issue238 自我感觉观点有点另类，期望得到大家的指点

dapangduUID: 176130

第一次贴作文，找了半天发贴规则，希望不要有问题。
自己感觉观点有点另类，但是没有什么其他好的想法了。其中贝多芬的例子受gre一篇阅读文章影响。
issue 238:"Conformity almost always leads to a deadening of individual creativity and energy."
一致几乎总是阻隔个人的创造力和活力。

For conformity doesn’t mean rigid similar and hidebound and plays distinct roles in different fields, we can’t definitely say that it will almost always kill individual creativity and energy. I think they do not have the relationship as life and death.

When we consider science innovations, breaking conformity really brings out many miracle results. Such as Galileo found the faults of Aristotle’s theory and gave the world the famous experiment on the leaden tower in Pisa. At his time nobody else would challenge Aristotle’s “truth”, which was seen as a conformity of them. Furthermore, the artists of impressionism left us many master works though they didn’t follow their contemporary confirm.

However, not all individual’s creativity and energy have been deadened by conformity. An authentic research found even the pieces of Beethoven are strictly keep in the formations. He kept to  the conformity ,but used more cunning composition techniques than others. Without breaking the conformity , he created some of the most famous and creative music. He even devoted all his life for the music. Not only Beethoven but also other famous musician have been found to fellow the conformity in the field of music. The truth we don’t detect the fact is we always don’t have enough specialty knowledge to find out this.

As discarding the narrow definition of conformity which always is a negative impact of comply the societal principle, we find conformity has not relative with the deaden of individual creative and energy. Whatever they break or keep to the conformity, people will devote to their career with creativity enthusiasm if they can.

另外,我刚开始写，不知道是练习少还是其他原因，不限时间也只能写这么长。大家给点建议。

期望大家踊跃批斗！

lakeqianUID: 157560

多看范文。注意空行。

dapangduUID: 176130

谢谢提示，作了修改！
另外还有问题：
每段开始要留空格吗？一般大家留几个space键的大小？
i am serious.

imongUID: 140258

写得少体现的是你的论点其实比较浅吧

你可以先参考一下习作区里面文章别人的论点和论证 然后看看有无可以借鉴之处 看看如何拓展自己的论点

ISSUE综合参考区 >> Reasoning and Critical Thinking 里面的帖子也看看

每段之间空一行 开头顶格写

dapangduUID: 176130

非常感谢！
其实我本来是以为自己先写，然后再看别人的东西找和自己的差别。
这样就忽视考试的时候题库是已知的，所以我们广泛的吸取别人的意见不会影响临场发挥的效果。
再道一声谢谢！:)

lakeqianUID: 157560

段首不空各，段间空行。
如果没话写看看imong的追星特训中的condition那篇。按某种条件一拆马上内容就多了。你写了艺术，科学对吧，显然忘了社会科学或者政治领域吧。
注意要论述充分！！考的就是论述。看看范文怎么论述的。不要只是摆例子。你一句话就想搞定一个领域也太。。。

hattyUID: 141246

lake,好早啊~~

偶也快睡觉了。。。

lakeqianUID: 157560

另外，楼主可以看看280篇，不过那些文章不都很好。。。
记住：要论述，想想高中的议论文怎么写的。

ps.to HATTY是啊。睡得越来越早了。。。今天7点睡的。

hattyUID: 141246

睡得越来越早了。。。今天7点睡的。

可是，以前没有知道你10点睡觉啊。。。

7am。。。

dapangduUID: 176130

谨记大家建议。
非常感谢！
不断学习去！