ISSUE5 (国家要规定课程吗）

阿秀UID: 137492

ISSUE5 A nation should require all its students to study the same national curriculum until they enter college rather than allow schools in different parts of the nation to determine which academic courses to offer.

正文

Should a nation unify the curricula students should study before they enter college across country? In my observation, I agree the basic courses should be decided by the nation; however, other courses can and conditionally should be determined by school itself.

Let us begin with the function of school education. School education should be responsible for both students and the nation. While on the one hand, it should make a person prepared for his/her future, on the other hand, it should prepare the future citizens for the nation. So nation has its necessity to set basic curricula to ensure the quality of its future citizens. In fact, many countries have applied this policy, and literature, basic math and some nature sciences are often the subjects set by the nations. And, in a large degree, this policy also meets the needs of students, because the curricula set by the nation represent the basic requirements of the future society. No doubt a men without reading, writing skills or simple math knowledge cannot survive today. For these reasons, letting a nation to unify the curricula is necessary and benefit.

However, letting a nation to determine all curriculums is unwise, because it ignores the difference among regions. For a country composed of several nations, the government should respect the differences of these nations, such as religions, languages, and history. In this sense, letting these regions determine courses to meet their own needs will effectively maintain the unity of all nations and avoiding the confliction between the regions and the government. China, for example, consists of 56 nations, several of which maintain their own language and are proud of their own history, if the government determines all curricula, it is impossible to let all students study all these languages, which would result in the waste of time, and it is also impossible for a specific nation to give up its own language, which is not only a loss in culture but also a kind of humiliation. So only resolution is to allow these regions set additional specific courses.

Moreover, we can also allow school to set their unique curricula. When different schools have different characters, students may have more chances to get suitable school education. Granted that every individual is unique, conformed curricula can only meet most people basic requirements. Specific talents need specific cultivation. If some school strengthens physics, some emphasize arts and some teach wushu, students have the chances to choose the school with what they are interested in.  For example, since wushu is not a requisite of society, government has no reason to set this course, but there remain many students with talents in wushu and like it. So, if a nation unifies all curricula, these students would lose the opportunity to develop their talents. It will be such a pity.

To conclude, to ensure the future of a nation, the nation should determine basic curricula of school before students enter college. However, we should also allow different regions and schools set complementary courses to respect different cultures and provide students more choices.

clement320UID: 168035

顶先。

posicarUID: 169586

呵呵，发表一下粗浅的建议啊！改的不对请忍受！（）里面的是我认为比较好的写法。
Should a nation unify the curricula students should study before they enter college across country? In my observation, I agree the basic courses should be decided by the nation; however, other courses can and conditionally should be determined by school itself.

Let us begin with the function of school education. School education should be responsible for both students and the nation. While on the one hand, it should make a person prepared for his/her future, (.)此处应断句(On)on the other hand, it should prepare the future citizens for the nation. So nation has its necessity to set basic curricula to ensure the quality of its future citizens. In fact, many countries have applied this policy, and literature, basic math and some nature sciences are often the subjects set by the nations. And, in a large degree, this policy also meets the needs of students, because the curricula set by the nation represent the basic requirements of the future society. No doubt a men (person) without reading, writing skills or simple math knowledge cannot survive today. For these reasons, letting a nation to unify the curricula is necessary and benefit. (It is necessary and benefit for a nation to unify the curricula.)

However, letting a nation to determine all curriculums is unwise, (it is unwise to let a nation determine all curriculum,) because (by doing this) it ignores the difference among regions. For a country composed of several nations, the government should respect the differences of these nations, such as religions, languages, and history. In this sense, letting these regions determine courses to meet their own needs will effectively maintain the unity of all nations and avoiding the confliction between the regions and the government. China, for example, consists of 56 nations, several of which maintain their own language and are proud of their own history, (.)（此处应断句）if (If) the government determines all curricula, it is impossible to let all students study all these languages, which would result in the waste of time, (会浪费时间？)and it is also impossible for a specific nation to give up its own language, which is not only a loss in culture but also a kind of humiliation. So （the）only resolution is to allow these regions set additional specific courses. （关于不同民族语言和论证不太好啊，语言叙述上要改改）

Moreover, we can also allow school to set their unique curricula. When different schools have different characters, students may have more chances to get suitable school education. Granted that every individual is unique, conformed curricula can only meet most people basic requirements. Specific talents need specific cultivation. If some school strengthens physics, some emphasize arts and some teach wushu, students have the chances to choose the school with what they are interested in. For example, since wushu （确认“武术？”的拼写是这样的吗？外国人看得懂汉语拼音吗？举一个其他例子也可以，比如ballet芭蕾，比较通俗易懂）is not a requisite of society, government has no reason to set this course, but there remain many students with talents in wushu and like it. So, if a nation unifies all curricula, these students would lose the opportunity to develop their talents. It will be such a pity. （It will be a piry that these students would lose the opportunity to develop their talents.）

To conclude, to ensure the future of a nation, the nation should determine basic curricula of school before students enter college. However, we should also allow different regions and schools set complementary courses to respect different cultures and provide students more choices.

感觉总体思路是清晰的，但是个人认为武术（？）的例子不太好，一些例子还可以，但是表述的不清楚，语言也还有可以改进的地方。我的水平也很差，呵呵，
一会我把我昨天写同一个个ISSUE的贴上，千万要帮忙改改阿！！

阿秀UID: 137492

谢谢，:) posicar 。 wushu英文中也是这样拼写的，不过用 ballet 确实会好些。

不过，提个小小建议，下个加颜色的工具，下次帮别人改的时候让人比较容易看出来。

你的连接给我吧。

阿秀UID: 137492

再改了

Should a nation unify the curricula students should study before they enter college across country? In my observation, I agree the basic courses should be decided by the nation; however, other courses can and conditionally should be determined by school itself.

Let us begin with the function of school education. School education should be responsible for both students and the nation. While on the one hand, it should make a person prepared for his/her future, and on the other hand, it also should prepare the future citizens for the nation. So nation has its necessity to set basic curricula to ensure the quality of its future citizens. In fact, many countries have applied this policy, and literature, basic math and some nature sciences are often the subjects set by the nations. And, in a large degree, this policy meets the needs of students as well, because the curricula described by the nation represent the basic requirements of the future society. No doubt a person without reading, writing skills or simple math knowledge cannot survive today. For these reason,  It is necessary and beneficial for a nation to unify the curricula.

However, it is unwise to let a nation determine all curriculums, because it ignores the difference among regions. For a country composed of multi-nation, the government must respect the differences among them, such as religions, languages, and history. It therefore makes sense to allow these regions determine courses according to their own needs by effectively maintaining the unity of all nations and avoiding the unnecessary conflictions between the regions and the government. China, for example, consists of 56 nations, more than ten of which maintain their own languages. If the government should determine all curricula, it is unadvisable to let the whole students study all these languages, some of which have seemed useless for most students except the original speakers, and it is also impossible for a specific nation to give up its own language, which is not only a loss in a culture but also a kind of humiliation. So the only resolution is to allow these regions set additional specific courses.

Moreover, we can also allow school to set their unique curricula. When different schools have different characters, students may have more chances to get suitable school education. Granted that every individual is unique, conformed curricula can only meet most people basic requirements. Specific talents need specific cultivation. If some school strengthens physics, some emphasize arts and some teach wushu, students have the chances to choose the school with what they are interested in. For example, since wushu is not a requisite of society, government has no reason to set this course, but there remain many students with talents in wushu and like it. So, if a nation unifies all curricula, these students would lose the opportunity to develop their talents. It will be such a pity.

To conclude, to ensure the future of a nation, the nation should determine basic curricula of school before students enter college. However, we should also allow different regions and schools set complementary courses to respect different cultures and provide students more choices.

posicarUID: 169586

我模仿了范文中的一些句子，请帮忙看一下这样会不会算作雷同。谢谢。本人现在还处于模仿阶段，一些句子都是直接拿来用的，请多多批评我啊！！

The author seems to prefer a national curriculum for all the students until they are enter college rather than allow school in different parts of the nation to determine which academic course to offer. I do not agree with the author's opinion. In my view, however, different schools should have different curriculums although a national core curriculum would be beneficial in several respects.

Admittedly, a national core curriculum is basically beneficial. Firstly, basic knowledge and life skills can be introduced to the children by the national core curriculum. Before the college education allows for much more diversity and creativity, the education system should stay stable and authoritative enough to ensure the children fundamental skills and knowledge. The basic knowledge such as math, national history, and language should be imposed to the children so that all the children of the nation will receive education on balance. Also, a core curriculum would insure that every child will be taught core values of the society so that he or she can survive in the society-values such as honest, tolerance, and polite.

However, the different curriculums offered by different schools have more beneficial over the national core curriculum. Firstly, different schools have their own advantages. For example, some schools are very near to the sea and some are built near the mountains. The former school can afford more course about the sea, as it is easily accessible to the sea, while the latter school can afford more courses about geology. The children who like to dance can go to a special dancing school to get more knowledge of dancing. On the other hand, an art school certainly will afford more about art so it can cater the taste of children who prefer art. If all the courses are the same, the children will be educated the same and their special talents will be lost.

Secondly, it is somehow impossible to teach the children all over the nation a core curriculum because there are some respects will hinder this progress such as local culture. For example, it is impossible to teach all the students in the nation any local culture and history because children of other areas may be not interested in the course. On the other hand it will be a pity that these cultures cannot be handed down by education and the local students may be eager to learn them because they are proud of the history and culture of their hometown.  

In final analysis, homogenization of elementary and secondary education would make our children dull and just like cast of the same mold. While it would serve as an insurance policy against a future populated with illiterates and ignoramuses, at the same time it might serve to obliterate cultural diversity and tradition. The only way out to this dilemma is to impose the basic skills and knowledge and leaves the rest up to each state or even each community to combine a required core curriculum and additional ethnic courses.

还有，我不会用那个改变颜色的东东，请指教

阿秀UID: 137492

The author seems to prefer a national curriculum for all the students until they are (are去掉) enter college rather than allow school in different parts of the nation to determine which academic course to offer (rather than distribute this power to schools in different regions) . I do not agree (disagree) with the author's opinion. In my view, however (however去掉), different schools should have different curriculums although a national core curriculum would be beneficial in several respects.

Admittedly, a national core curriculum is basically beneficial. Firstly, basic knowledge and life skills can be introduced to the children by the national core curriculum (by them). Before the college education allows for (allow for 是什么意思)much more diversity and creativity, the education system should stay stable and authoritative enough to ensure the children fundamental skills and knowledge. The basic knowledge such as math, national history, and language should be imposed to the children so that all the children of the nation will receive education on balance. Also, a core curriculum would insure that every child will be taught core values of the society so that he or she can survive in the society-values such as honest, tolerance, and polite.

However, the different curriculums offered by different schools have more beneficial over the national core curriculum. Firstly, different schools have their own advantages. For example, some schools are very near to the sea and some are built near the mountains. The former school can afford more course (courses) about the sea, as it is easily accessible to the sea, while the latter school can afford more courses about geology. (这有点说不通, 不妨说 前一个可以开设游泳课程,后者则可以开设爬山课程) The children who like to dance can go to a special dancing school to get more knowledge of dancing (to get more professional instruction). On the other hand, an art school certainly will afford more about art so it can cater the taste of children who prefer art (it). If all the courses are the same, the children will be educated the same and their special talents will be lost.

Secondly, it is somehow impossible to teach the children all over the nation a core curriculum because there are some respects will hinder this progress such as local culture. For example, it is impossible to teach all the students in the nation any local culture and history because children of other areas may be not interested in the course.(interest in,呵呵,好象理由都差不多,不过我觉得还是说语言比较没用比较好，想想少数民族的语言对大多数人来说根本用不到,文化却好象不太好这么明显的说没用。而且国家强制课程的考虑点估计不是出于兴趣吧.) On the other hand it will be a pity that these cultures cannot be handed down by education and the local students may be eager to learn them because they are proud of the history and culture of their hometown.

In final analysis, homogenization of elementary and secondary education would make our children dull and just like cast of the same mold. While it would serve as an insurance policy against a future populated with illiterates and ignoramuses, at the same time it might serve to obliterate cultural diversity and tradition. The only way out to this dilemma is to impose the basic skills and knowledge and leaves the rest up to each state or even each community to combine a required core curriculum and additional ethnic courses.
(好文章啊.佩服,佩服.除了改在上面的以外，觉得该把你的第一段改改,因为你的读起来是完全同意说不同学校应该有不同课程,可是全文和结尾明显是说国家应该指定核心课程但下放权利给各学校.所以改改就更完满了，工具在置顶里，我是用[(content)] 设定兰色来改的，GRE作文都啃下来了，这个小东西你应该会对付的)

我要飞UID: 171394

水平有限哈，一起讨论和参考，有改错的地方请原谅哈，不要shouting match哈
再改了
Should a nation unify the curricula students should study before they enter college across country?（across country好象是“越过田野”的意思吧？是不是throughout the country） In my observation, I agree （你不喜欢加that啊？）the basic courses should be decided by the nation; however, other courses （加个offen如何）can and conditionally should be determined by school itself.

（主题句呢？是想自然引出来吗，最好开头直接写出目的来，不怕重复）Let us begin with the function of school education. School education should be responsible for both students and the nation. While （While可以去掉）on the one hand, it should make a person prepared for his/her future（prepared是不是有问题？讨论下！to prepare？）, and （and和while一起去掉）on the other hand, it also should prepare the future citizens for the nation. So nation has its necessity to set basic curricula to ensure the quality of its future citizens. In fact, many countries have applied this policy, and （这里有问题不是并列关系，可以考虑insofar as连接或者such as）literature, basic math and some nature sciences are often the subjects set by the nations. And, in a large degree（to a degree：在…范围内）, this policy meets the needs of students as well, because the curricula described by the nation represent the basic requirements of the future society. No doubt a person without reading, writing skills or simple math knowledge cannot survive today. For these reason, It is necessary and beneficial for a nation to unify the curricula(按照你的意思这句子有违你的第1段的立场哦，应该是安排一部分课程).

However, it is unwise to let a nation determine all curriculums（curricula）, because it ignores the difference among regions. For a country composed of multi-nation, the government must respect the differences among them, such as religions, languages, and history（这个怎么不用复数拉）. It therefore makes sense to allow these regions determine courses according to their own needs by effectively maintaining the unity of all nations and avoiding the unnecessary conflictions between the regions and the government. （可以再发挥一点，比如multicultural education）China, for example, consists of 56 nations, more than ten of which maintain their own languages. If the government should（should 多鱼了？） determine all curricula, it is unadvisable to let the whole students study all these languages(有点问题，可能吗？), some of which have seemed useless for most students except the original speakers, and it is also impossible for a specific nation to give up its own language, which is not only a loss in a culture but also a kind of humiliation. So the only resolution（solution） is to allow these regions set additional specific courses.

Moreover, we can also allow school to set their unique curricula（why?主题句子最好点出，哪怕是几个单词说出好处）. When（？Since） different schools have different characters, students may have more chances to get suitable school education. Granted that every individual(an individual) is unique, conformed curricula can only meet most people basic requirements. Specific talents need specific cultivation.(For example缺少过渡) If some school strengthens physics, some emphasize arts and some teach wushu, students have the chances to choose the school with what they are interested in. For example, since wushu is not a requisite of society, government has no reason to set this course, but there remain many students with talents in wushu and like it. So, if a nation unifies all curricula, these students would lose the opportunity to develop their talents. It will be such （去掉，或者不去such在a后面加个形容词）a pity.

To conclude（2个to？读起来不舒服的说）, to ensure the future of a nation, the nation should determine basic curricula of school before students enter college. However, we should also allow different regions and schools set complementary courses to respect different cultures and provide students more choices.（文中多次用到future，难道contemporary 不管拉？其实可以只说unify对country的好处就可以了）
本文段落间的思路清晰，挺好，但是inside the 段落，似有点小毛病：句式用的比较单调，简单句比较多and句子间的过度用词不太好或者不太准，which render段落比较松散。继续努力！

ggyyUID: 153086

一点拙见

Should a nation unify the curricula students [B][I]should （前面已经有should了，用have to怎样？）[/I] [/[/B] color]study before they enter college across country? In my observation，I agree the basic courses should be decided by the nation; however, other courses can and conditionally should be determined by school itself.

Let us begin with the function of school education. School education should be responsible for both students and the nation. [B][I]While（去掉） [/I][/B]   on the one hand, it should make a person [B][I]prepared（to prepare）[/I] [/B]   for his/her future, and on the other hand, it also should prepare the future citizens for the nation. So nation has its necessity to set basic curricula to ensure the quality of its future citizens. In fact, many countries have applied this policy, and[B][I](用从句怎样？where)[/I] [/B]   literature, basic math and some nature sciences are often the subjects set by the nations. [B]（这里说的有点空洞了，应该说一下nation需要他的citizen哪些具体的quality呢？而这些quality又是怎样在统一的课程中体现的呢？）[/B] [B]And,(去掉) [/B]  in a large degree, this policy meets the needs of students as well, because the curricula described by the nation represent the basic requirements of the future society. [B]No a person （no one）[/B] without reading, writing skills or simple math knowledge [B]cannot(can) [/B]  survive today. For these reason, It is necessary and beneficial for a nation to unify the curricula.

However, it is unwise to let a nation determine all curriculums, because it ignores the difference among regions. For a country [B]composed（comprised）[/B]  of multi-nation, the government must respect the differences among them, such as religions, languages, and history. It therefore makes sense to allow these regions determine courses according to their own needs by effectively maintaining the unity of all nations and avoiding the unnecessary conflictions between the regions and the government. China, for example, consists of 56 nations, more than ten of which maintain their own languages. If the government should determine all curricula, it is unadvisable to let [B]the whole(all the) [/B]  students study all these languages, some of which have seemed useless for most students except the original speakers, and it is also impossible for a specific nation to give up its own language, which is not only a loss in a culture but also a kind of humiliation([B]这句结构太繁了，改改)[/B] . So the only resolution is to allow these regions set additional specific courses.

Moreover, we can also allow school to set their unique curricula. When different schools have different characters, students may have more chances to get suitable school education. [B]Granted（好象该用granting吧）[/B]  that every individual is unique, conformed curricula can only meet most people basic requirements[B]（basic requirement of most people）[/B] . Specific talents [B](这里不要用天才这个词吧，一是太绝对，二是太少数了)[/B] need specific cultivation. If some school strengthens physics, some emphasize arts and some teach wushu, students have the chances to choose the school with what they are interested in. For example, since wushu is not a requisite of society, government has no reason to set this course, but there remain many students with talents in wushu and like it. So, if a nation unifies all curricula, these students would lose the opportunity to develop their talents. It will be such a pity. [B]这段是在论述由于个体的差异需要不同的课程，思路还行，但例子举得不太好，个人意见而已。[/B]

To conclude, to ensure the future of a nation, the nation should determine basic curricula of school before students enter college. However, we should also allow different regions and schools set complementary courses to respect different cultures and provide students more choices.

总的来讲思路很清晰，但感觉语言不够流畅，也是楼上那位说的简单句太多，用词也有点重复，比如那个different我看到好多，还有就是should用得太多，本身这个词就该少用。不过还好了，我的语言也不怎么过关，楼主有时间批批我的吧，发了不少 :p

ggyyUID: 153086

帮我看看这几篇中一篇吧，如果有时间
https://bbs.gter.net/showthread.php?s=&threadid=211382

https://bbs.gter.net/showthread.php?s=&threadid=210567

https://bbs.gter.net/showthread.php?s=&threadid=208931

阿秀UID: 137492

ggyy 我要飞

都谢谢啦，

1）have to 是 不得不 的意思，should 有应该的意思，还是用should了。
      2） make 后面没有加to的，改原型啦。
      3） granted that 是 某事为真的习惯用法
      4） talents 是才能的意思。
如果以后我改的有问题也请指出啊。
  意见都接受，我再好好改改。：）