issue161 限时 媒体与英雄 必回改 三天后考

loreleiUID：156467

Issue161: 511 words  40 minutes
In this age of intensive media coverage, it is no longer possible for a society to regard any woman or man as a hero. The reputation of anyone who is subjected to media scrutiny will eventually be diminished.

In this titled statement, there arises the issue of the media's influence on hero: do herosheroes diminish because of media scrutiny? In my opinion, although media scrutiny has been used to demolish the reputation of many herosheroes, true herosheroes will stay to be models of society even under scrutiny.

Admittedly, heroes suffer from much more serious inspections and tests in today's media age, and as a result, many people’s's reputation are ruined by the scrutiny. In the old days,  the feats of the heroes were spread from person to person, with the information unconfirmed and exaggartedexaggerated along the process of spreading; and thus the figure of the hero was created rather than proven by facts. Yet today's advancement of technology allows  more careful inspections of the claimed feats of the heroes, for instance, the computerized data-base allows checking past records. Therefore, for today's heroes, once they are presented on the media, their past faults and character flaws are under the inspectionation of millions of viewers. In situations like this, nothing can escape the eyes of the public and flaws will be unlimitedly enlarged as a purest water drop under the inspectionspectation  of microscope.

However, while the fairytale-like prefect man and woman might no longer exist in the eye of the audience, true heroes, who possess personalities or abilities that match the values of the soceitysociety, would still be regard as idols. Retrospectively, history is replete with examples to illustrate the case, namely Bill ClitonClinton and Kobe Bryant. Although guilty of lying to the public about his affaires with the Whitehouse intern, Clinton is still considered by many as a great president whose economic policies propellpropel American economy and continue the high rate growth for many years. SimilarilySimilarly, it is the case of this basketball star. Although accused of raping a 17 years old girl, Kobe is still well recognized for his brilliant basketball skills and magneficientmagnificent performances on the court. In short, for true heroes, a single failure or fault is far from enough to make them disappear in the eyes and the hearts of the public.

In addition, on one hand, media plays the role of destoryerdestroyer, ruining heroes' reputations; however, on the other hand, it is the creator of many heroes, especially non-traditional heroes. Unlike in the old time, when heroes need outstanding personality or ability in order for them to stand out among the crowd, today's new type of heroes are, however, chiefly made by the media and even defined by the media. One telling example is the new-shot pop singer William Hung. Showing inability to sing on the key or to dance accord to the beat,beats, Hung is no kind of the common accepted type of idol. However, under the full-scale coverage and intensive exposure of the media, the man is certainly a somewhat idol or hero to his advocators. As people are more influenced by media everyday, we are tending to accept the opinions and values propgandedpropagandized to us, losing partly our own judgementjudgment and in turn, heroes are once again produced.

Overall, media scrutiny is more or less like a filter that helps to sift the dreg and identify a grain of gold from a pile of sand. By doing so, heroes today are placed on a tower that depends on the support of the people, and in turn only those true heroes who win continuous recognitions can survive in today’s media society.

rainy_catUID：176169

可能放进word里面，这篇文章不会有太多的语法错误提示，不过，整体的语言感觉有点怪怪的，不知道是不是想着中文查英文的。下面这段举个例子吧，因为自己也不是很好，所以，只能稍稍点一下。
However, while the fairytale-like prefect man and woman might no longer exist inthe eye of the audience 就是their audiences' eyes就凑合了吧，这么写觉得拗口 , true heroes, who possess personalities or abilities that match the values of society, would still be regard as idols. Retrospectively换成个小短语好不？又别扭了, history is replete 想表达历史上这样的例子很多？with examples to illustrate the case, namely 不知道是不是我的理解有问题，个人认为，namely这个词，不是完全和such as 或者example一致的Bill ClitonClinton and Kobe Bryant. Although 这个词后面加个句子或者省略结构，这个名词性的短语在这，偶又有点读着不顺当guilty of lying to the public about his affaires with the Whitehouse intern, Clinton is still considered by many as a great president whose economic policies propel American economy and continue the high rate growth for many years. Similarly, it is the case of this basketball star. Although accused of raping a 17 years old girl, Kobe is still well recognized for his brilliant basketball skills and magnificent performances on the court 艾，曾经也是俺的偶像呢. In short, for true heroes, a single failure or fault is far from enough to make them disappear in the eyes and the hearts of the public.
写得比我强，加油。

loreleiUID：156467

才发现，我的文中错误一堆，有些是因为放到word里修改后，这里就会重复显示的缘故。

loreleiUID：156467

呵呵，先感谢rainy－cat的修改
关于提出的问题
namely查金山 等于specifically,如果按意思来好像是可疑的哦，但是自己也拿不准，就cat说不能够完全等同，能否稍微解释一下。
Retrospectively像这样的副词提前是学比如admittedly 的用法，好像也看过别人类似的写法，不过不知道学对了没。
还有although那句话 后面应该是省略了主谓 he is，不知道这样讲不讲的通
另，rainy-cat，不知你考过了没有，没有也可以大家一起看看

枫丹UID：166492

(建议你在把句子改改，首先是你的让步，一个英雄是因为他成为media scrutiny而名声扫地，还是因为advancement of technology， 我想你是想说前者，可是，我个人认为不够清楚。
然后倒数第二段，讲英雄主要是被媒体包装出来的，可是结尾却说只有真英雄是可以在媒体社会生存，那William Hung到底是不是英雄啊？
我个人认为你首先要确定英雄的概念。

rainy_catUID：176169

最初由 lorelei 发布
[B]呵呵，先感谢rainy－cat的修改
关于提出的问题
namely查金山 等于specifically,如果按意思来好像是可疑的哦，但是自己也拿不准，就cat说不能够完全等同，能否稍微解释一?.

以下省略...... [/B]

namely, 中文翻译就一个字（刚查的）：“即”。你把它带进你的句子里面就明白了

admittedly 提前，是强调让步，而且通常那么写还是为了前后衔接。你只是想表明回顾历史上的意思对不？而且提前了它对于文章的连贯性没有大的好处。你也没错拉~ 我就是觉得，不要随便把一个句子颠倒，意思上没问题，不过语气有点不太一样。而且，我感觉，你是刻意希望句子漂亮才这样写的，所以提出来这一点。其实，没有语病，只是觉得。。。考试的时候，表达意思是最重要的，在修辞上费时间有点费力不讨好。呵呵，俺一届粗人，说出来大家明白就好了。

guilty 是我不好没读懂你要省略的东西。就觉得别扭：-）