issue173 paisley imong点评

cherryzhaoUID: 158214

真恶心这种抽象的题，简直是精神枯竭。第四段实在是写不下去了。大家帮帮提供点例子吧。

173."Originality does not mean thinking something that was never thought before; it means putting old ideas together in new ways." 173． 创意不是指想人们没有想过的东西；而是指把旧的观点放在一起形成新的观点

The speaker asserts that originality only means putting old ideas together in new ways, which maybe true in some conditions, however, it cannot be applied to every fields of the world. In my opinion, originality not only means putting old ideas together in new ways but also thinking something that was never thought before.

Originality means proposing new ideas, exploring new possibilities and putting forward new solutions to questions. In this aspect, originality can equal to the word "inventiveness", which is also used to depict the ability of inventing things or ideas that has never emerged in the real world. There are numerous inventions in various areas accompaning with the development of history and society. Telephone, internet, mobile telephone are inventions in the communication field; abacus, calculator, computer are the intellective fruit of human kind; ship, train, airplane changed our ways of transportation, all of these are original works which were just a dream or even fantastic thinking before they appeared , not to say to  be used widespread among the masses. Originality derives from the desire to advance and to facilitate; from the clairvoyance to observe every subtle relationship between things among them; from the stimulus to develop a new world..

On the other hand, originality also means rearranging old things in a new arrangement, changing the way we think of old ideas or covering with a new appearance on old objects. All of these are based on the word "old" because without the old things the new ones can not be thrived and developed; such activities also call for a capability, that is , creativity. Creativity is an ability  with which  individuals  can create surprising and  ingenious ideas and works. Have you ever seen an exhibition composed of works that are made of various garbages like rubbish bins, shattered potteries, broken besoms and so on. You may consider them real garbages in the first  glimpse, however, after careful  observation you find they convey the ideas and thinking of the artist who are willing to express themselves to the public or evoke the public awareness of some ethical subjects. They don't change the structures and the internal fabrics of the materials they work with, but only put their creativies on the objects. So originality dose not mean some earthshaking ideas but your own creativity to express your own ideas.

Although there are two different definitions of originality, the two are not extreamly separate from each other. Every field we are dealing with, no matter the pure academic circles or the miscellaneous area of art, both definition are used on individuals and their works in those fields.

Consequently, due to the analysis and reason mentioned above, which sometimes correlate with one another to generate an integrate whole and thus become more persuasive than any one of them, it could be safely concluded that originality means thinking something that was never thought before or putting old ideas in a new way and both of these meanings are right and in different fields.

paisleyUID: 64183

你的思路很清楚，语言也基本上过关，不过小错误还是有一些，尤其是后两段，比如
the two are not extreamly（这个拼写错误，而且太极端，尽量避免使用） separate from each other（from each other完全可以拿掉）.这句话总觉得别扭，说the two are not irrelevant就好。

我觉得你在开头就把originality和creativity的区别 提出来比较好。虽然我觉得你这样区分有些牵强。根据你的开头，我原本以为你要区分不同的学科和领域来说明到底什么才叫做ORIGINIATILY的

还有就是你举的例都是很具体的，但是这个题目显然与抽象思维、艺术、学术研究关系更大。我建议你多举这方面的例子。如果你学过新制度经济学，“交易费用”这个概念就是最好的例子。或者呢，你也可以说说一些当代的艺术作品甚至服装设计。它们把东方和西方的特色结合起来，在东方基础上加如西方的元素或精神，从而成为有创意的作品，这就是题目说的东西了。我一时想不到更多更好的例子，你可以自己再想想。

你这篇文章，类似的和相关的文章可能有许多前人写过，或者还有范文。你可以搜索一下，对照一下这些文章。 或参照该帖：《在本版找前人作文的方法》http://211.151.90.54/bbs/showthr ... hlight=%CC%E2%BA%C5
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希望你也能多多修改其他朋友的文章。尤其是提点结构上和想法上的建议。因为你不可能每个题目都练过来啊，看别人的题目，自己脑子过一遍,既可以给别人提建议，自己又多了一次训练的机会.为别人服务的人优先得到斑竹的修改哦！

cherryzhaoUID: 158214

谢谢了

imongUID: 140258

立意不错 表达的时候却没能把问题说的很清楚

看看这样几个小动作：去掉第4段 第二段最开头加上on the one hand，第二段和第三段的两个TS里面的mean都换掉 至少换成involve，或者进一步调整后面用词之后换成include/suggest/require等等之类的

这样简单的几个小动作之后 文章的结构和基本立意上是否就立刻增色不少呢？;)