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[Offer榜] 深夜报CityU ISM和HKBU GMM的OFFER!附询问进度邮件参考 [复制链接]

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浸会申请的是与英国谢菲尔德的大学合办的Global Marketing Management专业(无法填写只能选择列表中的专业0.0),14年10月份通过谢菲的系统申请,很早拿到OFFER,CON雅思7,可以去谢菲读语言,无留位费。

城大申请了Information Systems Management(申于2014.11.24)和BIS-A(申于2014.11.26)。关于BIS,1月初发邮件向BIS-A的教授(超级Nice)询问申请进度,得知暂未被推研,现在仍然Under Review。关于ISM,1月初发邮件询问,教授说再等两三周,1月下旬开始发Offer没有我,觉得自己被鄙视了= =2月初按耐不住焦急的心情,再次给教授发邮件,被告知有Con Offer,等了一周系统状态终于变了。感觉IS学系的教授小米都特别Nice,发邮件基本都很快回复。虽然很多人说申授课式没必要去和教授套磁,但我觉得在教授面前刷一下存在感也无妨。

双非、雅思刚好6.5感觉都是短板,能拿到Offer真的很开心,感谢寄托,感谢一路鼓励帮助温暖我的人。
附上我给教授发的邮件供参考,相信不会只有我一个人在发邮件的时候头疼T_T
愿大家都拿到心仪Offer!

【第一次】
Dear Prof. ****,

I am sorry for this interruption. My name is ********, and my application number is ********. I have submitted the online application form of MSc Information Systems Management for nearly six weeks.

Honestly I felt a lot of anxiety about the result and I hope you will excuse the liberty I take of writing to you. Would you please let me know whether my application is still in consideration? and when can I get a result?

Thank you for your consideration.
Looking forward to your kind reply.

Yours Sincerely
********

【第二次】
Dear prof. ****,

Sorry for bothering you again for my application. My name is ********, and my application number is ********. I know that many offers have been issued, but I have heard nothing from you up to now. Honestly I felt very upset, and would you please let me know whether my application is still in consideration?

At the same time, I want to add some information about myself, and hope that it can make a difference. Although my university (******** University) is not titled with 211 and 985, it set up the experimental class which is specifically designed for top students. Because of my excellent performance in the College Entrance Exam, I was admitted into the experimental class. This undergraduate program will offer generalized courses for the first two years, such as mathematics, accounting, economics and business administration. For the last two years, intensive training focused on accounting will be carried out. I put an end to my three years’ study with a Top 1 ranking in my major, and I gave up the postgraduate recommendation to domestic universities because I am desired to start a new chapter in the City University of Hong Kong. Therefore, I hope that you can give me a chance.

Thank you for your consideration.

Yours Sincerely
********

PS:Sorry 作为一个写作5.5的英语渣 只能这水平了O(∩_∩)O
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本帖最后由 kaywoo 于 2015-12-7 18:04 编辑

作為一個強迫症發作的英語愛好渣,我修改了一下這兩封信。。。。。。

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Dear Mr./Ms./Dr. ***,

I am sorry to bother you but I am writing to ask you for a favour.

My name is ***. It has been nearly six weeks since I submitted my online application form (Application No.: ********) of MSc in Information Systems Management but there hasn’t been any change in my application status. I feel a lot of anxiety about this and I hope you will forgive me for being abrupt. Would you mind checking my application status and telling me whether my application is still under consideration and when I can get a result?

Thank you very much and look forward to your reply at your earliest convenience.

Yours Sincerely,
***
Application No.: ********

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Dear Mr./Ms./Dr. ***,

I am really sorry to bother you again with my application. My name is ********, and my application number is ********. I know that many offers have been made, but I have not got any news yet. Would you mind checking my application status and telling me whether my application is still under consideration?

At the same time, I would like to talk more about myself, and hope that it can make a difference. Although my university (******** University) is not titled with 211 and 985, it runs an experimental class which is specifically designed for top students. Because of my excellent performance in the College Entrance Exam, I was admitted to the experimental class. This undergraduate program offers foundation courses for the first two years, such as mathematics, accounting, economics and business administration, while for the last two years, intensive training focused on accounting will be carried out. I managed to complete my first three years ranking No. 1 in my major so I was granted an early admission to postgraduate studies of universities in Mainland China. I gave this up because I long to start a new chapter in the City University of Hong Kong. Therefore, I do hope that I would be given the very honour and opportunity to realize my dream.

Thank you very much and look forward to your reply at your earliest convenience.

Yours Sincerely,
***
Application No.: ********
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kaywoo 发表于 2015-2-13 09:36
作為一個強迫症發作的英語愛好渣,我修改了一下這兩封信。。。。。。

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版主大人,好赞!看完你的只想立马删掉自己的!
请原谅一个英语渣的班门弄斧 O(∩_∩)O
多谢赐教 ~ 向你学习!
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版主大人,好赞!看完你的只想立马删掉自己的!
请原谅一个英语渣的班门弄斧 O(∩_∩)O
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要贊你才是呢,無私分享自己的郵件。希望更多的人分享,造福後人。

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一個尋常的報offer帖,你居然點進來看了,還發現我的回帖。。。。真神奇。。。。

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kaywoo 发表于 2015-2-13 11:28
一個尋常的報offer帖,你居然點進來看了,還發現我的回帖。。。。真神奇。。。。

对,而且我只点了一个帖子。。。。哈哈

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请问一下楼主 ISM 什么时候申请、面试的?谢谢!

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请问一下楼主 ISM 什么时候申请、面试的?谢谢!
ISM是11.24申的,这个专业无面试 ~ Good Luck !

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:dizzy:哎 实在怕询问了之后 担心会不会有反作用

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