issue125 献给10G的第一篇，响应imong“诊断性测试“，我目前的能力也就这样了

imongUID: 140258

最初由 讨厌下雨 发布
[B]..

以下省略...... [/B]

nod....的确有这个道理哈-_-|
按照9楼的说法用不了太久就都补遗完成了哈？:D

其实引起imong的注意有好几种的方法的 :o  :p  :D

讨厌下雨UID: 163095

呵呵，那，开始写精华区没有的题目！:)
我怎么能知道没有哪些呢？先自己看看去

hattyUID: 141246

To 讨厌下雨：我写的那个不是jj题，所以，写的人可能少一些吧。。。



呵呵，imong给修改的确是一件幸福的事情 :D

不过，偶这是第一篇啊，是“诊断性测试”，恩恩，当时找不到这个什么什么测试的说法了，怎么都想不起来了，然后狂翻以前的帖子。。。

老大辛苦了哈~~

讨厌下雨UID: 163095

我写东西也不会考虑机井的，可是据说第一篇碰巧就是高频，运气不好吧，呵呵:)

hattyUID: 141246

其实，jj题还是有必要研究一下的，毕竟出过的题目，好象不是完全随机的，研究的目的：

1，可以增大考场上碰到熟悉题目的几率，毕竟是高频

2，如果真能深入研究，可以摸出一点ETS“随机选题”的门道。。。

3，增加信心~~

其中以2最为耐人寻味。。。

needleUID: 158900

issue125 The past is no predictor of the future.

It is generally believed that learning from the past is very useful, which not only guides us how to deal with problems when confronting specific cases[这里稍嫌罗嗦] but also gives us clues for future deeds. However, it is a little bit haste[这是n.，改为hasty] to say that the past can be the predictor of the future, as is analyzed below[对原题的改写不太好。原提要求你针对是否“不是未来的预测者”立论，而你现在立的是“不能说是未来的预测者”，而且，hasty的否定意味并不很强，使得观点相对原题不够明确].

Certain things happen in certain circumstances, and may turn to very different ones due to one mere [a single] change of the situation. As [the] society has developed day by day, with more and more advanced technology and ever-increased social wealth, the nowaday world is totally different from ever before. When things come about these[指代的是什么？哪些天？] days, they must emerge in different phases from the past with new preconditions. So, the past can not[cannot] predict even now, let alone the future[前面的因我没看懂，因果关系我认为很模糊，也很弱]. [举例时是不是加入一个词组表明是举例比较好？] The environmental deterioration, teenager pregnancy, and drug addiction, are all "these days'" social problems,[空格]and they are impossible to come out in the past surroundings[这些现代问题没有在过去的环境中发生过，这说明了什么呢？]. In medical field, the high blood pressure and myopia are familiar "these days’ "problems, and they only happen in the modern society though modern medical caring is more advanced than even[ever] before, because of the increaseingly [increasingly] rapid pace[什么的pace?跑步的？要说明白是生活的]. Therefore, as the world keeps on changing, the past can not[cannot] be the predictor of the future as they are under different conditions.[总结句还比较清晰][body1想说的是因为“过去”“未来”（甚至包括“现在”）这两个（三个）时间段有不同的环境（外在条件因素），使得过去不可能成为未来的“预言者”。我认为这是有一定道理的，但是论述写得很糊涂，也很模糊。完全可以从未来出现新鲜事物使得发生的事情是在过去完全无法想象的这个角度来写，也就是说，从未来入手。后面的例子看到了这种倾向，但是前面的论述采用“说理”，但说的不清楚。除了结尾总结，本段也没有明显的TS句]

Though there are many theories summarized about the past by generations that seem very helpful and can teach us very good lessons to build up an objective opinion of values and to prevent possible mistakes[好长的一个从句，个人意见，挺罗嗦的], they are not that excellent [how excellent?原题中有程度可以放在这里进行比较吗？] in predicting the future precisely[这个TS头重脚轻，不是个好句子！]. One of American Presidents [小写p] Franklin Roosevelt once put: "Eternal truth will be neither true nor eternal unless they have fresh meaning for every new social situation". Eternal truth is not suitable in every case, let alone rules summed up by people[eternal truth和rules有什么区别？这难道不是被包含的关系吗？]. And no matter what we can draw from the past and how wise the assessment is, it can not [cannot] precisely predict the future[这话一来是重复，二来是太绝对了，证明会有困难]. The past provide us with the laws of the emergence of one country as well as the laws of the thrive[这是v.! thriving] and the decay, and it offers the knowledge about how the nation interact[ed] with others, providing international and comparative perspectives, but, all the laws can not[cannot] be suitable in this multi-pole world[为什么说的这么绝对呢？而且还用all强调！那现代人学孙子兵法和资治通鉴不知道是为了什么了]. Thus, there are not eternal rules and the past can not […] precisely forecast the future.[说了半天的理，说的还是不通透。对于past laws有明显的故意曲解和节选，分析站不住脚。]

Some famous people said: "History is made of occasions". With numerous things[things和happen能搭配么？改matters/events] happening in the whole history of human beings and through critical[重要的？危险的？批评的？我没看明白这儿的用法] analysis of the saying, it is all agreed that the past is full of accidents and coincidences. So it has not gone too far to say that nothing can be the predictor of the future, as anything is a matter of probability and nobody can ever foresee it[你的body是越发的把自己逼上绝境了，写的越来越武断和绝对]. Just recall the memory of the ship called Titanic and the probability of the tragedy. From people's past knowledge and experience, based on the most sophisticated technology at that time, the great Titanic would be the safest ship ever known. However, it sunk in her[it和her怎么搭配的？] first voyage, owing to the strong collision from[from?是不是应该是with] the iceberg. Given the knowledge about the structure of the ship, there did exist some flaws in Titanic, and the sailor did not take his responsibility to notice the iceberg, and still there were many other factors that contributed to the mishap. But if any one of these factors did not exist with that little probability, the voyage would be a great one. So before things happen, nobody can assert to say [assert就可以了] that anything will be in a certain way.[例子举得很生动，但这也顶多作为灾难不可预测的例证。要总结anything恐怕力度不够。]

The past is behind us and the future is in front of us. Still, with the guide of the knowledge and the experience from the past, people can conquer new cases with more ease[怎么忽然态度转变了？是要写让步段？为什么没有转折词？]. And the clear, profound and thorough interpretation of the past would definitely give clues to people when encountering similar cases as before[好像你前面的body否认了出现similar cases的可能性，尤其是body1和3，一个说外部因素都不同，很肯定的下结论说过去的没发生在现在和将来，另一个说历史都是偶然事件，那么重复和相似难道也算偶然？] , and to some extent outlining the future, as well as by analyzing the faults and mistakes, designing new methods to avoid the possible faults and extend the merits. Nevertheless[这里转折凭什么？前面说了一大堆，后面的结论居然没给出任和根据就把前面的完全否了，为什么？], the past can not[…] predict the future.

To sum up, though studying the past is very helpful, as the world is becoming more and more complex , it is very difficult to predict the future by the way of looking into the past. Moreover[两重递进不要用这个词], as many things happen with small probability and can not[…] be controlled, nothing will be absolute[nothing will be absolute，和你的论证就是自相矛盾]. So, I can affirm that the past is no predictor of the future.

[这个题目我认为选择完全支持或者完全反对的立场是绝对的不明智，只能说是没有对题目进行深入的思考，更加的没有把题目和现实情况联系起来。hatty你这篇，我看可以作为反面教材来让大家分析这种绝对立场的问题了。

The past究竟能够带给我们什么？它和future的关联究竟在哪里？什么情况下可以预测未来？什么情况下无能为力？要注意规律是必然（即可预测大的走向），细节是偶然（即不可预测过分具体的事件）。一棒子把过去的rules/laws/facts的作用打死，这是不可能证明得了的事情，更不是能在这么一篇issue里面能够完成的，impossible mission！因为这是不符合现实的观点。

写法上，3个支持段之间毫无联系和关系，最后的body4作为让步段是跳出来的，毫无征兆，甚至让步让的让人感觉其实这段讲得更有道理，结果生拉硬拽的用一句结尾收住，套上了反方向的笼头。开头段写的没有结尾段立场清晰。

语言上，一如往常，hatty的长句还是很多，但有时候控制的不好。长短结合不要忘记了。

Sorry, hatty, 这篇我批评的比较狠。希望说的有道理的地方能对你有益，说错了的地方我们再探讨。]

hattyUID: 141246

谢谢姐姐的热情修改~~

有些地方还是想同姐姐讨论一下，感觉那样收获会相对大一些，QQ上说吧

again，谢谢姐姐！~

imongUID: 140258

我把坑填上了！在8楼！

讨厌下雨UID: 163095

最初由 imong 发布
[B]其实引起imong的注意有好几种的方法的 :o  :p  :D
[/B]

狂FT，不声不响多了这句...努力研究中！

BTW hattyJJ好久没来了，想念ing

这个坑能不能不填？ :cool:

hattyUID: 141246

谢谢老大的意见，还没有来得及看，down下来仔细研究~~~

回家之前，我还想着啥时候看看老大的意见，然后赶快写第二篇呢，回学校以后一上网，忙着看网页，哈哈，竟然看到了，欣喜中~~~

imongUID: 140258

不是吧.......都这么久了还没写第二篇哪？@_@

赶紧着往下写呀.....

hattyUID: 141246

你说第一篇是诊断。。。@ _@

偶看你接了，然后又木有消息了，偶又知道你忙，不敢给你发消息的说。。。 :rolleyes:

所以，每天过来看看有没有你的新帖子。。。诊断了以后偶才好往下写啊~~~不过这次好了，明天就写第二篇！~ :D

只是不知道这次是不是还可以吸引老大的眼球了，期待中~~ :p

imongUID: 140258

彻底倒塌.....................................

hattyUID: 141246

别~~~

老大倒了，我们怎么混啊？谁谁造个墙，扶着？

问题是能不能撑的住你？ :D

讨厌下雨UID: 163095

看hattyJJ婴儿时期就那么强悍，必然撑得祝！

庆祝你回来一个：） 这也成水贴了，后后