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cindy20120133UID: 3610424

13. Universities should require every student to take a variety of courses outside the student's field of study.

Due to the fierce social environment, universities want to educate their student better to cope with it. And many universities think taking a variety of courses outside the student's major field of study will be beneficial. I agree with the claim in some extent, but the reason is not sufficient. Although take expansive courses really do good to students, it will not be the best way for students to be educated.

Nowadays, students are suffering from a really stressful school life, for doing heavy homework of their major courses and looking for internship. They only have a limited time compared to endless work. Thus we can imagine if we require them to have more courses, they will be more stressful and they cannot pay enough attention to the significant courses which will play an important role in their future career. Therefore, requiring them to take a variety of courses outside the student's major field of study may cause backfire.

Also universities cannot tell the appropriate quantity and range of courses outside the student's major field of study. For example, I am a student majored in math, and I think some physical courses and economics courses will help me a lot. For physics, it really has some similarities with math. They both need critical thinking and theoretical proving and physics is one of applied area of math. For economics, because I am really interested in this area and it will be really fascinating to use some analytical methods on some economic phenomenon. On the contrary, I really can't tell whether some courses like politics and art courses can help me besides giving me more homework and exams. For above reasons, I think it will be a better way to let students choose courses by themselves.

There are still other ways to educate the student compared to just require them to take more courses. As we all know, after-class activities are also important in campus life. It can not only enhance communication skills, but also let them know more friends. Universities can offer more kinds of those activities or give them more support on funding. In another hand, universities should give them more time and chance to go into social work, which will really help a lot when students really graduate from the school.

The education students received in universities is really important for them, not only for finding jobs, but also can help them know how to adapt to the real world when they leave the campus. Thus how to give them a really sufficient education is a significant issue. We cannot be rash to require them to take more courses. As a conclusion, the claim is doubtful and the reason for it is actually not enough.

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tesolchinaUID: 2191404

楼主写文章前应先看看写作指引 Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing and supporting your position, be sure to address the most compelling reasons and/or examples that could be used to challenge your position.

cindy20120133UID: 3610424

tesolchina 发表于 2015-5-3 09:15
楼主写文章前应先看看写作指引 Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or  ...

我看了呀，您觉得哪里跑题了么

jason02UID: 3613740

看了tesolchina老师的帖子，我是这样认为的，他说这种类型要写例子来challenge你的观点。
他可能觉得你通篇没例子来challenge所以没达到指引的要求。

感觉第一段写你不同意这个claim，然后在第三段的时候引出Someone might claim that not requiring every student to take a variety of courses outside the student's field of study would circumscribe the scope of their knowledge, could not make a concrete connection to the related disciplines什么什么的来challenge你的position，然后再写自由选课比claim的好，用你自己的例子，然后再补充after-class activities的重要性。

cindy20120133UID: 3610424

jason02 发表于 2015-5-9 22:22
看了tesolchina老师的帖子，我是这样认为的，他说这种类型要写例子来challenge你的观点。
他可能觉得你通篇 ...

明白啦~非常感谢~~~