aesthetic and architectural characteristics are always representative of the culture in a certain period, and thus are valuable in the study of cultural traits in different era.  Furthermore, Such building are particularly valued by the people not only for their outstanding aesthetic and architectural traits, but also for their special function as a symbol of history of a city or even a nation. Usually, the old buildings are just like a test book of history, it testified the occurrence of certain historical events that exert far-reaching influence on the nation’s consequent development, as the happening location of them. For example, the remains of Yuanmingyuan in China, will certainly arouse almost all of the Chinese both the pride in the once prosperity and powerfulness in China's history and the shame of the indelible experience of being invaded by the alliance of eight countries. Therefore, the existence of the historic building could always remind the people of the glory and shame of their precursor and motivate them to realize their historical responsibility while enjoying their life.

In the second place, historic building always serves as important resource of tourism, which attract the tourist all over the world. Such buildings are always a significant part of a certain culture and thus could represent the level of its cultural development in a certain period. We cannot skip the Forbidden City in China, when referring the role of historic buildings as a representative of a culture and a resource of tourism. The Forbidden City was built hundreds of years ago, and it is where the emperor lived in Dynasty Ming and Qing. It was build by the most experienced, skillful architects and craftsman at that time, and therefore concentrated the pith of Chinese cultural achievement, which is accumulated by more than 5000 years. It annually attract many foreign tourist to Beijing to have personal look at the most majestic and splendid palace in the world, and then serves indirectly to promote the multicultural communication and the financial revenue of China.  

In the final analysis, although it is necessary for us to be aware of the significant roles of some special old buildings, we should also make it clear that merely old buildings do not mean historic buildings, and not all of the old buildings are worthy of preservation. If the building, no matter how long its history is, is just a plebeian one of little peculiar historical and cultural values, we should make way for the municipal development by dismantling it. Therefore, to ensure both the effective preservation of the buildings, which are the precious heritage handed down from our forefather, and the need of the modernization of the current society, we have to set a certain principle as the criteria upon which can we decide whether a building worth our effort to protect it.  

To sum up, I disagree with the author with some reservation. Through the discussion mentioned above, we can easily reach the conclusion that although not all of the old buildings should be given the precedence over the modern development, it is wise for us to take a meticulous evaluation about the old building before the conduction of modern construction and intentionally avoid the location of some historic buildings while planning for the development of municipal development, if necessary.

caleUID: 150437

沉的好快，顶一下！

xqmelissaUID: 140370

OK
我现在给你改，稍等

绞尽脑汁UID: 143951

After careful and objective analysis about the issue whether modern development should be given precedence over the preservation of historic buildings, I find my view principally contradicting with the author's. In my opinion, despite of the importance of the development of the modern
society(三个of看得人眼花，最后一个不如改为the modern society'development), we cannot ignore the special point of the existence of the historic building and their indispensable position in people's hearts. In the following discussion, I will show my evidence to substantiate my view.(开头很清楚，不错！)

In the first place, usually, some old buildings can be considered as a combination of aesthetic, architectural, cultural and historical values. Their aesthetic and architectural characteristics are always representative of the culture in a certain period, and thus are valuable in the study of cultural traits in different era. Furthermore, Such building are particularly valued by the people not only for their outstanding aesthetic and architectural traits, but also for their special function as a symbol of history of a city or even a nation. Usually, the old buildings are just like a test book of history, it testified the occurrence of certain historical events that exert far-reaching influence on the nation’s consequent development, as the happening location of them. For example, the remains of Yuanmingyuan in China, will certainly arouse almost all of the Chinese both the pride in the once prosperity and powerfulness in China's history and the shame of the indelible experience of being invaded by the alliance of eight countries. Therefore, the existence of the historic building could always remind the people of the glory and shame of their precursor and motivate them to realize their historical responsibility while enjoying their life.

In the second place, historic building always serves as important resource of tourism, which attract the tourist all over the world.(这个论点耳目一新，好！） Such buildings are always a significant part of a certain culture and thus could represent the level of its cultural development in a certain period. We cannot skip the Forbidden City in China, when referring the role of historic buildings as a representative of a culture and a resource of tourism. The Forbidden City was built hundreds of years ago, and （it is the place where）where the emperor lived in Dynasty Ming and Qing. It was build by the most experienced, skillful architects and craftsman at that time, and therefore concentrated the pith of Chinese cultural achievement, which is accumulated by more than 5000 years. It annually attract many foreign tourist to Beijing to have personal look at the most majestic and splendid palace in the world, and then serves indirectly to promote the multicultural communication and the financial revenue of China.

In the final analysis, although it is necessary for us to be aware of the significant roles of some special old buildings, we should also make it clear that merely old buildings do not mean historic buildings, and not all of the old buildings are worthy of preservation（加进一个old building是不是远了点，可不可以直接讲到historic building？个人意见）. If the building, no matter how long its history is, is just a plebeian one of little peculiar historical and cultural values, we should make way for the municipal development by dismantling it. Therefore, to ensure both the effective preservation of the buildings, which are the precious heritage handed down from our forefather, and the need of the modernization of the current society, we have to set a certain principle as the criteria upon which can we decide whether a building worth（worthy of） our effort to protect it.

To sum up, I disagree with the author with some reservation. Through the discussion mentioned above, we can easily reach the conclusion that although not all of the old buildings should be given the precedence over the modern development, it is wise for us to take a meticulous evaluation about the old building before the conduction of modern construction and intentionally avoid the location of some historic buildings while planning for the development of municipal development, if necessary.
总的来说，文章结构很清楚，语言上也进步不小，是限时的吗？
关于body3的让步我保留自己的意见，同时也很想知道你的理解。
最后几天cale兄继续加油，调整好心态！你一定没问题的！等你的好消息！
PS：前天开始限时，感觉很不好，很难在速度和质量上两全，想听听你的建议。

xqmelissaUID: 140370

26."Most people would agree that buildings represent a valuable record of any society's past, but controversy arises when old buildings stand on ground that modern planners feel could be better used for modern purposes. In such situations, modern development should be given precedence over the preservation of historic buildings so that contemporary needs can be served."

After careful and objective analysis about the issue whether modern development should be given precedence over the preservation of historic buildings, I find my view principally contradicting with the author's. In my opinion, despite of the importance of the development of the modern society, we cannot ignore the special point of the existence of the historic building and their indispensable position in people's hearts. In the following discussion, I will show my evidence to substantiate my view.

In the first place, usually, some old buildings can be considered as a combination of aesthetic, architectural, cultural and historical values. Their aesthetic and architectural characteristics are always representative of the culture in a certain period, and thus are valuable in the study of cultural traits in different era eras. Furthermore, Such building buildings are particularly valued by the people people not only for their outstanding aesthetic and architectural traits, but also for their special function as a symbol of history of a city or even a nation. Usually, the old buildings are just like a test book of history a history book, it which testified the occurrence of certain historical events that exert far-reaching influence on the nation’s consequent development, as the happening location of them. For example, the remains of Yuanmingyuan in China, will cut down “will” certainly arouse almost all of the Chinese Chinese both the pride in the once prosperity and powerfulness in China's Chinese history and the shame of the indelible experience of being invaded by the alliance of eight countries. Therefore, the existence of the historic building could always remind the people of the glory and shame of their precursor and motivate them to realize their historical responsibility while enjoying their life.

In the second place, historic building always serves as important resource of tourism, which attract the tourist all over the world. Such buildings are always a significant part of a certain culture and thus could represent the level of its cultural development in a certain period. We cannot skip the Forbidden City in China, when referring the role of historic buildings as a representative of a culture and a resource of tourism. The Forbidden City was built hundreds of years ago, and it is where the emperor lived in Dynasty Ming and Qing. It was build by the most experienced, skillful architects and craftsman at that time, and therefore concentrated the pith of Chinese cultural achievement, which is accumulated by more than 5000 years. It annually attract many foreign tourist to Beijing to have personal look at the most majestic and splendid palace in the world, and then serves indirectly to promote the multicultural communication and the financial revenue of China.
本段意在说明古代建筑吸引游客，但是没有深入分析其原因，而举了个怎么看怎么有点向在讲故事的例子，其实你可以从这个例子入手，深入分析一下啊，你觉得呢？

In the final analysis, although it is necessary for us to be aware of the significant roles of some special old buildings, we should also make it clear that merely old buildings do not mean historic buildings, and not all of the old buildings are worthy of preservation. If the building, no matter how long its history is, is just a plebeian one of little peculiar historical and cultural values, we should make way for the municipal development by dismantling it. Therefore, to ensure both the effective preservation of the buildings, which are the precious heritage handed down from our forefather, and the need of the modernization of the current society, we have to set a certain principle as the criteria upon which can we decide whether a building worth our effort to protect it.
让步，放在最后，不错！

To sum up, I disagree with the author with some reservation. Through the discussion mentioned above, we can easily reach the conclusion that although not all of the old buildings should be given the precedence over the modern development, it is wise for us to take a meticulous evaluation about the old building before the conduction of modern construction and intentionally avoid the location of some historic buildings while planning for the development of municipal development, if necessary.
语言没有仔细看，大致扫下来感觉语言还可以，至少意思都能够清楚的表示出来了，不过还是有一些小的语法问题，仔细检查一下吧。

思路比较清晰，二段的问题我指出来了，你再想一下吧。

但是觉得模版的痕迹太深，建议少使用模版，或者形成你自己风格化的模版，这个一看就是新东方的那套，考试时慎用吧。

你这篇文章，类似的和相关的文章可能有许多前人写过，或者还有范文。你可以搜索一下，对照一下这些文章。 或参照该帖：《在本版找前人作文的方法》http://211.151.90.54/bbs/showthr ... hlight=%CC%E2%BA%C5

另外，希望你也多改改其他人的文章，对大家都是一个提高。

加油！

caleUID: 150437

呵呵，谢谢绞尽脑汁的修改和鼓励，第三段我之所以引入old building，就是想说明并不是所有的老建筑都有保留价值，因此要区分old building 和 historic building, 可能是我在表达上有点问题，我一会先改改，改完了在发上来。
这篇文章本来 是限时的，但写完了以后自己感觉它烂的让我无法忍受，所以就大改了一下，呵呵，献丑了。

to xqmelissa： 先谢谢了，我模考完了回来看，呵呵

对了，有一个问题要请教二位，以前我一直偏重issue，但最近感觉argument反而不能在规定时间那完成，而且质量也不敢恭维，有什么好的方法吗？没几天就要考了。

dezhiUID: 156141

加油，cale，
调整好心态，祝你成功！

caleUID: 150437

谢谢大家了，感动ing
模板的问题我会注意的，我觉得主要是开头和结尾，我在改改。

绞尽脑汁UID: 143951

最初由 cale 发布
[B]呵呵，谢谢绞尽脑汁的修改和鼓励，第三段我之所以引入old building，就是想说明并不是所有的老建筑都有保留价值，因此要区分old building 和 historic building, 可能是我?.

以下省略...... [/B]

我觉得historic building可以包括old building了，没必要再扯进old building，可以直接说不是所有的historic building都是有很大的价值，值得preservation。
argument的话只能多练了，熟悉路子，找找感觉，最好再写些提纲

caleUID: 150437

可是我觉得从historic本身的意思讲，应该是有历史意义的意思吧，既然有历史意义，就不能拆呀，我觉得我前面就是这么写的呀，所以才引入old building, hehe.

绞尽脑汁UID: 143951

我刚才查了字典，historic的确有重要历史意义的意思，是我理解错了，呵呵

zeus_meUID: 157807

After careful and objective analysis about the issue whether modern development should be given precedence over the preservation of historic buildings, I find my view principally contradicting with the author's. In my opinion, despite of the importance of the development of the modern society, we cannot ignore the special point of the existence of the historic building and their indispensable position in people's hearts. In the following discussion, I will show my evidence to substantiate my view.

In the first place, usually, some old buildings can be considered as a combination of aesthetic, architectural, cultural and historical values. Their aesthetic and architectural characteristics are always representative of the culture in a certain period, and thus are valuable in the study of cultural traits in different era. Such building are particularly valued by the people for their outstanding aesthetic and architectural traits, for their special function as a symbol of history of a city or even a nation. Usually, the old buildings are just like a test book of history, it testified the occurrence of certain historical events that exert far-reaching influence on the nation’s consequent development, as the happening location of them. For example, the remains of Yuanmingyuan in China, will certainly arouse almost all of the Chinese both the pride in the once prosperity and powerfulness in China's history and the shame of the indelible experience of being invaded by the alliance of eight countries. Therefore, the existence of the historic building could always remind the people of the glory and shame of their precursor and motivate them to realize their historical responsibility while enjoying their life.
段落内层次很清晰，不过，好像最后一句总结和开头不太一致，开头说个方面的优点，而结尾只谈到了历史意义。。似乎不妥，在考虑考虑。

In the second place, historic building always serves as important resource of tourism, which attract the tourist all over the world（为与结尾呼应，我认为应该提及如文化交流，增加收入等。）. Such buildings are always a significant part of a certain culture and thus could represent the level of its cultural development in a certain period. We cannot skip the Forbidden City in China, when referring the role of historic buildings as a representative of a culture and a resource of tourism. The Forbidden City was built hundreds of years ago, and it is where the emperor lived in Dynasty Ming and Qing. It was build by the most experienced, skillful architects and craftsman at that time, and therefore concentrated the pith of Chinese cultural achievement（很精妙的语句）, which is accumulated by more than 5000 years. It annually attract many foreign tourist to Beijing to have personal look at the most majestic and splendid palace in the world, and then serves indirectly to promote the multicultural communication and the financial revenue of China.

In the final analysis, although it is necessary for us to be aware of the significant roles of some special old buildings, we should also make it clear that merely old buildings do not mean historic buildings, and not all of the old buildings are worthy of preservation. If the building, no matter how long its history is, is just a plebeian one of little peculiar historical and cultural values, we should make way for the municipal development by dismantling it. Therefore, to ensure both the effective preservation of the buildings, which are the precious heritage handed down from our forefather, and the need of the modernization of the current society, we have to set a certain principle as the criteria upon which can we decide whether a building worth our effort to protect it. 词汇不错，很多都相当好，如dismantle

To sum up, I disagree with the author with some reservation. Through the discussion mentioned above, we can easily reach the conclusion that although not all of the old buildings should be given the precedence over the modern development, it is wise for us to take a meticulous evaluation about the old building before the conduction of modern construction and intentionally avoid the location of some historic buildings while planning for the development of municipal development, if necessary.

lookforjoyUID: 53428

语言没有仔细看，大致扫下来感觉语言还可以，至少意思都能够清楚的表示出来了，不过还是有一些小的语法问题，仔细检查一下吧