2个星期没写了的A，求点评

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TOPIC: The following appeared in a memo from the director of student housing at Buckingham College.
"To serve the housing needs of our students, Buckingham College should build a number of new dormitories. Buckingham's enrollment is growing and, based on current trends, will double over the next 50 years, thus making existing dormitory space inadequate. Moreover, the average rent for an apartment in our town has risen in recent years. Consequently, students will find it increasingly difficult to afford off-campus housing. Finally, attractive new dormitories would make prospective students more likely to enroll at Buckingham."
Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.


写作如下：

The argument starts with the suggestion that Buckingham College should newly erect more dormitories in order to fulfill the housing needs. Admittedly, it might be necessary for the college to give more attention to students' needs, especially in the fundamentally living condition. However, the loopholes, discrepancy between the truth and the assumption as well as the gratuitous prediction coerce a debilitating effect to the author's argument.

The author mentions that more students matriculate in Buckingham College and the number would most likely be twice as many as now in 50 years. However, the author does not provide any information even an assumption that the future students would mostly live in the campus. There is an entire possibility that enrolled students in most part are those citizens that have their families nearby, even they prefer to drive to school. In regard of this, the number would be double in 50 years, and the author does not state that how many dormitories are in the campus now, so it might be cursory to make a decision to build more dormitories. In order to solidify the argument, the author should make a survey whether future students would like to live in campus or not. Also, a specific information about the number of dormitories should be investigated.

Additionally, a reason that the rent for an apartment in the town has risen is provided. However, it is not sure that whether more building would be constructed because of the profit of renting. It is likely that the indigenous would invest more money on building such apartment. Also, prospective students might be more willing to live off-campus so that they do not concern the expense of renting. If this is the case, the argument exists loopholes. Thus, the author should survey the construction plans of the town council or local people.

What's more, the author ends that more students would enroll at the college because of the new dormitories. Admittedly, it might be a attractiveness for the concern of choosing a school. However, the situation might not be that. Some people are choosing a school in order to have good environment, while others might choose those campuses that near the downtown.

Establishing more dormitories might be a clever choice, which can serve for those students who like to live in campus, especially those who have to do their experiment in midnight. Also, the safety prefers in campus. However, the author's approach to this decision seems to be far more satisfactory and can not provide any ground for the argument.