issue147 传统与现代化

阿秀UID: 137492

Issue147 Tradition and modernization are incompatible. One must choose between them.
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In my opinion, modernization is the process of the development of human society, not only in material but also in thought. However, tradition is what people obey or celebrate routinely, which formed in history. Must we choose between tradition and modernization? I doubt it, and in fact, the society is being modernized by people with tradition.

Admittedly, during the modernization, we do lose some traditions for several reasons. One is the change of human's conceptions. Unlike our ancestors, with the accumulation of knowledge and development of technology, we do not fear thunder and think of rain as a mystery, so those ceremonies to express our respect to god, which have been considered as tradition, were forgot by people. In addition, the correction of some wrong ideas leads us to changes some traditions. For example, when women won their equality, a men with many wives becomes guilty in China, however, before this era, tradition indeed ruled that wife should not exhibit her jealousness about other wives of her husband. All in all, the improvement of human's cognition contributes to many changes of tradition inevitable.

However, the above statements is unequal to agree that tradition and modernization are incompatible, because, we should not neglect that many traditions are conserved and developed with the process of modernization. The westerners are still celebrating their Christmas, Thanksgiving Day, Valentine day, and many other traditional festivals. Modernization does not change the need of expressing our love, sharing our happy, and getting with all loving us. For these traditions, what modernization does is just fulfilling them with new content.  The Santa trees are full of colorful lights instead of candles, we send e-mail with music and animation instead of a paper card to express our feelings, and we can get together before TV to welcome new year with people all over the world. In this sense, modernization makes tradition more interesting and colorful.

Furthermore, modernization can create new tradition for a nation. It is well known, tradition is not unchangeable, and it is a created thing also. With the modernization, international communication increases, which sometimes brings a country the other culture's traditions. China, for example, has also begun to celebrate Christmas day. In valentine day, people falling in love begin their own celebrations as well. I believe with the modernization there will have more and more new festivals.

In short, though modernization have make many traditions disappear, there are still many left. Moreover, the modernization also endows the tradition new content and brings new traditions for a nation. All these things verify that tradition and modernization are compatible on earth.

detail_yyyUID: 167745

In my opinion, modernization is the process of the development of human society, not only in material but also in thought. However, tradition is what people obey or celebrate routinely, which formed in history. Must we choose between tradition and modernization? I doubt it, and in fact, the society is being modernized by people with tradition.

Admittedly, during the modernization, we do lose some traditions for several reasons. One is the change of human's conceptions. Unlike our ancestors, with the accumulation of knowledge and development of technology, we do not fear thunder and think of rain as a mystery, so those ceremonies to express our respect to god, which have been considered as tradition, were forgot by people. In addition, the correction of some wrong ideas leads us to changes some traditions.这两点差别不大啊？对错误思想的矫正也是观念的改变啊  
For example, when women won their equality, a men man  with many wives becomes guilty in China, however, before this era, tradition indeed ruled that wife should not exhibit her jealousness about other wives of her husband. All in all, the improvement of human's cognition contributes to too   many changes of tradition inevitable.

However, the above statements is unequal to agree that tradition and modernization are incompatible, because, we should not neglect that many traditions are conserved and developed with the process of modernization. The westerners are still celebrating their Christmas, Thanksgiving Day, Valentine day, and many other traditional festivals. Modernization does not change the need of expressing our love, sharing our happy, and getting with all loving us. For these traditions, what modernization does is just fulfilling them with new content. The Santa trees are full of colorful lights instead of candles, we send e-mail with music and animation instead of a paper card to express our feelings, and we can get together before TV to welcome new year with people all over the world. In this sense, modernization makes tradition more interesting and colorful.

Furthermore, modernization can create new tradition for a nation. It is well known, tradition is not unchangeable, and it is a created thing also. With the modernization, international communication increases, which sometimes brings a country the other culture's traditions. China, for example, has also begun to celebrate Christmas day. In valentine day, people falling in love begin their own celebrations as well. I believe with the modernization there will have more and more new festivals.
modernization是带来了这些节日，但这些节日在中国还不能称之为传统吧？例子不太有说服力。春节联欢晚会这个例子如何？

In short, though modernization have make many traditions disappear, there are still many left. Moreover, the modernization also endows the tradition new content and brings new traditions for a nation. All these things verify that tradition and modernization are compatible on earth. 结尾最好再强调一下one needs not choose between tradition and modernization

阿秀UID: 137492

detail_yyy
说得没错,呵呵,可能在BODY的第一部分我应该把第一点换成: 对自然的了解的改变.第二为: 社会观念的变迁.

倒二部分,我也想过春节联欢晚会的问题，可是总觉得和我在上一段说的"节日保留了, 只是赋予了它新的内容", 那么这段再写这个是不是有重复的感觉. 不过我现在想,说 元旦 好啦.呵呵,新历使用前,我们没有这个节日.不知道是不是可以啊.

ggxinxinUID: 161010

Christmas, Thanksgiving Day, Valentine day [ write in the some date will be better: T, C and V]
what modernization does is just fulfilling them with new content[ is fulfilling with? I am not sure, just feel strange]
you said:
说得没错,呵呵,可能在BODY的第一部分我应该把第一点换成: 对自然的了解的改变.第二为: 社会观念的变迁
this will be good.
yousaid:不过我现在想,说 元旦 好啦.呵呵,新历使用前,我们没有这个节日.不知道是不是可以啊
sure, I think.

buggodUID: 164979

Issue147 Tradition and modernization are incompatible. One must choose between them.
------正文------ 40min
In my opinion, modernization is the process of the development of human society, not only in material but also in thought. However只是定义概念，转折有点大, tradition is what people obey or celebrate routinely, which formed in history. Must we choose between tradition and modernization? I doubt it, and in fact, the society is being modernized by people with tradition.

Admittedly, during the modernization, we do lose some traditions for several reasons.下边好象要跟reason,但是加的是changes One is the change of human's conceptions. Unlike our ancestors, with the accumulation of knowledge and development of technology, we do not fear thunder andor think of rain as a mystery, so those ceremonies to express our respect to god(who is considered controlling thunder and rain) , which have been considered as tradition, were forgot by people. In addition, the correction of some wrong ideas leads us to changes some traditions. For example, when women won their equality, a men with many wives becomes guilty in China, however, before this era, tradition indeed ruled that wife should not exhibit her jealousness about other wives of her husband. All in all, the improvement of human's cognition contributes to many changes of tradition inevitable.

However, the above statements is unequal to agree that tradition and modernization are incompatible, because, we should not neglect that many traditions are conserved and developed with the process of modernization. The westerners are still celebrating their Christmas, Thanksgiving Day, Valentine day, and many other traditional festivals. Modernization does not change the need of expressing our love, sharing our happy, and getting with all loving us. For these traditions, what modernization does is just fulfilling them with new content. The Santa trees are full of colorful lights instead of candles, we send e-mail with music and animation instead of a paper card to express our feelings, and we can get together before TV to welcome new year with people all over the world. In this sense, modernization makes tradition more interesting and colorful.

Furthermore, modernization can create new tradition for a nation. It is well known, tradition is not unchangeable, and it is a created thing also. With the modernization, international communication increases, which sometimes brings a country the other culture's traditions. China, for example, has also begun to celebrate Christmas day. In valentine day, people falling in love begin their own celebrations as well. I believe with the modernization there will have more and more new festivals.

In short, though modernization have make many traditions disappear, there are still many left. Moreover, the modernization also endows the tradition new content and brings new traditions for a nation. All these things verify that tradition and modernization are compatible on earth.

结构还是很不错的说,
对自然的看法改变算传统吗?无论怎么改变都是改变传统观念吧

天青地白UID: 161876

还没帮你看过作文呢，占位先

阿秀UID: 137492

:) 又被翻出来啦。谢谢大家先。
buggod
several reasons 指得就是后面的改变，所以后面跟了change。
关于自然方面，我想说的是，因为对自然认识的提高许多传统已经不存在了，比如我们的祖先会祭水神，等等，现在就不会了。

天青地白UID: 161876

Issue147 Tradition and modernization are incompatible. One must choose between them.
------正文------ 40min
In my opinion, modernization is the process of the development of human society, not only in material but also in thought. However, tradition is what people obey or celebrate routinely, which formed in history. Must we choose between tradition and modernization? I doubt it, and in fact, the society is being modernized by people with tradition.

Admittedly, during the modernization, we do lose some traditions for several reasons. One is the change of human's conceptions. Unlike our ancestors, with the accumulation of knowledge and development of technology, we do not fear thunder and think of rain as a mystery, so those ceremonies to express our respect to god, which have been considered as tradition, were forgot（forgotten） by people. In addition, the correction of some wrong(会不会太直接？) ideas leads（？） us to changes（to do ） some traditions. For example, when women won their equality, a men with many wives becomes guilty in China, however, before this era, tradition indeed ruled that wife should not exhibit her jealousness about other wives of her husband. All in all, the improvement of human's cognition contributes to many changes of tradition inevitable.

However, the above statements is unequal to agree that tradition and modernization are incompatible, because, we should not neglect that many traditions are conserved and developed/preserved and generated with the process of modernization. The westerners are still celebrating their Christmas, Thanksgiving Day, Valentine day, and many other traditional festivals. Modernization does not change the need of expressing our love, sharing our happy, and getting with all loving us(what’s the meaning?). For these traditions, what modernization does is just fulfilling them with new content. The Santa trees are full of colorful lights instead of candles, we send e-mail with music and animation instead of a paper card to express our feelings, and we can get together before TV to welcome new year with people all over the world. In this sense, modernization makes tradition more interesting and colorful.

Furthermore, modernization can create new tradition for a nation. It is well known,(去逗号加that) tradition is not unchangeable, and it is a created thing also. With the modernization, international communication increases, which sometimes bring a country the other culture traditions. China, for example, has also begun to celebrate Christmas day. In valentine day, people falling in love begin their own celebrations as well. I believe with the modernization there will have more and more new festivals.

In short, though modernization have make many(some用一些代替很多吧)) traditions disappear,（用while连接） there are still many left. Moreover, the modernization also endows the tradition new content and/as well as brings new traditions for(to) a nation. All these things verify that tradition and modernization are compatible on earth.

lilizergUID: 172324

个人意见，楼主不要见笑
Issue147 Tradition and modernization are incompatible. One must choose between them.
------正文------ 40min
In my opinion, modernization is the process of the development of human society-not only in material but also in thought. However, tradition is what people obey（follow）or celebrate routinely, which formed （in去掉）history. Must we choose between tradition and modernization? I doubt it, and in fact,(去掉the) society is being modernized by people with the help of tradition.

Admittedly, during（去掉the）modernization, we do lose some traditions for several（certain 感觉好点） reasons. One is the change of human's conceptions. Unlike our ancestors, with the accumulation of knowledge and development of technology, we do not fear thunder and think of rain as a mystery, so those ceremonies to express our respect to god, which have been considered as tradition, were forgot by people.（尽量不要举宗教的例子，还有，这个例子虽然不是很“宗教”可是不是很贴切，不畏雷电不意味着现代化，而且恐惧雷电和传统无关。我觉得抽象概念的例子不容易举，要是分成现代化对政治，经济，文化的也许好些:政治上更民主，经济上购买商品可以通过internet，文化上很多东西可以与更广的人交流） In addition, the correction of some wrong ideas leads us to changes some traditions. For example, when women won their equality, a men with many wives becomes guilty in China, however, before this era, tradition indeed ruled that wife should not exhibit her jealousness about other wives of her husband. （这个例子还不错，如果能举成美国人更了解的女权主义更好）All in all, （the improvement of human's cognition 还是用mordernization更切题） contributes to many changes of tradition inevitable（用副词，或改为强调句：It is inevitable for mordernization to ).（这段只举了一个concept的例子，有了one，其他的呢？）

However, the above statements is not equal to agree that tradition and modernization are incompatible because we should not neglect that many traditions are conserved and developed with the process of modernization. The westerners are still celebrating their Christmas, Thanksgiving Day, Valentine's day, and many other traditional festivals. Modernization does not change the need of expressing our love, sharing our happy, and getting with all loving us. For these traditions, what modernization does is just fulfilling them with new content. The Santa trees are full of colorful lights instead of candles, we send e-mail with music and animation instead of a paper card to express our feelings, and we can get together before TV to welcome new year with people all over the world. In this sense, modernization makes tradition more interesting and colorful.（这段的例子不错）

Furthermore, modernization can create new tradition for a nation. It is well known, tradition is not unchangeable, and it is a created thing also. With the modernization, international communication increases, which sometimes brings a country the other culture's traditions. China, for example, has also begun to celebrate Christmas day. In valentine's day, people falling in love begin their own celebrations as well. I believe with the modernization there will have more and more new festivals.

In short, though modernization have make many traditions disappear, there are still many left. Moreover, the modernization also endows the tradition new content and brings new traditions for a nation. All these things verify that tradition and modernization are compatible on earth.
我觉得倒数第二段应该作为文章的中心，现代化对于传统来说只是人的一种工具，人们现代化的同时也在利用他创造新的传统，Ways we act nowadays will be treated as tradition in the future
结合现代化对传统的几个方面的影响来举例论证
楼主要注意对冠词的把握。