Issue10 第九篇，文化类！

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Issue10. "Governments must ensure that their major cities receive the financial support they need in order to thrive, because it is primarily in cities that a nation's cultural traditions are preserved and generated."  
政府必须要确保主要城市发展所需的财政支持，因为一个国家的文化传统主要是在城市中得以保存和发展。
城市和国家的关系之文化传统
关键词 major cities，nation's cultural traditions
提纲 should 1+1

正文
I basically agree with the speaker that major cities must be given the financial support ensured by their governments. For my part, however, the true reason for cities receiving the financial support is not the one provided above but the increasingly significant economic roles the major cities are playing. Further, in such an accelerating globalization background, are there more and more international cultures are generated and preserved in cities rather than a nation's cultural traditions.

Above all, it is unavoidable that a nation's cultural traditions could hardly be preserved and generated in cities in this age of the increasing development of globalization. Apparently, major cities are becoming more and more international with the huge impact of various cultures from all over the world, which greatly diminish the indigenous cultures' attractions, and meantime, impulse the rapid generation of new cultures. For example, in Tokyo, the capital of Japan, has become an international metropolis with so few traditional characteristics in twenty years that I could not figure out whether I stood in New York when I went back last year, because they were too similar! In contrast, I saw more high buildings of western classic style than Japanese civilian housing, more other contries' restaurants than sukiyaki rooms, office workers' faster walking than before and groups of teenagers talking about NBA instead of baseball. The silent interaction between international culture and national culture are gradually changing the preferences and rhythms of people in cities. In this case, the cultural traditions even lasting for thousands of years are facing the disorganization while the fresh cultures emerge and are generate to meet the temporary life. As a result, the culture in major cities becomes ambiguous in this sense. Cities could no longer preserve and generate national traditions.

On the other hand, it is really crucial for government to provide their major cities prior financial support to meet their need in that cities are playing more and more significant roles in the development of national economy. For one thing, major cities need financial supply to build up a economic center of nearby areas in order to impulse the overall improvement of small towns and countries around it. Consider, adjacent areas of Shenzhen were very depressed before. Ten years ago, the government decided to finance Shenzhen with a project named "city revival". The large amount of financial support from government was used in many fields that were short of funds to develop. Less the a year later, the increasingly improvement of the city brought about more and more chances of employment and commerce, which allured lots of business and young people to the city from the near areas. As a result, the economic potentialities between the major city and small towns were largely motivated. Now the whole region near Shenzhen has formed a strong union of economy. For another thing, major cities act as a bridge between a nation and the world. In the west, Shanghai, famous for its international charm, may be the most well-known city of China. Many international activities, such as APEC or F-1match, were held every year and cost millions of dollars. To acquire more long-term benefits, it is important for government to support the large bills.

In conclusion, major cities have to be provided enough financial support by their governments. But the true reason is that they are playing increasingly significant roles in national economy instead of that a nation's cultural traditions are preserved and generated in them.

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I basically agree with the speaker that major cities must be given the financial support ensured by their governments. For my part, however, the true reason for cities receiving the financial support is not the one provided above but the increasingly significant economic roles the major cities are playing. Further, in such an accelerating globalization background, are there more and more international cultures are generated and preserved in cities rather than a nation's cultural traditions.是疑问句么？怎么没写问号?还是倒装?那就更不懂了

Above all, it is unavoidable that a nation's cultural traditions could hardly be preserved and generated in cities in this age of the increasing development of globalization. Apparently, major cities are becoming more and more international with the huge impact of various cultures from all over the world, which greatly diminish the indigenous cultures' attractions, and meantime, impulse the rapid generation of new cultures. For example, in Tokyo介词短语做主语?, the capital of Japan, has become an international metropolis with so few traditional characteristics in twenty years that I could not figure out whether I stood in New York when I went back last year, because they were现在不象了?为啥用过去时 too similar! In contrast不是相反吧，跟前面说的一个意思啊, I saw more high buildings of western classic style than Japanese civilian housing, more other contries' restaurants than sukiyaki rooms, office workers' faster walking than before and groups of teenagers talking about NBA instead of baseball. The silent interaction between international culture and national culture are gradually changing the preferences and rhythms of people in cities. In this case, the cultural traditions even lasting for thousands of years are facing the disorganization while the fresh cultures emerge and are generate to meet the temporary life. As a result, the culture in major cities becomes ambiguous in this sense. Cities could no longer preserve and generate national traditions.例子写的好漂亮啊

On the other hand, it is really crucial for government to provide their major cities prior financial support to meet their need in that cities are playing more and more significant roles in the development of national economy. For one thing, major cities need financial supply to build up a economic center of nearby areas in order to impulse the overall improvement of small towns and countries around it. Consider, adjacent areas of Shenzhen were very depressed before. Ten years ago, the government decided to finance Shenzhen with a project named "city revival". The large amount of financial support from government was used in many fields that were short of funds to develop. Less 【the】 a year later, the increasingly improvement of the city brought about more and more chances of employment and commerce, which allured lots of business and young people to the city from the near areas. As a result, the economic potentialities between the major city and small towns were largely motivated. Now the whole region near Shenzhen has formed a strong union of economy. For another thing, major cities act as a bridge between a nation and the world. In the west, Shanghai, famous for its international charm, may be the most well-known city of China. Many international activities, such as APEC or F-1match, were held every year and cost millions of dollars. To acquire more long-term benefits, it is important for government to support the large bills.

In conclusion, major cities have to be provided enough financial support by their governments. But the true reason is that they are playing increasingly significant roles in national economy instead of that a nation's cultural traditions are preserved and generated in them.

写得好啊~呜呜~比偶那篇好多了~汗颜~你的例子举的真详细，厉害~表示崇高的敬意的同时决心努力向你学习！！

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;) 谢谢花儿的鼓励，只是俺实在不敢当，实话，我用时太长，现在还很难2小时写完一篇，惭愧啊。。。。。。只剩一个月了。。汗，，涌。。。
对了，关于例子，我还是建议，多研究范文，夹叙夹议（咱们小时候连作文总说的那种），呵呵，真的，千万别干巴巴分析，然后干巴巴举例，大忌！！！！虽然我水平很菜，但这点我肯定！ ;)

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楼主整个论证体系清晰，论据很有力度。如果例子中少用些中国的效果会更好。