Issue10，各位高人帮我看看这篇？

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10. "Governments must ensure that their major cities receive the financial support they need in order to thrive, because it is primarily in cities that a nation's cultural traditions are preserved and generated."

政府必须确保给予主要城市发展所需的财政支持，因为一个国家的文化传统主要发源于并保留在城市中。

立场：不完全同意。大城市作为政治经济文化的中心具有极其重要的意义，但是农村和一些中小城市一样具有保存文化的作用，而且作为主要城市，他们已经在全球花的过程中丧失了很多的个性，在保存文化方面起的作用可能远远没有那些小城市和农村大。

1，让步：政府当然应该给与大城市以财政支持——政治，经济，科技和现代文化的中心。

2，转折：但是受到全球化浪潮的影响，一些大城市已经逐渐得失去了自己的特色，在保存文化产同方面的作用被削弱了。

3，反倒是一些小城市和农村，保存了自己的特色和文化传统。

所以，应该综合考虑。


Should governments ensure their major cities receive the financial support they need? In my point of view, the answer is definitely positive. Whereas, is it true as the author asserts that a nation's traditions are preserved and generated primarily in these cities? I cannot agree with the author this time.

It is well known that major cities, as the centers of politics, economics, science and technology, and modern culture, play the indispensable role in a nation, which makes them have priority when the government distributes financial supports. Every nation must have some major cities, for example, Beijing and Shanghai in China, New York and Washington in the United States. Such major cities not only are the centers in its nation, but also some important parts of the whole world. Most of the political, cultural and commercial communications are fulfilled in those cities and most of the competitions between different nations also come on in these cities. In a certain degree, these major cities are the symbols of their nations, whose degree of thriving will influent the prosperous of the whole nation. Hence, it is easily to understand that why nations must ensure those cities enough financial support.

However, as for the preserving and generating a nation's cultural traditions, I have to say that those major cities are not so important as the author thinks. Although those major cities having long history used to generate some resplendent cultures, with the development of the globalization of the whole world, they are inevitably involved into such progress that may lead to the unfortunate losing of their precious historical relics. Beijing is a case in point. In order to accelerate the pace of modernization and globalization, many traditional domiciles and old-line buildings of the old Beijing are pulled down for leaving more space of modern exploiture. In addition, facing with the intense impact of foreign culture, more and more Chinese youth turn their interests to the exotic cultures such as English songs and Japanese and Korea films, while look the traditions as some things so-called "past-time". If such condition keeps a long time, people can imagine the ultimate lost of tradition. A famous Chinese writer, Long Yingtai used to mention this problem in some of her articles for provoking the awareness of people and government to this dangerous inclination. So the major cities although have many merits in propelling nation’s thriving, they have also some defects cannot be ignored in preserving traditional cultures.

On the contrary, some smaller cities and rural areas may offset the defection of those major cities in their generation and preservation of cultural traditions. On the one hand, because of comparatively less communication with outsides, these places may pertain their own characters more easily. For instance, some rural areas still have their ancient ceremonies in celebrating some traditional festivals. I ever traveled in a little town in the south of China, people there still kept some habits of marriage coming down form their precedents and have some archaic monument for remembering some heroes of their clan. On the other hand, some cultural traditions are born from these places at all. As far as I know, many traditional cultures of China are originated from the basin of the Yellow River, along which many of the cities are not the major cities. Nevertheless, the actual condition is that, because of scarcity of necessary financial support, some of the relics there are facing with the destiny of distinction. Therefore nation should also think of these cities for their considerable contribution in the preserving and generating of traditional culture.

In conclusion, because of their absolutely important status in a nation, the major cities have sufficient reasons to get the financial support of the government. But for the better reservation of cultural traditions, government should also consider of the smaller cities and rural areas.

slsUID: 175311

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感谢！等我考完一定回报：）

slsUID: 175311

No.1  Issue10，各位高人帮我看看这篇？
10. "Governments must ensure that their major cities receive the financial support they need in order to thrive, because it is primarily in cities that a nation's cultural traditions are preserved and generated."

政府必须确保给予主要城市发展所需的财政支持，因为一个国家的文化传统主要发源于并保留在城市中。

立场：不完全同意。大城市作为政治经济文化的中心具有极其重要的意义，但是农村和一些中小城市一样具有保存文化的作用，而且作为主要城市，他们已经在全球花的过程中丧失了很多的个性，在保存文化方面起的作用可能远远没有那些小城市和农村大。

1，让步：政府当然应该给与大城市以财政支持——政治，经济，科技和现代文化的中心。

2，转折：但是受到全球化浪潮的影响，一些大城市已经逐渐得失去了自己的特色，在保存文化产同方面的作用被削弱了。

3，反倒是一些小城市和农村，保存了自己的特色和文化传统。

所以，应该综合考虑。


Should governments ensure their major cities receive the financial support they need? In my point of view, the answer is definitely positive. Whereas, is it true as the author asserts that a nation's traditions are preserved and generated primarily in these cities? I cannot agree with the author this time this time ? 这次？怪怪的on this point 吧.

It is well known that major cities, as the centers of politics, economics, science and technology, and modern culture, play the indispensable roleroles in a nation, which makes them have priority when the government distributes financial supports. Every nation must have some major cities, for example, Beijing and Shanghai in China, New York and Washington in the United States. Such major cities not only are the centers in its nation, but also some important parts of the whole world. Most of the political, cultural and commercial communications are fulfilled in those cities and most of the competitions between different nations also come onconcentrate on 如何？ in these cities. In a certain degree, these major cities are the symbols of their nations, whose degree of thriving will influent the prosperous of the whole nation. Hence, it is easily to understand that why nations must ensure those cities enough financial support.

However, as for the preserving and generating a nation's cultural traditions, I have to say that those major cities are not so important as the author thinks. Although those major cities having long history used to generate some resplendent cultures, with the development of the globalization of the whole world, they are inevitably involved into such progress that may lead to the unfortunate losing of their precious historical relics. Beijing is a case in point. In order to accelerate the pace of modernization and globalization, many traditional domiciles and old-line buildings of the old Beijing are pulled down for leaving more space of modern exploiture. In addition, facing with the intense impact of foreign culture, more and more Chinese youth turn their interests to the exotic cultures such as English songs and Japanese and Korea films, while look the traditions as some things so-called "past-time". If such condition keeps a long time, people can imagine the ultimate lost of tradition. A famous Chinese writer, Long Yingtai used to mention this problem in some of her女的吗？好像不对 哈哈 articles for provoking the awareness of people and government to this dangerous inclination. So the major cities although have many merits in propelling nation’s thriving, they have also some defects cannot be ignored in preserving traditional cultures. 你说大城市不是文化中心，但你举例却指出北京的文化是如何被破坏，这不能证明你的论点吧 相反，正是这些原因大城市应该以它的文化被保护

On the contrary, some smaller cities and rural areas may offset the defection of those major cities in their generation and preservation of cultural traditions. On the one hand, because of comparatively less communication with outsides, these places may pertain their own characters more easily. For instance, some rural areas still have their ancient ceremonies in celebrating some traditional festivals. I ever traveled in a little town in the south of China, people there still kept some habits of marriage coming down form their precedents and have some archaic monument for remembering some heroes of their clan. On the other hand, some cultural traditions are born from these places at all. As far as I know, many traditional cultures of China are originated from the basin of the Yellow River, along which many of the cities are not the major cities. Nevertheless, the actual condition is that, because of scarcity of necessary financial support, some of the relics there are facing with the destiny of distinction. Therefore nation should also think of these cities for their considerable contribution in the preserving and generating of traditional culture.

In conclusion, because of their absolutely important status in a nation, the major cities have sufficient reasons to get the financial support of the government. But for the better reservation of cultural traditions, government should also consider of the smaller cities and rural areas.

个人认为这篇没有你其他的写的好 （我都看了的：））题目的“because”是想说大城市和文化的联系，以及这是否成为保护它的原因。你的思路却是 1 大城市由于经济政治因素要受保护 2 大城市没小地方文化传统浓  这样的思路与题目脱节了。 建议： 2 1 倒过来说。 此外 文化传统不等于旧房等 (三段北京的例子中提到traditional domiciles and old-line buildings )

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谢谢sls的仔细批阅  :)

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[B]Should governments ensure their major cities receive the financial support they need? In my point of view, the answer is definitely positive. Whereas, is it true as the author asserts that a nation's traditions are preserved and generated primarily in these cities? I cannot agree with the author this time this time ? 这次？怪怪的on this point 吧. ［ :o 我的确是想说“这次”，好像有些中国化。接受你的建议。］

It is well known that major cities, as the centers of politics, economics, science and technology, and modern culture, play the indispensable roleroles in a nation, which makes them have priority when the government distributes financial supports. Every nation must have some major cities, for example, Beijing and Shanghai in China, New York and Washington in the United States. Such major cities not only are the centers in its nation, but also some important parts of the whole world. Most of the political, cultural and commercial communications are fulfilled in those cities and most of the competitions between different nations also come onconcentrate on 如何？［好。］in these cities. In a certain degree, these major cities are the symbols of their nations, whose degree of thriving will influent the prosperous of the whole nation. Hence, it is easily to understand that why nations must ensure those cities enough financial support.

However, as for the preserving and generating a nation's cultural traditions, I have to say that those major cities are not so important as the author thinks. Although those major cities having long history used to generate some resplendent cultures, with the development of the globalization of the whole world, they are inevitably involved into such progress that may lead to the unfortunate losing of their precious historical relics. Beijing is a case in point. In order to accelerate the pace of modernization and globalization, many traditional domiciles and old-line buildings of the old Beijing are pulled down for leaving more space of modern exploiture. In addition, facing with the intense impact of foreign culture, more and more Chinese youth turn their interests to the exotic cultures such as English songs and Japanese and Korea films, while look the traditions as some things so-called "past-time". If such condition keeps a long time, people can imagine the ultimate lost of tradition. A famous Chinese writer, Long Yingtai used to mention this problem in some of her女的吗？好像不对 哈哈 ［:eek: 可是我记得她确实是位女作家］articles for provoking the awareness of people and government to this dangerous inclination. So the major cities although have many merits in propelling nation’s thriving, they have also some defects cannot be ignored in preserving traditional cultures. 你说大城市不是文化中心，但你举例却指出北京的文化是如何被破坏，这不能证明你的论点吧 相反，正是这些原因大城市应该以它的文化被保护 ［我这段的意思是：大城市的确是一些文化发源的地方，但是受到全球化浪潮的冲击，他们在保存这些文化方面的作用被削弱了。 :( 看来没有说清楚。］

On the contrary, ［开头的这个联接短语感觉不好，有没有好的建议呢？］some smaller cities and rural areas may offset the defection of those major cities in their generation and preservation of cultural traditions. On the one hand, because of comparatively less communication with outsides, these places may pertain their own characters more easily. For instance, some rural areas still have their ancient ceremonies in celebrating some traditional festivals. I ever traveled in a little town in the south of China, people there still kept some habits of marriage coming down form their precedents and have some archaic monument for remembering some heroes of their clan. On the other hand, some cultural traditions are born from these places at all. As far as I know, many traditional cultures of China are originated from the basin of the Yellow River, along which many of the cities are not the major cities. Nevertheless, the actual condition is that, because of scarcity of necessary financial support, some of the relics there are facing with the destiny of distinction. Therefore nation should also think of these cities for their considerable contribution in the preserving and generating of traditional culture.

In conclusion, because of their absolutely important status in a nation, the major cities have sufficient reasons to get the financial support of the government. But for the better reservation of cultural traditions, government should also consider of the smaller cities and rural areas.

个人认为这篇没有你其他的写的好 （我都看了的：））题目的“because”是想说大城市和文化的联系，以及这是否成为保护它的原因。你的思路却是 1 大城市由于经济政治因素要受保护 2 大城市没小地方文化传统浓 这样的思路与题目脱节了。 建议： 2 1 倒过来说。 此外 文化传统不等于旧房等 (三段北京的例子中提到traditional domiciles and old-line buildings )[/B]

我的思路是这样的：大城市在现代的重要地位决定了他们应该得到政府支持——〉大城市在保存文化方面有作用，但这种作用正在被削弱——〉相反，小城市和农村可以更好的保存一些文化传统——〉所以政府应该在支持大城市的同时，给与小城市和农村以一定的关注。

这篇是限时写的，一看就知道质量明显滑坡啦  :mad:

slsUID: 175311

题目的是有因果关系的 你的论证过程好像忽略了这点， 简明点： 题目说 A重要， 且A在B中，所以支持B ；你的说 C重要 C在B中，所以支持B，此外,A不在B中。 这种论证结构我看来缺乏逻辑（哈哈，我学数学的）。之所以建议你2 1 倒过来，因为这样逻辑变为 A 重要，C重要，任意一个在B中，都应改支持B。中间的转折，过渡等看你怎么安排了。不知道你现在明白我的意思否？ 四段开头 ，我马上看。

slsUID: 175311

Should governments ensure their major cities receive the financial support they need? In my point of view, the answer is definitely positive. Whereas,可以这样用？还请指导 is it true as the author asserts that a nation's traditions are preserved and generated primarily in these cities? I cannot agree with the author this time.

It is well known著名？ 感觉不好 that major cities, as the centers of politics, economics, science and technology, and modern culture, play the a indispensable role in a nation, which makes them haveemjoy priority when the government distributes financial supports. Every nation must have some major cities, for example, Beijing and Shanghai in China, New York and Washington in the United States. Such major cities not only are the centers in its nation, but also some important parts of the whole world. Most of the political, cultural and commercial communications are fulfilledtaken place in those cities and most of the competitions between different nations also come on in these cities. In a certain degree, these major cities are the symbols of their nations, whose degree of thriving will influent the prosperous of the whole nation. Hence, it is easily to understand that why nations must ensure those cities enough financial support.

However, as for the preserving and generating a nation's cultural traditions, I have to say that those major cities are not so important as the author thinks. Although those major cities having long history used to generate some resplendent cultures, with the development of the globalization of the whole world, they are inevitably involved into such progress that may lead to the unfortunate losing of their precious historical relicsrelics不好. Beijing is a case in point. In order to accelerate the pace of modernization and globalization, many traditional domiciles and old-line buildings of the old Beijing are pulled down for leaving more space of modern exploiture. In addition, facing with the intense impact of foreign culture, more and more Chinese youth turn their interests to the exotic cultures such as English songs and Japanese and Korea films, while look the traditions as some things so-called "past-time". If such condition keeps a long time, people can imagine the ultimate lost of tradition. A famous Chinese writer, Long Yingtai used to mention this problem in some of her articles for provoking the awareness of people and government to this dangerous inclination. So the major cities although have many merits in propelling nation’s thriving, they have also some defects cannot be ignored in preserving traditional cultures我还是觉得这段欠缺，特别是最后一句总结，“保护地位虽然低但还是要保护”可能我有点晕了吧 哈哈.

On the contrary对不住了，是在想不出，总觉得逻辑不对 还在晕中～～, some smaller cities and rural areas may offset the defection of those major cities in their generation and preservation of cultural traditions. On the不要theone hand, because of comparatively less communication with outsides, these places may pertain their own characters more easily. For instance, some rural areas still have their ancient ceremonies in celebrating some traditional festivals. I ever traveled in a little town in the south of China, people there still kept some habits of marriage coming down form their precedents and have some archaic monument for remembering some heroes of their clan. On the other hand, some cultural traditions are born from these places at all. As far as I know, many traditional cultures of China are originated from the basin of the Yellow River, along which many of the cities are not the major cities. Nevertheless, the actual condition is that, because of scarcity of necessary financial support, some of the relics there are facing with the destiny of distinction. Therefore nation should also think of these cities for their considerable contribution in the preserving and generating of traditional culture.

In conclusion, because of their absolutely important status in a nation, the major cities have sufficient reasons to get the financial support of the government. But for the better reservation of cultural traditions, government should also consider of the smaller cities and rural areas.

fishergirlUID: 152325

最初由 sls 发布
[B]题目的是有因果关系的 你的论证过程好像忽略了这点， 简明点： 题目说 A重要， 且A在B中，所以支持B ；你的说 C重要 C在B中，所以支持B，此外,A不在B中。 这种论证结构我看..

以下省略...... [/B]

:eek:  :o 最怕这种逻辑推理了，虽然俺学的东西好歹也是属于理科。。。

能不能把那些字母分别代表什么说清楚一点呢？ 俺这两天想着就要考了，着急上火啊，脑子有点短路了 :(

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最初由 sls 发布
[B]Should governments ensure their major cities receive the financial support they need? In my point of view, the answer is definitely positive. Whereas,可以这样用？还请指导 is it true as the author asserts that a nation's traditions are preserved and generated primarily in these cities? I cannot agree with the author this time. [/B]

whereas，连词，“然而，但是，反之，尽管，鉴于”，我感觉语气比but要弱，所以一般喜欢用在段内的让步或转折。更准确的用法可能要查阅字典了 :)

最初由 sls 发布
[B]It is well known著名？ 感觉不好 that major cities, as the centers of politics, economics, science and technology, and modern culture, play the a indispensable role in a nation, which makes them haveemjoy priority when the government distributes financial supports. Every nation must have some major cities, for example, Beijing and Shanghai in China, New York and Washington in the United States. Such major cities not only are the centers in its nation, but also some important parts of the whole world. Most of the political, cultural and commercial communications are fulfilledtaken place in those cities and most of the competitions between different nations also come on in these cities. In a certain degree, these major cities are the symbols of their nations, whose degree of thriving will influent the prosperous of the whole nation. Hence, it is easily to understand that why nations must ensure those cities enough financial support. [/B]

it is well known that，“众所周知”。
play a---->an indispensable role :)
emjoy---->enjoy :)

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[B]However, as for the preserving and generating a nation's cultural traditions, I have to say that those major cities are not so important as the author thinks. Although those major cities having long history used to generate some resplendent cultures, with the development of the globalization of the whole world, they are inevitably involved into such progress that may lead to the unfortunate losing of their precious historical relicsrelics不好. Beijing is a case in point. In order to accelerate the pace of modernization and globalization, many traditional domiciles and old-line buildings of the old Beijing are pulled down for leaving more space of modern exploiture. In addition, facing with the intense impact of foreign culture, more and more Chinese youth turn their interests to the exotic cultures such as English songs and Japanese and Korea films, while look the traditions as some things so-called "past-time". If such condition keeps a long time, people can imagine the ultimate lost of tradition. A famous Chinese writer, Long Yingtai used to mention this problem in some of her articles for provoking the awareness of people and government to this dangerous inclination. So the major cities although have many merits in propelling nation’s thriving, they have also some defects cannot be ignored in preserving traditional cultures我还是觉得这段欠缺，特别是最后一句总结，“保护地位虽然低但还是要保护”可能我有点晕了吧 哈哈. [/B]

historical relics---->legacy of history, 如何？
最后一句话的大意：尽管大城市在促进国家繁荣方面有益，但在保存传统方面却有缺陷。我想以此转到下文对小城市的论述。

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[B]On the contrary对不住了，是在想不出，总觉得逻辑不对 还在晕中～～, some smaller cities and rural areas may offset the defection of those major cities in their generation and preservation of cultural traditions. On the不要theone hand, because of comparatively less communication with outsides, these places may pertain their own characters more easily. For instance, some rural areas still have their ancient ceremonies in celebrating some traditional festivals. I ever traveled in a little town in the south of China, people there still kept some habits of marriage coming down form their precedents and have some archaic monument for remembering some heroes of their clan. On the other hand, some cultural traditions are born from these places at all. As far as I know, many traditional cultures of China are originated from the basin of the Yellow River, along which many of the cities are not the major cities. Nevertheless, the actual condition is that, because of scarcity of necessary financial support, some of the relics there are facing with the destiny of distinction. Therefore nation should also think of these cities for their considerable contribution in the preserving and generating of traditional culture.[/B]

on the contrary是接上段而来的一个转折，不过自己也觉得这样不太好。
on the one hand...on the other hand...是固定用法，尽管只用了后面一半，那个the还是不能省略的。

slsUID: 175311

historical relics---->legacy of history, 如何？ 好
on the one hand...on the other hand...是固定用法，尽管只用了后面一半，那个the还是不能省略的。 哦～～～
其实我就是觉得题目的因果关系被你忽略了。题目说 因为主要的文化遗产在大城市 所以才支持大城市。
280篇那个范文把这题目分层：1）因文化遗产（简称文）重要，所以政府支持；2）因文主要在大城市中，所以支持大城市。 他攻击第二层是先说的原因不对的。[第一层不用说了]

我觉得你的观点就是它的第二层＋支持的真正原因（商业政治） ， 论证思路应是 1）否定题目的原因－－－主要的文化遗产在大城市(或不是主要由于文化遗产) 2）指出大城市应被支持的真正因素－－－商业，政治。 这样你也是按因果顺序来的说 ，思路更清晰。

这就是我的想法，你只当建议就可以了。
还有很佩服你踏实的学习方法，很细心。

fishergirlUID: 152325

听你这样一说，明白多了。谢谢！

那我的提纲可以这样改动一下：

1，大城市在保存文化遗产方面的不足之处。
2，他真正的吸引力在于政治，经济等方面。
3，相对而言，小城市和农村在保存文化方面的优势。

总结，所以尽管大城市无法向题目说得很好的保存文化传统，但还是应该得到政府的支持。而小城市和农村同样也需要给与一定的关注。

lakeqianUID: 157560

这个提纲好点了，原来的提纲先写结果再写原因了。

fishergirlUID: 152325

嘿嘿，那就这样定了。希望考试的时候抽到这道题:)