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78) The following appeared in a memo from the vice president of a food distribution company with food storage warehouses in several cities.

Recently, we signed a contract with the Fly-Away Pest Control Company to provide pest control services at our fast-food warehouse in Palm City, but last month we discovered that over $20,000 worth of food there had been destroyed by pest damage. Meanwhile, the Buzzoff Pest Control Company, which we have used for many years, continued to service our warehouse in Wintervale, and last month only $10,000 worth of the food stored there had been destroyed by pest damage. Even though the price charged by Fly-Away is considerably lower, our best means of saving money is to return to Buzzoff for all our pest control services.

Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.

40min,表格格式可能有点小问题呃,不过希望不影响大家理解阅读~~

比较纠结的是文章用的是过去时,请问老师我们在举例子的时候也要用过去时吗?

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1According  to the memo, the vice president of a food distribution company is planning to  return to Buzzoff from Fly-Away Pest Control Company in order to save  money. 总结作者观点
A  number of questions about the difference between Palm City and Wintervale  regarding the pest control, the percentage of damage happened in the two  cities, and whether or not using Buzzoff rather than Fly-Away Company can  save money, have to be answered in order to evaluate the predictions.引出三个正文段观点
2For  starters, we need to know the difference between Palm City and Wintervale in  terms of the pest control. TS1
The  more damage happened in Palm city maybe caused by other reasons instead of  Fly-Away Company’s inability. If the pests in Palm city is inherently hard to  get rid of or the weather condition in Palm city is preferable for pests to  reproduce than pests in Wintervale, the cost of pest damage is certainly more  in Palm City. 找他因
To exanimate whether Fly-Away Company  did a good job, we need to know the average data about pest damage in Palm  city, so if the damage under Fly-Away ‘s control is far less than the average  damage is Palm city, Fly-Away Company is efficient in pest control. Comparing  with the average data in Wintervale can also evaluate whether Fly-Away  Company is productive or not.补充作者论证
3In addition, the author assumes that $20,000 worth of food damage  in Palm City is sever than $10,000 worth of the food stored in  Wintervale. TS2
However we do not know the amount of food  stored in the two cities. If the company has $200,000 worth of food in Palm  City so 10% of them are damaged, while there are $20,000 worth of the food  stored in Wintervale so 50% of them are damaged, in this case, the food  damage in Wintervale is more severe than in Palm City, thus, Buzzoff Pest  Control Company is not actually better than Fly-Away Pest Control Company.举例说明
4As  far as saving money, the author hold the idea that the price charged by is  considerably lower so the company can save money. TS3
Nevertheless the author fails to take  into account of the situation that, the pest control method applied by  Fly-Away Company does not suit for every place.找反例
It is entirely likely that, if they work  in Palm City, they can not control the pest at all so the food damage may be  much more than $20,000.举例说明
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