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ARGU 3

The following appeared as a letter to the editor from a Central Plaza store owner.

"Over the past two years, the number of shoppers in Central Plaza has been steadily decreasing while the popularity of skateboarding has increased dramatically. Many Central Plaza store owners believe that the decrease in their business is due to the number of skateboard users in the plaza. There has also been a dramatic increase in the amount of litter and vandalism throughout the plaza. Thus, we recommend that the city prohibit skateboarding in Central Plaza. If skateboarding is prohibited here, we predict that business in Central Plaza will return to its previously high levels.”
  

Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the recommendation is likely to have the predicted result. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation.

请问写argu的时候，举例子用什么时态呢？？？

According to the letter, the store owner holds the idea that the increasing skateboard users in the plaza accounts for the decrease in the business. So in order to thieve the business, skateboarding should be forbidden in Central Plaza. However, to evaluate the recommendation, questions should be answered concerning the reasons why people did not come to Central Plaza, what increased the amount of litter and vandalism and why the business decreased.

We need to investigate why fewer shoppers has come to the Plaza. The store owner assumes that the more skateboard users made shoppers unwilling to come. Nevertheless, it is entirely like that, the customers find it very difficult to park in the Plaza, in addition, other public transportations are not convenient either. What’s more, that the prizes in the Plaza is getting higher and higher could drive away the shoppers as well. If people did not go to the Plaza were for the aforementioned reasons, prohibiting skateboard users will not win shoppers back.

Plus, questions need to be answered regarding what caused the increase number of litter and vandalism. Chances are that it was the local residents rather than the skateboard skaters who dropped litters and did damage to public facilities constantly. Judging from this, if skateboard skaters did not did bad deeds, there was no using keeping them away from the Plaza with the aim of banning the behavior of dropping litter or vandalism, nor could the recommendation flourish the business.

Last but not the least, we should also question why really decreased the business in the Plaza. The letter assumes that skateboard users had negative effect on the business yet the store owner fails to take other possibilities into account. There is a possibility that, the shopping assistants were mean to the customers, which explained why fewer customers would like to shop in the Plaza. If the shopping assistants kept the arrogant attitudes, merely banning skateboard users would not promote the business.

zyzy_666666UID: 3500812

这样写有点儿像套模板，原因有两个：1.段落内的衔接是不流畅的，第一句和后面内容直接没有分析联系，相当于提出观点+举例。没有议论
2. 连接词选择的太生硬了，比如Plus，你接下去是要论述另一个问题，不是承接上文说“造成这个现象的另一个原因。”第一段不是“We need to investigate”嘛，第二段也重复这个”Another have to investigate is....."

文章要讨论“需要回答哪些问题”，“We need to investigate why fewer shoppers has come to the Plaza. ”这个阐明了要回答的问题，后面逻辑上应该紧接着解释为什么要回答这个问题。补充一句“因为商场人流多少是由很多因素导致的，不一定是滑板。”还可以再加“所以管理者的这种推断太过于片面”接着补充你下面的例子”例如.....情况，如果是这样的原因，这条规定是不能解决问题的。“