Issue123 8月4日考,谢谢大家帮忙.

love-yogurtUID: 171347

都这会儿了还写不够字数,急...
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123"It is possible to identify a person's politics within a very short time of meeting him or her. Everything about people—their clothes, their friends, the way they talk, what they eat—reflects their political beliefs."

The speaker asserts that a person's politics can be identified within a very short time of meeting him or her. This statement does have some merits, but this judge takes so much technique that the result is always mislead. So generally speaking, I can't agree with the speaker.

Admittedly, a person's politics which is a inseparable part of one's belief, at theoretical level, should be embodied in his reflection to a certain incident and other actions. If so, his choice of clothes would be the first and most apparent indication. However, in real life, this is not the case. Consider, we can see leaders from varies countries appearing in TV news wearing similar black suits and white shirts, such as Bush and Hu Jintao. Are they bearing the same political beliefs? They seldom are. As far as I concerned, clothing is influenced more by a person's job, his cultural background or the present social fashion. For instance, students wear unified school suits, policemen and soldiers all have their exclusive suits, and researchers have laboratorial outer coats. We can see people from some nation would like to wear their national exclusive clothes. This is a reflection of their cultural background. And we can spot young women in fashion clothes on streets. Of course this can't be linked with their political beliefs.

Let's see if we can judge a person's political belief by his choice of friends. Life experiance tells us that those who are talkative and easygoing are more likely to have a lot of friends than those silent ones. And some people would like to have friends who share the same interest with them, while others enjoy having friends whose idea always contradict their own. And, of course, people can have friends with the same political beliefs with him as well as those others. This choice is influenced more by people's character, rather than his politics.

From the way a person talks, it is even harder to identify something related to politics. People's way of talking shifts from time to time. Many people talk with different attitudes to different audiences. Even to the same person, people talk differently according to different moods. And cultural background and education background are also important factors that exert significant influences on it. The way people talk is too complex to serve as a sign to indicate people's politics, especially within a very short time.

To conclusion, from what has been discussed above, one can hardly identify a person's politics within a very short time from his appearance or just a little information.

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123"It is possible to identify a person's politics within a very short time of meeting him or her. Everything about people—their clothes, their friends, the way they talk, what they eat—reflects their political beliefs."

The speaker asserts that a person's politics can be identified within a very short time of meeting him or her. This statement does have some merits, but this judge takes so much technique that the result is always mislead. So generally speaking, I can't agree with the speaker.

Admittedly（感觉这句转折承让的句子应该放到整段最后，或专门列出一段来说说admittedly的内容）, a person's politics which is a inseparable part of one's belief, at theoretical level, should be embodied in his reflection to a certain incident and other actions. If so, his choice of clothes would be the first and most apparent indication. However, in real life, this is not the case. Consider, we can see leaders from varies (various)countries appearing in TV news wearing similar black suits and white shirts, such as Bush and Hu Jintao. Are they bearing the same political beliefs? They seldom are. As far as I( am) concerned, clothing is influenced more by a person's job, his cultural background or the present social fashion. For instance, students wear unified school suits, policemen and soldiers all have their exclusive suits, and researchers have laboratorial outer coats. We can see people from some nation would like to wear their national exclusive clothes. This is a reflection of their cultural background. And we can spot young women in fashion clothes on streets. Of course this can't be linked with their political beliefs.

Let's see if we can judge a person's political belief by his choice of friends. Life experience tells us that those who are talkative and easygoing are more likely to have a lot of friends than those silent （introvert）ones. And some people would like to have friends who share the same interest with them, while others enjoy having friends whose idea（加s） always contradict their own. And, of course, people can have friends with the same political beliefs with him as well as those others. This choice is influenced more by people's character, rather than his politics.

From the way a person talks, it is even harder to identify something related to politics. People's way of talking shifts from time to time. Many people talk with different attitudes （这个attitudes只是the way of talking 的一个方面，无论talk什么都得有它，而且说不定什么时候talk的way不一样而attitudes是一样的呢，so我觉得应强调the tone, the speed of one’s talking or the countenance when one talks）to different audiences. Even to the same person, people talk differently according to different moods. And cultural background and education background are also important factors that exert significant influences on it. The way people talk is too complex to serve as a sign to indicate people's politics, especially within a very short time.

To conclusion(to conclude or in conclusion), from what has been discussed above, one can hardly identify a person's politics within a very short time from his appearance or just a little information( other superficial phenomenon).
写得很有条理，思路也很清楚，很不错的，比我好多了。加油哦！就这几天了。相信你行的：）

love-yogurtUID: 171347

谢谢了哦!!

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The speaker asserts that a person's politics can be identified within a very short time of meeting him or her. This statement does have some merits, but this judge takes so much technique that the result is always [U]mislead[/U] .（[B]mislead) [/B]  So generally speaking, I can't agree with the speaker.

Admittedly, a person's politics which is a inseparable part of one's belief, at theoretical level, should be embodied in his reflection to a certain incident and other actions. If so, his choice of clothes would be the first and most apparent indication. However, in real life, this is not the case. Consider, we can see leaders from varies countries appearing in TV news wearing similar black suits and white shirts, such as Bush and Hu Jintao. Are they bearing the same political beliefs? They seldom are. As far as I ([B]am[/B] )concerned, clothing is influenced more by a person's job, his cultural background or the present social fashion. For instance, students wear unified school suits, policemen and soldiers all have their exclusive suits, and researchers have laboratorial outer coats. We can see people from some nation would like to wear their national exclusive clothes.(用非限定从似乎更好一些） [U]This is [/U]  a reflection of their cultural background. And we can spot young women in fashion clothes on streets. （同上）Of course this can't be linked with their political beliefs.

Let's see if we can judge a person's political belief by his choice of friends. [U]Life experiance tells us that those who are talkative and easygoing are more likely to have a lot of friends than those silent ones. [/U]  （这一句的作用是什么？看不大明白）And some people would like to have friends who share the same interest with them, while others enjoy having friends whose idea always contradict their own. And, of course, people can have friends with the same political beliefs with him as well as those others. This choice is influenced more by people's character, rather than his politics.

From the way a person talks, it is even harder to identify something related to politics. People's way of talking shifts from time to time. Many people talk [U]with[/U]  （[B]in?）[/B] different attitudes to different audiences. Even to the same person, people talk differently [U]according to [/U]  （[B]in?)[/B] different moods. And cultural background and education background are also important factors that exert significant influences on it. The way people talk is too complex to serve as a sign to indicate people's politics, especially within a very short time.

To conclusion, from what has been discussed above, one can hardly identify a person's politics within a very short time from his appearance or just a little information.

  
  应该可以拿个不错的分数了！

love-yogurtUID: 171347

Life experiance tells us that those who are talkative and easygoing are more likely to have a lot of friends than those silent ones. 这句话我是想说一个人交多少朋友跟他的性格有关.
大家这么热心给我改,感动ing...谢谢了哦!

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最初由 love-yogurt 发布
[B]Life experiance tells us that those who are talkative and easygoing are more likely to have a lot of friends than those silent ones. 这句话我是想说一个人交多少?.

以下省略...... [/B]

我是指你这一句在段落中好像有点多余，因为你的中心句是“人们既会选择跟自己政治信仰相同的人做朋友，也会选择跟自己政治信仰不同的人做朋友。“

love-yogurtUID: 171347

哦,也是哦!删!
谢了!