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作文链接放在这个网盘里面，欢迎批改~
http://pan.baidu.com/s/1qW66dcC

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改好啦~

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很简练。最最开始时我写综合也就220字，到后来越写越多，现在都快330了。。也不知道是不是好事。。。。。

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qiaoyi0181 发表于 2015-9-13 11:32
很简练。最最开始时我写综合也就220字，到后来越写越多，现在都快330了。。也不知道是不是好事。。。。。

我感觉只要你把自己的意思表达出来就是好事吧~
你综合作文写的挺不错的，我不太会记笔记所以有的细节就忘掉了。

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批改的晚了，请见谅！

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托福高分作文必背35好句:
　　一、~ the + ~ est + 名词 + (that) + 主词 + have ever + seen ( known/heard/had/read, etc)
　　~ the most + 形容词 + 名词 + (that) + 主词 + have ever + seen ( known/ heard/ had/read, etc)
　　例句：Helen is the most beautiful girl that I have ever seen.
　　海伦是我所看过最美丽的女孩。
　　Mr. Chang is the kindest teacher that I have ever had.
　　张老师是我曾经遇到最仁慈的教师。
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　　二、Nothing is + ~ er than to + V Nothing is + more + 形容词 + than to + V
　　例句：Nothing is more important than to receive education.
　　没有比接受教育更重要的事。
　　三、~ cannot emphasize the importance of ~ too much.(再怎么强调...的重要性也不为过。)
　　例句：We cannot emphasize the importance of protecting our eyes too much.
　　我们再怎么强调保护眼睛的重要性也不为过。
　　四、There is no denying that + S + V ...(不可否认的...)
　　例句：There is no denying that the qualities of our living have gone from bad to worse.
　　不可否认的，我们的生活品质已经每况愈下。
　　五、It is universally acknowledged that + 句子~~ (全世界都知道...)
　　例句：It is universally acknowledged that trees are indispensable to us.
　　全世界都知道树木对我们是不可或缺的。
　　六、There is no doubt that + 句子~~ (毫无疑问的...)
　　例句：There is no doubt that our educational system leaves something to be desired.
　　毫无疑问的我们的教育制度令人不满意。
　　七、An advantage of ~ is that + 句子(...的优点是...)
　　例句：An advantage of using the solar energy is that it won't create (produce) any pollution.
　　使用太阳能的优点是它不会制造任何污染。
　　八、The reason why + 句子 ~ is that + 句子(...的原因是...)
　　例句：The reason why we have to grow trees is that they can provide us with fresh air./ The reason why we have to grow trees is that they can supply fresh air for us.
　　我们必须种树的原因是它们能供应我们新鲜的空气。
　　九、So + 形容词 + be + 主词 + that + 句子(如此...以致于...)
　　例句：So precious is time that we can't afford to waste it. 时间是如此珍贵，我们经不起浪费它。
　　十、Adj + as + Subject(主词)+ be, S + V~ (虽然...)
　　例句：Rich as our country is, the qualities of our living are by no means satisfactory. {by no means = in no way = on no account 一点也不}
　　虽然我们的国家富有，我们的生活品质绝对令人不满意。
　　十一、The + ~er + S + V, ~ the + ~er + S + V ~
　　The + more + Adj + S + V, ~ the + more + Adj + S + V ~(愈...愈...)
　　例句：The harder you work, the more progress you make.
　　你愈努力，你愈进步。
　　The more books we read, the more learned we become.
　　我们书读愈多，我们愈有学问。
　　十二、By +Ving, ~~ can ~~ (借着...，..能够..)
　　例句：By taking exercise, we can always stay healthy.
　　借着做运动，我们能够始终保持健康。
　　十三、~ enable + Object(受词)+ to + V (..使..能够..)
　　例句：Listening to music enable us to feel relaxed.
　　听音乐使我们能够感觉轻松。
　　十四、On no account can we+ V ~ (我们绝对不能...)
　　例句：On no account can we ignore the value of knowledge.
　　我们绝对不能忽略知识的价值。
　　十五、It is time + S + 过去式 (该是...的时候了)
　　例句：It is time the authorities concerned took proper steps to solve the traffic problems.
　　该是有关当局采取适当的措施来解决交通问题的时候了。
　　十六、Those who ~ (...的人...)
　　例句：Those who violate traffic regulations should be punished.
　　违反交通规定的人应该受处罚。
　　十七、There is no one but ~ (没有人不...)
　　例句：There is no one but longs to go to college.
　　没有人不渴望上大学。
　　十八、be + forced/compelled/obliged + to + V (不得不...)
　　例句：Since the examination is around the corner, I am compelled to give up doing sports.
　　既然考试迫在眉睫，我不得不放弃做运动。
　　十九、It is conceivable that + 句子 (可想而知的)
　　It is obvious that + 句子 (明显的)
　　It is apparent that + 句子 (显然的)
　　例句：It is conceivable that knowledge plays an important role in our life.
　　可想而知，知识在我们的一生中扮演一个重要的角色。
　　二十、That is the reason why ~ (那就是...的原因)
　　例句：Summer is sultry. That is the reason why I don't like it.
　　夏天很燠热。那就是我不喜欢它的原因。
　　二十一、For the past+ 时间，S + 现在完成式...(过去...年来，...一直...)
　　例句：For the past two years, I have been busy preparing for the examination.
　　过去两年来，我一直忙着准备考试。
　　二十二、Since + S + 过去式，S + 现在完成式。
　　例句：Since he went to senior high school, he has worked very hard.
　　自从他上高中，他一直很用功。
　　二十三、It pays to + V ~ (...是值得的。)
　　例句：It pays to help others.
　　帮助别人是值得的。
　　二十四、be based on (以...为基础)
　　例句：The progress of thee society is based on harmony.
　　社会的进步是以和谐为基础的。
　　二十五、Spare no effort to + V (不遗余力的)
　　例句：We should spare no effort to beautify our environment.
　　我们应该不遗余力的美化我们的环境。
　　二十六、bring home to + 人 + 事 (让...明白...事)
　　例句：We should bring home to people the value of working hard.
　　我们应该让人们明白努力的价值。
　　二十七、be closely related to ~~ (与...息息相关)
　　例句：Taking exercise is closely related to health.
　　做运动与健康息息相关。
　　二十八、Get into the habit of + Ving
　　= make it a rule to + V (养成...的习惯)
　　We should get into the habit of keeping good hours.
　　我们应该养成早睡早起的习惯。
　　二十九、Due to/Owing to/
　　Thanks to + N/Ving, ~ (因为...)
　　例句：Thanks to his encouragement, I finally realized my dream.
　　因为他的鼓励，我终于实现我的梦想。
　　三十、What a + Adj + N + S + V!
　　= How + Adj + a + N + V!(多么...!)
　　例句：What an important thing it is to keep our promise!
　　How important a thing it is to keep our promise!
　　遵守诺言是多么重要的事!
　　三十一、Leave much to be desired (令人不满意)
　　例句：The condition of our traffic leaves much to be desired.
　　我们的交通状况令人不满意。
　　三十二、Have a great influence on ~ (对...有很大的影响)
　　例句：Smoking has a great influence on our health.
　　抽烟对我们的健康有很大的影响。
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　　三十三、do good to (对...有益)，do harm to (对...有害)
　　例句：Reading does good to our mind.读书对心灵有益。
　　Overwork does harm to health.工作过度对健康有害。
　　三十四、Pose a great threat to ~~ (对...造成一大威胁)
　　例句：Pollution poses a great threat to our existence.
　　污染对我们的生存造成一大威胁。
　　三十五、do one's utmost to + V = do one's best (尽全力去...)
　　例句：We should do our utmost to achieve our goal in life.
　　我们应尽全力去达成我们的人生目标。
　　这些句子我们也许都见过，但是又有谁真正很自然的运用到自己的文章中呢，所以，赶快背下来喽~~希望给你们帮助。大家有什么好经验什么的互相分享哦!!!!!

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基本表达句型

1. 强调重要性
（1） The importance of ... can never be overestimated.
注释：这个句子可在全文的任何地方出现，可以用于表达观点：As far as I'm concerned, the importance of learning English can never be overestimated.也可以用于总结：Thus, the importance of cultivating a sense of independence can never be overestimated.

（2） ... has been playing an increasingly important role in ...
注释：这个句子可用于开头：Today, Internet has been playing an increasingly important role in our society。也可以在段落首用于表达观点，不过我个人通常用于表达观点，因为开头我有固定模板。

（3） ... is a strong determinant of ...
注释：这个句子类似（1）句，也是可以在任何地方出现，比如whether a student has developed some skills is a strong determinant of whether he can get a good job.

2. 权衡
（1） when ..., we need to give full consideration to ...
注释：这句话很显然是用于表达观点的，我一般在第一段的最后一句使用：when deciding on building a chemical plant, the government should give full consideration to the advantages and disadvantages it will bring to the community.

（2） ... is valued more than ...
注释：这句也是用来表达观点的，我一般用在第一段：developing economy is valued more than protecting environment by some people。

（3） favor ... as opposed to ...
注释：相比之下更喜欢，也是用于表达观点：Many people favor protecting the environment as opposed to developing the economy alone.

3. 举例
有三种常用表达：
A perfect example can be found in ...
... serves as a perfect example
... has well illustrated this

例如：A perfect example can be found in Microsoft which insists on clean technology.
Microsoft, which insists on clean technology, serves as a perfect example.
Microsoft, which insists on clean technology, has well illustrated this.

举完例子觉得不够，就再加一个：
... is not alone in ...
比如：Microsoft is not alone in holding the idea。
然后就开始举另一个例子吧。

4. 描述结果
（1） the attempt by ... to ... has been a tremendous success.
注释：这个句子也可以用于举例也可以用于总结：The attempt by the government to help gaint panda has been a tremendous success.

（2） a better understanding of ... will enable ...
注释：这个句子超有用，可以用于表达观点，可以用于总结，可以用于引出例子：A better underdtanding of ourselves will enable us to live better lives.

（3） an examination of ... will confirm such a fact that ...
注释：这个也超有用，我主要用来引出例证和表达观点： An examination of those students with excellent academic performance will confirm such a fact that diligence and efficient methods contribute a lot to their success.

（4） ... have generally come to recognize the wisdom of ...
注释：这个句子可放在开头：Most people now have generally come to recognize the wisdom of being able to speak English.

写作结构

在这里，我分综合写作和独立写作来讨论。重点讨论独立写作。

综合写作

综合写作因为有个reading 可以参考所以很好写，只要记下了listening里的要点，再依次呈现即可。
开篇：一句话，说明reading 和listening是有明显不同的。
中间段：每一段一个点，论述reading 和listening的不同。
结尾段：不用写。

如何做到这一点，需要模板支持，我会在后面添加我的模板，利用这个模板我可以在15分钟内随意写出300字左右的论述。请结合上文给出的基础表达来完善模板。

独立写作

独立写作的结构较为复杂，我们从第一段开始。
开头段，请分为三句话。background statement描述背景，opinions描述两边的观点。topic 表达我自身的观点。我个人喜欢用一边倒的方式写托福作文，当然中立观点也能写。在topic段落中，除了表达观点，我建议把接下来会使用的论点全都用一两个词概括出来，总领全文。这样写下来，大概是80个字。

接下来就是中间段了。对于一边倒式的文章，建议写三个中间段，每一段70个字。第一个中间段赞颂反方论点，说它怎么怎么好，随后一个转折，后两个中间段各阐述一个自己的观点。一段只讲一个论点，一个论点必须在一段话中完成。对于持中立型的文章，建议分成两段，各100字。在每一个段落中，阐述两个支撑论点。这样一来，无论是一边倒还是持中立，我们都要完成200字左右的阐述，并且正反兼顾。

结尾段，20到40字，用一句固定的话可以直接完成。

我们的目标是在独立写作时，拿到题目立刻开始写开头段，在无脑写作开头段的过程中想出论点，并在开头段结尾处概括出来，接下来用中间段给予论述。最后无脑写结尾段。

独立写作同样有模板，接下来我会给出我的模板。利用它我可以保证25分钟写出500字左右的文章。同样，请结合上文给出的基本表达来完善模板。

模板

综合写作：

The professor presents a lecture regarding（主题）, and her proposition forms a sharp contrast with what is stated in the reading passage.

First, the reading passage claims that （reading的第一个点）. However, the professor points out that （listening的反驳）.

Another part that distinguishes the reading from the listenging is that（reading的第二个点）. The professor explains that（listening的反驳）.

Finally, what the reading stated concerning （reading的第三个点）differs a lot from what is mentioned by the professor. As she puts it, （listening的反驳）

独立写作：

因为我一般都用一边倒式写法，所以我给的模板也是一边倒的，不过只要稍加改动就能用来写持中立的文章

When it comes to the issue about （题目）, people's opinion differs from person to person. Some hold the view that（一个观点）， while others argues that（另一个观点）. As far as I'm concerned, I support the prior/latter point for the reasons that（概括自己的论点）

It is true that （反方论点）has its own merits. For one thing, （反方论据1）. For another, （反方论据2）.However, is this a wise choice? After taking more factors into consideration, I suggest that（正方论点）.

First,（正方论据1）

Second, （正方论据2）

In short, from what has been discussed above, we can safely draw the conclusion that （把第一段的论点重复一遍）

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写的很不错！