写的一篇issue 文笔不好 求批改

踏上美利坚UID: 3548156

对于人为因素将要灭绝的动物，人们要尽力的保护他们。
This issue advocates that we should take relevant responsibility of taking care of the endanger animals who is facing the extinctive problem only subjected to people's modern development aiming to elevate level of life. It no doubt that the wild resource is our so important aspect of our life and we should have the ability to continue to pursing our activity which are good for the whole natural development to make that the natural resource just as the animal or some other species who are benefit for us life with us in a harmonious condition. At first point, I quite agree with the perspective. It is that the endanger animal will disappear at any time, but in the most aspect of people's pedestrian life, they are whatever occupy our future development and normal work. In the medicine and biomaterials research, too much information which is good for delving into the deeply explanation of the theory is provided coming from the study of relevant animal. We can learn from them and invent some useful devices or some facilities to improve our life. Such as the research of bat's flying using it's sound to justify what is in the front of them and to know how long it is far from itself. We learn this and solving the problem of gauging location of the airplane .If the bat were extinct how can we know the important information.
Another representative example is that.
As the aspect of doing as an useful tools for us to delving into the unknown world, endangering animal is so crucial for us make good progress in the record of history. We should ,no matter what way we will adopt ,give them a easeful room to keep their safety. Another aspect is that some species of animal which will be extinct in future are so important to elevate the spiritual level and the relation between states.
An apparent instance is that panda who will be extinct if there is no necessary the protection of human. But panda is not only does as an individual entertainment when they are, on holidays, travelling to the beautiful site but also a propitious symbol of rapprochement between any two different countries. As the precious animal in the world, such a present delivered to another country is good enough for representing our presidential attitude towards another country. It is to some extent a political implement among countries worldwide. Even it does not liken as a symbol. People will forget all the untoward things in their life when they see the panda’s jocular performance in zoon. Does it give us a relish to enjoy our daily pedestrian work just for living on earth and release the high pressure of your boss, your teacher , your mum and yourself esteem in the daily life. That to ensure the safety of endangering animals is urgent so is important to do some actions to protect them according to the explanations above. They are in danger and the number of them is reducing day by day which subjected to our selfish progress in the way of cutting trees and expand farm land. We should and must do something to improve their life condition and support them best environment.
The point mentioned above in the issue is right but not so exactly. In my opinion, what we should do is to make a harmonious development in the world. But as some human action cause bad effect on animal. Take the relevant action to improve the condition of natural animal urgently is the only way.