issue132 改改开头，2分变5分 by imong

imongUID: 140258

In addition, the humanities and the social sciences interact each other to improve them together. Though the humanities and the social sciences are different with each other, but in some situations they do have effects on one another. In order to understand the gist of the statement, it is necessary to see an example. The Renaissance, which took place in the Middle Age in Europe, can prove that the humanities and the social sciences work together. The purpose of Renaissance was to free people's minds from the religion and through it humanities and the social sciences made a great progress. In Renaissance many famous artistic works were created, which reflected the demand that human should not be restrained by the religion. Art is one of the most important parts of the humanities.（这句话尤其冒得毫没来由） Many authors in the Italy, Germany, France, England, and other countries created a large number of masterpieces. They appealed that people should not be restricted by the domain of kings and religions. 同一个意思翻来覆去说了3遍. reiterate就在此。累赘。Humanity.. in which art... functions in such a way... 基本上要表述的是这样的一个关系，但是整体结构不清不楚，看起来费劲。These works have large influence on the thinks in the French Revolution. In the French Revolution, some people proposed many meaningful ideas, such as the equality in the front of law, the power separating into three parts, and so on. They said that these opinions are thought by the inspiration of the works created in Renaissance. Consequently, the humanities and the social science do act together.

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谢谢imong
Art is one of the most important parts of the humanities.（这句话尤其冒得毫没来由）
我是想把humanities 具体化，所以加了这一句，发现加到哪都不合适，所以就在中间加了这么一句，看来把这句删了还好些

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哎，又被作为反面教材，什么时候才能作为正面例子啊！？