issue208 改过两次，觉得还是不好

milesUID: 173130

208. "The way people look, dress, and act reveals their attitudes and interests. You can tell much about a society's ideas and values by observing the appearance and behavior of its people."


还有一个月考作文，急啊

提纲：同意家让步
1，appearance  对于少数民族地区
2，appearance 对于developed district
3，action 可以看出民族风格
4，but 一些人们内心的观点是不能被外貌观察出来的


I basically agree with the speaker's assertion that the way people look, dress and act, reveals their attitudes and interests, and also reflects a society's values and interests. However, some underlying emotions and attitudes can’t be simply observed by their appearances and behaviors.

To begin with, the clothes and decorations can present people's interests and living habits. This notion can be simply supported by the case in most native tribes, which have not been challenged much by modern ideas. In such tribes, the customs and traditions can be easily observed through their distinct and unique clothes. The local residents wear their traditional clothes and decorations, which are representative of their ages, careers, marriages and social classes. And in some certain tribes, whether one has committed crime can be observed by special signs. Through the design, pattern and color on the clothes, we can also know much about their respect and worship from certain things, such as the sun, the sea, fire, and some kind of animals, that means a lot to them. In other words, by observing the distinct traditional clothes and decorations, one can learn much about their interests, customs, values, and even religion.

Even in developed districts, where people usually wear common clothes without obvious identity rather than traditional clothes, the residents' living habits and interests can be presented through details. Since people in the democratic society have the right and freedom to choose their favorite clothes, people can wear their suitable clothes to show their own personality. Even a person who doesn't care about what he wears, we can observe his attitude towards life and interests. For example, a man with untidy but comfortable clothes shows that it is a person who pays less attention to the appearance, but more care about the comfort of living. And also, a teenager with strange clothes and hairstyle indicates that he wants to be fashionable, and different from others. That is to say, the style, color, type, tidiness and other details can tell much about the personality and character.

Not only appearances but also behaviors can show peoples' customs and values. In different districts and countries, the entire population usually has some similar behavior, and the way people walk, talk, communicate with each other is to some extent the same, showing their different living habits and what they pursue in life. For example, Arabs talk in a close distance with each other, while Americans stand comparatively further from the person they talk. The different distance shows their different attitudes towards the relationship between people. That is, Americans values on private space, while Arabs like sharing with others.

Nevertheless, although we can tell much about the values and ideas of an individual or a society, some hidden and interior ideas and living concepts can't be simply observed by appearances and behaviors. Some underlying nature personality can only be presented under special circumstance. For example, the nature such as selfishness, greediness, braveness can be obviously presented in urgent time and when something happens. Moreover, people' traditional concepts and attitudes towards pressing social issues, such as divorce, abortion, youth mother, can’t be simply presented by observation.

Overall, appearances and behaviors can generally tell much about the attitudes and values of an individual and a society. However, the hidden interior ideas and nature can’t be simply observed.

dezhiUID: 156141

请把作文题目贴出来

milesUID: 173130

题目加上去了

fhxyweiUID: 157384

感觉全是一些纯理论，没有很强的examples来support

上帝保佑UID: 168333

楼主的想法比较有创意阿

如果写不好，何不从比较普通的地方入手，比如个人的apperance反映出他的审美观，action/words反映政治立场，职业特征

milesUID: 173130

是不是写的太空洞了，应该从小的方面入手,讲一些细节

dezhiUID: 156141

208. "The way people look, dress, and act reveals their attitudes and interests. You can tell much about a society's ideas and values by observing the appearance and behavior of its people."


还有一个月考作文，急啊

提纲：同意家让步
1，appearance 对于少数民族地区
2，appearance 对于developed district
3，action 可以看出民族风格
4，but 一些人们内心的观点是不能被外貌观察出来的


I basically agree with the speaker's assertion that the way people look, dress and act, reveals their attitudes and interests, and also reflects a society's values and interests. However, some underlying emotions and attitudes can’t be simply observed by their appearances and behaviors.本来你想表达同意(加一个小让步),可你这里用了一个However,感觉转折之后的内容成主要论述内容了!开头一定要反映全篇论点才行

To begin with, the clothes and decorations can present people's interests and living habits. This notion can be simply supported by the case in most native tribes, which have not been challenged much by modern ideas. In such tribes, the customs and traditions can be easily observed through their distinct and unique clothes. The local residents wear their traditional clothes and decorations, which are representative of their ages, careers, marriages and social classes. And in some certain tribes, whether one has committed crime can be observed by special signs. Through the design, pattern and color on the clothes, we can also know much about their respect and worship from certain things, such as the sun, the sea, fire, and some kind of animals, that means a lot to them我觉得这里叙述的不是很清楚. In other words, by observing the distinct traditional clothes and decorations, one can learn much about their interests, customs, values, and even religion.如果这一段能举出具体的例子就更好了哈

Even in developed districts, where people usually wear common clothes without obvious identity rather than traditional clothes, the residents' living habits and interests can be presented through details. Since people in the democratic society have the right and freedom to choose their favorite clothes, people can wear their suitable clothes to show their own personality. Even a person who doesn't care about what he wears, we can observe his attitude towards life and interests. For example, a man with untidy but comfortable clothes shows that it is a person who pays less attention to the appearance, but more care about the comfort of living. And also, a teenager with strange clothes and hairstyle indicates that he wants to be fashionable, and different from others. That is to say, the style, color, type, tidiness and other details can tell much about the personality and character.

Not only appearances but also behaviors can show peoples' customs and values. In different districts and countries, the entire population usually has some similar behavior, and the way people walk, talk, communicate with each other is to some extent the same, showing their different living habits and what they pursue in life. For example, Arabs talk in a close distance with each other, while Americans stand comparatively further from the person they talk->each other如何. The different distance shows their different attitudes towards the relationship between people. That is, Americans values on private space, while Arabs like sharing with others.这么说有些绝对吧,其实这在一定程度上是文化的差异造成的,难道美国人就不愿意share with others吗?不过,这一段论证的不错

dezhiUID: 156141

总体来说写得不错
如果能找到一些更具体的例子来证明观点就更好了
加油!

dezhiUID: 156141

也希望你多给其他人改改作文,大家共同进步:)

milesUID: 173130

多谢dizhi，我会努力的，有时间一定去改作文

lakeqianUID: 157560

这道题实际上考察了个人和社会两个层面。如果能针对性强些大概能回应的更好些。。。

milesUID: 173130

请问楼上怎样才算针对性强呢，只针对某一方面，是吗