Bertrand Russell的文章，结构一流。

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(Bertrand Russell)
  Three passions, simple but overwhelmingly strong, have governed my life: the longing for love, the search for knowledge, the unbearable pity for the suffering of mankind. These passions, like great winds, have blown me hither and thither, in a wayward course, over a deep ocean of anguish, reaching to the very verge of despair.
  I have sought love, first, because it brings ecstasy-ecstasy so great that I would often have sacrificed all the rest of life for a few hours of this joy. I have sought it, next, because it relieves loneliness-that terrible loneliness in which one shivering consciousness looks over the rim of the world into the cold unfathomable lifeless abyss. I have sought it, finally, because in the union of love I have seen, in a mystic miniature, the prefiguring vision of the heaven that saints and poets have imagined. This is what I sought, and though it might seem too good for human life, this is what --at last--I have found.
  Wtih equal passion I have sought knowledge. I have wished to understand the hearts of men. I have wished to know why the stars shine. And I have tired to apprehend the Pythagorean power by which number holds sway above the flux. A little of this, but not much I have achieved.
  Love and knowledge, so far as they were possible, let upward toward the heavens. But always pity brought me back to earth. Echoes of the cries of pain reverberate in my heart. Children in famine, victims fortured by oppressors, helpless old people a hated burden to their sons, and the whole world of loneliness, poverty, and pain make a mockery of what human life should be. I long to alleviate the evil, but I cannot, and I too suffer.
  This has been my life. I have found oit worth living, and would gradly live it again if the chance were offered to me.
   我的文章按诸位改了后，怎么没下文了呢？我的文笔不会烂到如此地步吧？麻烦大家再看看，没好功也有苦功啊！以后我必会回报的。
以下是我137的修改篇，参照了大家的建设性意见。首先是我的一个结构说明。
  There is no such thing as purely objective observation. All observation is subjective ; it is always guided by the observer's expectations or desires."
  
  1）节：重述作者观点，基本肯定了作者的观点，但认为客观性也是不能忽视的。持中庸观点。
  2）节：论述主观重要性。先一段小排比，从日常的生活说明，再从学术上说明。接着，用了小反证。结尾总结。
  3）节：从现象到原因，指出作者考虑到由于人们的expectations or desires有主观性，所以认为观察是主观的。但是作者忽视了物体本身主客观性的问题。有时，物体本身显出主观性，因此观察在此时主观了。用了apple的例子说明。但为我对作者观点补充埋下伏笔。
  4）5）节：当决定观察的两个条件：物体和expectations or desires倾向于客观时，那观察更有客观性。前者再用apple的例子说明，后者我指出人们的expectations or desires具体上有差异，但都是reflections of same ambition.就是说，差异有，但本质上并不大。5）节是对4）节的总结。
  6）节，大总结。强调both the subjectivity and objectivity, for an observer, are significant。哪个因素发恢挥作用越大，那个观察就越有那个因素的特性。Hence for no observer has the nature of an obervation been purely subjective or objective.
  总之，语言我改得教为易懂通顺。不知烫烫猪能否满意？但是结构，我没有改，我仍认为我没跑题。1983的好意，能理解，但是issue能比较活点吧。
      
  According to the speaker, none of observation is purely objective and all is subjective.The subjectivity stems from an observer's expectations or desires. Basically, his point of view is comprehensive, noticing that both the objectivity and subjectivity have correlation with an observation and analyzing what is the factor leading to it. Unfortunately, it seems he adheres too much emphasis to subjectivity and pays little attention to the opposite. As a matter of fact, objectivity, believe or not, plays an equally necessary and indispensable role in observing.
  It is no wonder that purely objective observation does not exist in the world. On account of individual expectations or desires, all observations are subjective. Our routine experiences inform us this many times: When people stay at home, they may debate on a phenomenon observed ealier with their families; when people are on the way to work, they may assemble together to comment what an observer just said; when people are absorbed in their devoted work, they show no gratification to other observer's standpoint ...... The subjectivity has not only been proved in daily life, but also been proved by academic fields. In retrospect, people would find that,  history has witnessed dramatic changes in human society. Every year, there spring up countless creative accomplishments in nearly all the fields, which should be attributed to the dedication of subjectivity. It is the subjectivity that results in different observations, then these observations become elements of creative ideals and accomplishments. It is not too difficult to imagine a world shorn of subjectivity. All the observation would be homogeneous and diversity would be a thing of past. Then how unrelievedly boring observation would be!
  What are reasons accounting for it? The speaker is true, he told us an observer's expectations or desires are the origin. They are subjective, accordingly, an observation must be subjective. Nevertheless, it should not be neglected that, an observation, when finished, is the combination of one's standpoint, which is called expectations and desires by the speaker, and the object itself. Sometimes, an object shows the feature of subjectivity owing to its complexity and uncertainty. Specifically speaking, supposing one is painting an apple, when he puts it in a dark room, he would construct an atmosphere of silence and stillness. But when he puts it in the sunlight, the atmosphere is warm and animated. That exactly demonstrates how an object is subjective. Under the circumstances, an observation is of course subjective because the two aspects are not objective.
   Somtimes, however, an object is prone to be objective and there is not staggering disparity among observers' expectations or desires. Take that apple as example again, albeit the created atmohphere is not the same, the apple is still the apple. It will not be a pear just because the place is changed. Thus, subjectivity is not absolute. With finds disparate, scientist can still communicate with each other, improve their theory relied on criticisms from the rivals. All these should be ascribed to objectivity, which is derived from constant nature of objects. As for people's standpoints, though they vary according to their differant background, interest, predilection, they are comparatively congruous. Maybe specific expections are not similar, but they must be the reflections of same ambition. Consequently, once the two aspects are prone to be objective, an observation is objective.
  All in all, both the subjectivity and objectivity, for an observer, are significant. Which factor is more obvious, which observation shows more its feature. But that is merely inclination. Hence for no observer has the nature of an obervation been purely subjective or objective.

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According to the speaker, none of observation is purely objective and all is subjective.The subjectivity stems from an observer's expectations or desires. Basically, his point of view is comprehensive, noticing that both the objectivity and subjectivity have correlation with an observation and analyzing what is the factor leading to it. 此句似乎表述不Unfortunately, it seems he adheres too much emphasis to subjectivity and pays little attention to the opposite. As a matter of fact, objectivity, believe or not, 短语好像是（believe it or not )plays an equally necessary and indispensable role in observing.
It is no wonder that purely objective observation does not exist in the world. On account of individual expectations or desires, all observations are subjective. Our routine experiences inform us this many times: When people stay at home, they may debate on a phenomenon observed ealier with their families; when people are on the way to work, they may assemble together to comment what an observer just said; when people are absorbed in their devoted work, they show no gratification to other observer's standpoint ...... The subjectivity has not only been proved in daily life, but also been proved by academic fields. In retrospect, people would find that, history has witnessed dramatic changes in human society. Every year, there spring up countless creative accomplishments in nearly all the fields, which should be attributed to the dedication of subjectivity. It is the subjectivity that results in different observations, then these observations become elements of creative ideals and accomplishments. It is not too difficult to imagine a world shorn of subjectivity. All the observation would be homogeneous and diversity would be a thing of past. Then how unrelievedly boring observation would be!这里似乎是说主观性的作用但开首表明本段是论述其原因即（On account of individual expectations or desires, all observations are subjective）所以好像有点远了What are reasons accounting for it? The speaker is true, he told us an observer's expectations or desires are the origin. They are subjective, accordingly, an observation must be subjective. Nevertheless, it should not be neglected that, an observation, when finished, is the combination of one's standpoint, which is called expectations and desires by the speaker, and the object itself. 似乎有点绕 Sometimes, an object shows the feature of subjectivity owing to its complexity and uncertainty. Specifically speaking, supposing one is painting an apple, when he puts it in a dark room, he would construct an atmosphere of silence and stillness. But when he puts it in the sunlight, the atmosphere is warm and animated. That exactly demonstrates how an object is subjective.我想这不是因为物体本身的主观性 还是因为人们观察的角度不同 Under the circumstances, an observation is of course subjective because the two aspects are not objective.
Somtimes, however, an object is prone to be objective and there is not staggering disparity among observers' expectations or desires. Take that apple as example again, albeit the created atmohphere is not the same, the apple is still the apple. It will not be a pear just because the place is changed. Thus, subjectivity is not absolute. With finds disparate, scientist can still communicate with each other, improve their theory relied on criticisms from the rivals. All these should be ascribed to objectivity, which is derived from constant nature of objects. As for people's standpoints, though they vary according to their differant background, interest, predilection, they are comparatively congruous. Maybe specific expections are not similar, but they must be the reflections of same ambition. Consequently, once the two aspects are prone to be objective, an observation is objective.
All in all, both the subjectivity and objectivity, for an observer, are significant. Which factor is more obvious, which observation shows more its feature. 这个句子似乎结构不对，哪一个是主句？But that is merely inclination. Hence for no observer has the nature of an obervation been purely subjective or objective.

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