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作文题目：Some people believe that the country would benefit a lot from a large number of young people entering into university; however, others think that the large amount of people receiving the education of university only leads to graduate unemployment. Discuss both views and give your opinion

There is a considerable debate relating to whether enormous graduates from university benefit a country or result in graduate unemployment. In my opinion, to encourage people to receive higher education is beneficial.

On the one hand, one of the key considerations of those who argue that the number of graduates from university should be limited is that too many graduates lead to a high rate of graduate unemployment. It is true that more graduates from university intensify the difficulty in hunting for a job. It is reported that more than 20% undergraduate students in China are not recruited after graduation every year, which becames a severe issue. However, the primary reason accounting for this phenominon is graduates' unwillingness to occupy a job requires hard working rather than the shortage of available job positions or too many graduates.

On the other hand, there are several advantages of a large number of individuals receiving higher education. From a society perspective, widespread of higher education provides citizens access to professional knowledge, which contribute to promote society development. For example, China developed in a significantly fast speed these years,due to increasing teenagers went to university resulting from Chinese government's strong support in higher education. From an individual level, the education experience in university enhance people's competition in finding jobs with better benefits, while those who receive less education are more likely to occupy jobs with poor condition.

In conclusion, I reckon that a large amount of people entering in to university benefit both a country and an individual.