请帮忙看看这几种ARGUMENT的开头，那种比较好

chuckUID: 166028

The following appeared in a memorandum written by the vice president of Nature’s Way, a chain stores selling health food and other health-related products.
“Previous experience has shown that our store are most profitable in areas where residents are highly concerned with leading healthy lives. We should therefore build our next store in Plainsville, which has many such residents. Plainville merchants report that sales of running shoes and exercise closing are at all-time highs. The local health club, which nearly closed five years ago due to lack of business, has more members than ever, and the weight training and aerobics classes are always full. We can even participate a new generation of customers:Plainville’s schoolchildren are required to participate in a “fitness for life” program, which emphasizes the benefit of regular exercise at a early age.


以下是针对此ARGUMENT的几种开头。

In this argument, the arguer conclude that the next store of the chain should be built in Plainsville. To support the conclusion, the arguer point that the residents there are highly concerned with leading healthy lives and in this the store will be profitable there. In addition, the arguer reasons that since the merchants report that sales of running shoes and exercise closing are at all-time highs and local health club has more member than ever, and the weight training and aerobics classes are always full that the inhabitants there are enthusiastic to lead a healthy life. This argument suffers from several critical fallacies.

In this argument, the arguer recommends that the next store of the chain should be built in Plainville. To justify this claim, the arguer provides the evidence the residents in Plainville are highly concerned with leading healthy lives. In addition, he cites the results of merchants report that running shoes and exercise closing are at all-time highs,and local health club has more members than ever,and the weight training and aerobics classes are always full. A careful examination of this argument would reveal how groundless the conclusion is.

In this analysis, the arguer claim that the next store of the chain should be built in Plainville. To substantiate the conclusion, the arguer cites the example of the merchants reports there that the sales of running shoes and exercise closing are at all-time highs ,the local health club has more members than ever,and the weight training and aerobics classes are always full. A major assumption underlying this arguments is that the inhabitants there are highly concerned with leading healthy lives and this intend will bring profitability to the firm. This line of reasoning is flawed in several aspects.

The conclusion in this argument is that the next store of the chain of Nature’s Way should be built in Plainville. This recommendation is based on the reports that sales of running shoes and exercise closing are at all-time highs, the local health club has more members than ever, and the weight training and aerobics classes are always full. Meanwhile, the arguer assumes that the residents there are highly concerning with leading healthy lives, and in this the store will be profitable there.
The argument is problematic for several reasons.

The arguer attempt to convince us that the next store of the chain of Nature’s Way should be built in Plainville and it will be profitable to the firm by doing so. The major assumption underlying this argument is the residents there are highly concerning with leading a healthy lives. While this argument has some merits, several critical flaws seriously undermine the line of the reasoning.



In this argument, the arguer cites the evidence that the merchant reports in Plainville that sales of running shoes and exercise closing are at all-time highs,and the local health club has more members than ever,and the weight training and aerobics classes are always full, based on which he assumes that the residents there are highly concerning with leading healthy lives. Another piece of evidence presented to support the argument is that the schoolchildren are required to participate in a “fitness for life”program. In addition the arguer take it for granted that the firm will be profitable there. Hence, the arguer draw the conclusion that the next store of the chain should be built in Plainville. This argument is vulnerable in several aspects.

In this analysis, the argument intend to prove that the next store of the chain of Nature’s Way should be built in Plainville. To substantiate this claim, the arguer provides the evidence that the sales of running shoes and exercise closing are at all –time highs,the local health club has more member than ever,and the weight training and aerobics classes are always full,and that the schoolchildren are required to participate in a “fitness for life” program. This argument is based on the assumption that the residents there are highly concerning with leading healthy lives. As it stands, this argument is unconvincing for several aspects.

In this analysis, the arguer attempt to convince us that the next store of the chain of Nature’s Way. The major assumption underlying the argument is that the residents there are highly concerning with leading healthy lives, and that the firm will be profitable there. The evidence presented throughout the argument, however, is unreliable and hence does not lend strong support to what the arguer claims.

The claim that the next store of the chain should be built in Plainville sounds reasonable at first thought. After all, the arguer does offer some relevant evidence, and the assumptions underlying this argument are not without merits. However,several important concerns, which the arguer fails to dress in the argument,may seriously undermine the argument.

imongUID: 140258

都不好。
我认为。
罗嗦死。

chuckUID: 166028

能稍多指点一下么？
比如什么地方
谢谢

imongUID: 140258

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essaywriterUID: 166425

第一句话其实你最好把原来那人的目的是为了什么说出来比较好，不要上来就the arguer concludes that之类的话，太突兀
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