argument76,30分钟。争取argu冲6分系列（二）

limaotouUID: 158350

Argument76: 433 words
The following appeared as part of an article in a health and beauty magazine.
'A group of volunteers participated in a study of consumer responses to the new Luxess face cream. Every morning for a month, they washed their faces with mild soap and then applied Luxess. At the end of that month, most volunteers reported a marked improvement in the way their skin looked and felt. Thus it appears that Luxess is truly effective in improving the condition of facial skin.'

The argument concludes that Luxess is truly effective in improving the condition of facial skin. To substantiate this conclusion, the arguer cites a study of consumer responses participated by a group of volunteers most of whom reported a marked improvement in the way their skin looked and felt. This argument is problematic in several critical respects.

First of all, the reliability of the study is open to question. The arguer fails to provide any evidence to describe how the study was conducted and whether this group of volunteeres is representative of all people. It is possible that the number of volunteers are too small to be statistical significant and therefore the result of the study would be weakened. Or perhaps these volunteers are chosen by the corporate that produces Luxess, and they might get some benefits from advertising for this corporate. If this is the case, the credibility of this argument will be seriously undermined.

Even if we accept the credibility of the study, this argument will also be weakened if we take into account the potential function of mild soap which might contribute to the improvement of the skins of those volunteers. As is presented, those volunteers washed their faces with mild soap and Luxess together. It is entirely possible that some chemical components in the mild soap rather than Luxess help the volunteers' skins to look better, or it is equally possible that the mixture of both components in the soap and Luxess works for the skin. Without ruling out these possibilities, the conclusion of the argument is untenable.

Finally, the arguer fails to provide any objective criterion to measure the effectiveness of Luxess. It is only reported by the volunteers about how their skins look and felt. Although I do not deny that their voices might be an important factor in deciding the effectiveness of the study, however, this feeling of improvement could also be attributed to psychological feeling rather than an indeed improvement of the skin. After all, people always tend to feel better after attending such kind of studies. Without giving an objective standard in measuring the improvement, people are unlikely to truly believe the effectiveness of Luxess.

In conclusion, this argument, while seems to be sound at first glance, suffers several flaws as demonstrated. To strengthen it, the arguer needs to provide more evidence to convince us the reliability of the study. Also, the arguer should find a way to rule out the possibility that the mild soap might works for skin improvement. Furthermore, an objective criterion should be used in measuring the effectiveness of Luxess.

limaotouUID: 158350

自己顶一把。
哪位大虾帮忙批批，谢啦。

海洋UID: 126969

呵，limaotou的阿狗又出新的了，爱看爱看！

Even if we accept the credibility of the study，this argument will also be weakened if we take into account the——你有没有感觉 Even if we accept the credibility of the study 显得主观？改为“Even if the group of the volunteers accurately represent all people"之类的比较好一些吧。

考虑心理因素那段开始读来感觉有点偏，仔细一想，确实是个值得考虑的问题，尤其是有关护肤品的，心理因素需要排除掉。不过，这么一来，如果再回头看“Even if we accept the credibility of the study”那段，就发现其实这篇阿狗全部都要谈the credibility of the study，说even if accept the  credibility of the study似乎作者不再谈论study了。感觉本篇主要问题在于这一点。

呵呵，还想加一句，皮肤的感觉跟天气的变化很有关系哦。如果天气温和湿润，我感觉都不需要护肤品啦~~~~ limaotou是boy吗？瞎猜啦，猜错表怪我。偶觉得女孩子做这一题一定会考虑到天气问题，尤其是北京这种烂天~~

limaotouUID: 158350

有道理，尤其是那个accept the credibility of the study, 的确跟下面矛盾了。
我不懂护肤品的，原来还有这个讲究，受教受教，谢谢海洋！

yifengUID: 159612

最初由 海洋 发布
[B]呵，limaotou的阿狗又出新的了，爱看爱看！

Even if we accept the credibility of the study，this argument will also be weakened if we take into account the——?.

以下省略...... [/B]

同意limaotou关于心理因素的论述， 不过海洋说的天气的原因也有道理。
比如，我在武汉的皮肤就比在家好，这里湿气重。

xixixiaoUID: 154713

呵呵，写的真好。偶照着你以前的（一）写了一篇，没想到还有更好的。几位的点评我觉得要求好高啊。看看老外的范文，也没有那么深刻吧。不管了，中心要放在一休上了。急死了。

楼主的阿狗结构很好，It is possible that the number of volunteers are 。。。这里的are 是is 吧。还有，although和however可以连用吗?

limaotouUID: 158350

嗯，对，那个是is。模考的时候犯的这个低级错误，后来自己检查的时候虽然发现了，但是还是没有改，想鞭策鞭策自己，呵呵。
although 和 however 好像是不能一起用，以后我不用了，省的心里不踏实。
xixixiao,我跟你一样，也是issue一点没底，一起加油吧。

leriesUID: 146821

我不是大虾，只是尽我的努力了：）
看了你的文章我才知道我得有多水呢。
我得野鼠阿狗一起郁闷了.
argument76,30分钟。争取argu冲6分系列（二）
Argument76: 433 words
The following appeared as part of an article in a health and beauty magazine.
'A group of volunteers participated in a study of consumer responses to the new Luxess face cream. Every morning for a month, they washed their faces with mild soap and then applied Luxess. At the end of that month, most volunteers reported a marked improvement in the way their skin looked and felt. Thus it appears that Luxess is truly effective in improving the condition of facial skin.'
The argument concludes that Luxess is truly effective in improving the condition of facial skin. To substantiate this conclusion, the arguer cites a study of consumer responses participated by a group of volunteers most of whom reported a marked improvement in the way their skin looked and felt. This argument is problematic in several critical respects.

First of all, the reliability of the study is open to question.[我不知道有没有这么个说法，一般是open to doubt吧] The arguer fails to provide any evidence to describe how the study was conducted and whether this group of volunteers is[前后的时态可以这样么] representative of all people. It is possible that the number of volunteers are too small to be statistical significant and therefore the result of the study would be weakened. Or perhaps these volunteers are chosen by the corporate that produces Luxess, and they might get some benefits from advertising for this corporate. If this is the case, the credibility of this argument will be seriously undermined.

Even if we accept the credibility of the study, this argument will also be weakened if we take into account the potential function of mild soap which might contribute to the improvement of the skins of those volunteers. As is presented, those volunteers washed their faces with mild soap and Luxess together. It is entirely possible that some chemical components in the mild soap rather than Luxess help the volunteers' skins to look better, or it is equally possible that the mixture of both components in the soap and Luxess works for the skin. Without ruling out these possibilities, the conclusion of the argument is untenable.

Finally, the arguer fails to provide any objective criterion to measure the effectiveness of Luxess. It is only reported by the volunteers about how their skins look and felt. Although I do not deny that their voices might be an important factor in deciding the effectiveness of the study, however, this feeling of improvement could also be attributed to psychological feeling rather than an indeed improvement of the skin. After all, people always tend to feel better after attending such kind of studies. Without giving[前面句号一改逗号也是一长句] an objective standard in measuring the improvement, people are unlikely to truly believe the effectiveness of Luxess.

In conclusion, this argument, while seems to be sound【是seems to sound】 at first glance, suffers several flaws as demonstrated. To strengthen it, the arguer needs to provide more evidence to convince us the reliability of the study. Also, the arguer should find a way to rule out the possibility that the mild soap might works for skin improvement. Furthermore, an objective criterion should be used in measuring the effectiveness of Luxess.

leriesUID: 146821

o
那个seems to be sound 的sound 是形容词，我现在才反应过来。
见笑了：）

小GUID: 160047

完全嘉文博译模式
中规中举
没有太多亮点
5分左右
6分可能不大
所选3篇题目都很简单