issue144

davidjackyUID: 135962

issue144
It is the artist, not the critic, who gives society something of lasting value.
现时没写完，改了一篇。帮忙看看结构问题，他们一致认为我构思有问题。汗。。。

Overwhelmingly influenced by the soaring development of the media, some people assert that critics who evaluate works of art such as novels, films, paintings, music and the like give something of lasting value to society. The author, however, argues that it is artists who create these works and therefore make them lasting. As for me, as a matter of fact, I will contend that critics, instead of artists or art, play a considerable role in perpetuating works of art in that only critics can make people understand the art well and improve them into a higher level, both of which are beneficial to endure a kind of art for ever.

To begin with, the critics and their criticism can make the public to make a good understanding of the works of artists so that these outstanding works can be preserved and inherited from generation to generation. As we all know, not each of the works of art can be approachable or acceptable to the populace commonly without sufficient knowledge of some abstract and abstruse arts for example a painting of expressionism. Fortunately, critics who are interested and proficient in these works invariably are willing to offer the public some thoughtful and instructive (指导性的，哪个词比较好？)understanding of the art, which helps people recognize or familiarize the art and then appreciate it with their own personal angel. If had not the critics commented on Mona Lisa of Da. Vinci which is one of the most influential paintings, people would have been undoubtedly bogged down into swamp so that they could gain little. As a result, Mona Lisa was little likely to be praised by hundreds of people at each country and at any period. Moreover, when it comes to the Jazz, a famous classical music, it is the same. At the very beginning, some Whites of the United States criticized such music as an impenetrable kind of art and thus rejected it without any patience. Meanwhile, on the other hand, others commenced to show about Jazz deep concern just aroused from these criticisms so as to be fond of or even infatuated with them. Then, the whole nation was deeply attracted by its strong but flexible, delightful rhythm. Obviously, criticism impelled the popularity and development of Jazz to some extent.

In addition, a constructive criticism could help artists hone their skills and promote their works' level, thus contributing to the development and perpetuation of a motley collection of art. As a famous philosopher once said, "there is no perfect in the art, we have no better choice to ceaselessly hone our skills to improve it."  Every piece of outstanding art, from the ancient Greek anthology to the modern Oriental civilization, was virtually more or less modified or adjusted by the creators or producers after adopting some valuable or suggestive criticisms. A good example in this point is that Hollywood's directors invariably invited some noted critics to watch the pre-issued films(电影的预演，有没有比较权威的说法？) at the expense of great rewards. Why do so? An exact reason might be that from another or special angel these critics would offer director some convincing and thoughtful critique that is always beneficial to ameliorate the films, thus adducing an everlasting value and an abundant profits as well. In brief, critics play a considerable role in the development of the art.

Admittedly, without art created by gifted and talent artists, critics would probably lose their jobs, just like fish leaves water; in a sense, art is the precondition of survival of the criticism. Again, as a matter of fact, critics sometimes make some prejudicial and even erroneous conclusions. Some critics, for example, ever tremendously criticized and even proposed to prohibit the emancipation of feminism and sexualism after the World War Two, nonetheless, they had to keep silent or took what they had said with regard to the advancement of the whole human civilization.

In conclusion, due to analyses and reasons mentioned above, I hope that it has been shown that it is critics who contribute to society something of enduring value at least for the two great factors-helping the populace to make a good comprehension on the works of artists and improving their works' level to some extent. Regarding some advantages of the critics themselves, we should finally inculcate our own personal angel to observe the society involving the arts.

菜丸子UID: 158771

嘿嘿，谢谢你的邀请，等等，偶现在帮你看看喔~

davidjackyUID: 135962

Thank you

菜丸子UID: 158771

issue144
It is the artist, not the critic, who gives society something of lasting value.
现时没写完，改了一篇。帮忙看看结构问题，他们一致认为我构思有问题。汗。。。

Overwhelmingly influenced by the soaring development（西西，好漂亮的短语啊） of the media, some people assert that critics who evaluate works of art such as novels, films, paintings, music and the like give something of lasting value to society. The author, however, argues that it is artists who create these works and therefore make them lasting. As for me, as a matter of fact, I will contend that critics, instead of artists or art, play a considerable role in perpetuating works of art in that only critics can make people understand the art well and improve them into a higher level, both of which are beneficial to endure a kind of art for ever. （观点很明确咯，好！）

To begin with, the critics and their criticism can make the public to（MAKE SB。 DO STH。） make a good understanding of the works of artists so that these outstanding works can be preserved and inherited from generation to generation. As we all know, not each of the works of art can be approachable or acceptable to the populace （好专业的词啊）commonly without sufficient knowledge of some abstract and abstruse arts for example a painting of expressionism. Fortunately, critics who are interested and proficient in these works invariably are willing to offer the public some thoughtful and instructive (指导性的，哪个词比较好？——回答：这个不错)understanding of the art, which helps people recognize or familiarize the art and then appreciate it with their own personal angel. If had not the critics commented on Mona Lisa of Da. Vinci which is one of the most influential paintings, people would have been undoubtedly bogged down into swamp（这个短语漂亮~） so that they could gain little. As a result, Mona Lisa was little likely to be praised by hundreds of people at each country and（AND可以不要）at any period. Moreover, when it comes to the Jazz, a famous classical music, it is the same. At the very beginning, some Whites of the United States criticized such music as an impenetrable kind of art and thus rejected it without any patience. Meanwhile, on the other hand, others commenced to show about Jazz deep concern just aroused from these criticisms so as to be fond of or even infatuated with them. Then, the whole nation was deeply attracted by its strong but flexible, delightful rhythm（这个例子举得好，相比之下，比DA VINCI的画的说服力要强，因为有前后的对比关系）. Obviously, criticism impelled the popularity and development of Jazz to some extent.
（看你的文章很轻松，因为句子搭配比较符合我的思维习惯，哈哈~）
In addition, a constructive criticism could help artists hone their skills and promote their works' level, thus contributing to the development and perpetuation of a motley collection of art. As a famous philosopher once said, "there is no perfect in the art, we have no better choice to ceaselessly hone our skills to improve it." Every piece of outstanding art, from the ancient Greek anthology to the modern Oriental civilization, was virtually more or less modified or adjusted by the creators or producers after adopting some valuable or suggestive criticisms. A good example in this point is that Hollywood's directors invariably invited some noted critics to watch the pre-issued films(电影的预演，有没有比较权威的说法？) at the expense of great rewards. Why do so? An exact reason might be that from another or special angel these critics would offer director some convincing and thoughtful critique that is always beneficial to ameliorate the films, thus adducing an everlasting value and an abundant profits as well. In brief, critics play a considerable role in the development of the art. （谴词用句都已经很老练了，虽然不是很赞同你这段的分论点：批评家的观点怎么会影响到艺术家的创作呢？很多艺术家正是因为他们和批评家的立场相悖才从众多MEDIOCRE的作品中脱颖而出的。不过你完全可以自圆其说，只是这个自圆其说没有做到很好~呵呵）

Admittedly, without art created by gifted and talent artists, critics would probably lose their jobs, just like fish leaves water; in a sense, art is the precondition of survival of the criticism. Again, as a matter of fact, critics sometimes make some prejudicial and even erroneous conclusions. Some critics, for example, ever tremendously criticized and even proposed to prohibit the emancipation of feminism and sexualism after the World War Two, nonetheless, they had to keep silent or took what they had said with regard to the advancement of the whole human civilization.
（让步不错~！）

In conclusion, due to analyses and reasons mentioned above, I hope that it has been shown that it is critics who contribute to society something of enduring value at least for the two great factors-helping the populace to make a good comprehension on the works of artists and improving their works' level to some extent. Regarding some advantages of the critics themselves, we should finally inculcate our own personal angel to observe the society involving the arts.

（小牛啊~~总的来说很不错了，真的，加油喔）

davidjackyUID: 135962

先谢谢你，晚上再详细看看

voxbUID: 147592

写得确实不错，虽然我也和你持不同观点。好歹看了一下，就挑挑小毛病啦 ：）
instructive (指导性的，哪个词比较好？)understanding 前面nstructive 不错，后面可以换成 instructive guildance
pre-issued films电影的预演，有没有比较权威的说法？－－－rehearsal 托福听力的高频词汇
Admittedly, without art created by gifted and talent artists, critics would probably lose their jobs, just like fish leaves water这个类比很好哟，不过这句说法好像不太地道; in a sense, art is the precondition of survival of the criticism. Again, as a matter of fact, critics sometimes make some prejudicial and even erroneous conclusions. Some critics, for example, ever tremendously criticized and even proposed to prohibit the emancipation偶记得好像只指解放奴隶？不确定 of feminism and sexualism after the World War Two, nonetheless, they had to keep silent or took what they had said with regard to关于？ 偶记得与时具进Times的官方说法是keep advanced with，中国政府是keep up with the advancement of the whole human civilization.
呵呵，其实写得比我好多了，偶这一题前两天想写都没什么思路。一起加油，我也是4月

keldaUID: 156803

Overwhelmingly influenced by the soaring development of the media, some people assert that critics who evaluate works of art such as novels, films, paintings, music and the like give something of lasting value to society. The author, however, argues that it is artists who create these works and therefore make them lasting. As for me, as a matter of fact, I will contend that critics, instead of artists or art, play a considerable role in perpetuating works of art in that only critics can make people understand the art well and improve them into a higher level, both of which are beneficial to endure a kind of art for ever.

To begin with, the critics and their criticism can make the public to make a good understanding of the works of artists so that these outstanding works can be preserved and inherited from generation to generation. As we all know, not each of the works of art can be approachable or acceptable 感觉把commonly放到这里好一些to the populace commonly without sufficient knowledge of some abstract and abstruse arts for example a painting of expressionism. Fortunately, critics who are interested and proficient in these works invariably are willing to offer the public some thoughtful and instructive (指导性的，哪个词比较好？)understanding of the art, which helps people recognize or familiarize the art and then appreciate it with their own personal angel. If had not the critics commented on Mona Lisa of Da. Vinci which is one of the most influential paintings, people would have been undoubtedly bogged down into swamp so that they could gain little. As a result, Mona Lisa was little likely to be praised by hundreds of people at each country and at any period. Moreover, when it comes to the Jazz, a famous classical music, it is the same. At the very beginning, some Whites of the United States criticized such music as an impenetrable kind of art and thus rejected it without any patience. Meanwhile, on the other hand, others commenced to show about Jazz deep concern just aroused from these criticisms so as to be fond of or even infatuated with them. Then, the whole nation was deeply attracted by its strong but 有转折关系嘛？ flexible, delightful rhythm. Obviously, criticism impelled the popularity and development of Jazz to some extent. 最好这里再加一句总结深化一下分论点

In addition, a constructive criticism could help artists hone their skills and promote their works' level, thus contributing to the development and perpetuation of a motley collection of art. As a famous philosopher once said, "there is no perfect in the art, we have no better choice to ceaselessly hone our skills to improve it." Every piece of outstanding art, from the ancient Greek anthology to the modern Oriental civilization, was virtually more or less modified or adjusted by the creators or producers after adopting some valuable or suggestive criticisms. A good example in this point is that Hollywood's directors invariably invited some noted critics to watch the pre-issued films(电影的预演，有没有比较权威的说法？) at the expense of great rewards. Why do so? An exact reason might be that from another or special angel these critics would offer director some convincing and thoughtful critique that is always beneficial to ameliorate the films, thus adducing an everlasting value and an abundant profits as well. In brief, critics play a considerable role in the development of the art.

Admittedly, without art created by gifted and talent artists, critics would probably lose their jobs, just like fish leaves water; in a sense, art is the precondition of survival of the criticism. Again, as a matter of fact, critics sometimes make some prejudicial and even erroneous conclusions. Some critics, for example, ever tremendously criticized and even proposed to prohibit the emancipation of feminism and sexualism after the World War Two, nonetheless, they had to keep silent or took what they had said with regard to the advancement of the whole human civilization.
感觉这一段有两个意思，一个是艺术家是评论家做出贡献的前提条件，还有一个就是评论家有的时候也会做出错误的评论。我觉得最好一段还是只有一个明确得分论点，然后详细的论述一下。看看怎么做个调整。

In conclusion, due to analyses and reasons mentioned above, I hope that it has been shown that it is critics who contribute to society something of enduring value at least for the two great factors-helping the populace to make a good comprehension on the works of artists and improving their works' level to some extent. Regarding some advantages of the critics themselves, we should finally inculcate our own personal angel to observe the society involving the arts.

写得很好啊，语言流畅，思路也很清楚，论证部分展开的也很充分。
我也写过这篇，再看你的，觉得还是差的挺远的。Sigh,和你同一天考啊。。。

davidjackyUID: 135962

答复菜丸子：
1）谢鼓励和该文章
2）关于make 你仔细查一下：make sb .do sth.应该没有错
3）DA VINCI 的例子，IF前加一句，描述MONA LISA很难，人们不理解之类的话你看这样可以吗

davidjackyUID: 135962

答复voxb：
fish out of water这个成语并不用来指鱼，而是用来比喻人，比喻离开了自己所习惯，所熟悉的生活环境而感到不舒服的人，或是对周围环境感到格格不入的人：

The first few days in the new company he was a fish out of water, but soon he mixed well with his colleagues.(到新公司的头几天，他不能适应，但很快，他就和同事打成一片了。)

davidjackyUID: 135962

TO kelda:
我本来认为写个就可以了，但当时考虑到可以AGAIN一个旧拓展了，当然考试就不发挥了，也没有时间，好的
2）TO begin with段的确要总结好像悬在空中]
的
3）谢谢

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最初由 davidjacky 发布
[B]答复菜丸子：
1）谢鼓励和该文章
2）关于make 你仔细查一下：make sb .do sth.应该没有错
3）DA VINCI 的例子，IF前加一句，描述MONA LISA很难，人们不理解之类的话你看..

以下省略...... [/B]

汗，呵呵，我说的就是MAKE SB。 DO STH啊，可你用错了，你用的是MAKE SB  TODO STH。自己看

你的文章本来就不错的，不要谦虚了呵呵

davidjackyUID: 135962

sorry！不好意思，我还以为。。。粗心，不过哪个地方刚才我该了两个make，不好换成help the public (to) make a good understanding of ....
、、、错怪！误怪，明天再模考，记得帮我改改！