issue43 领导与道德 还有4天 绝望中寻找希望~

happymichelleUID: 154082

限时失败，45min没写结尾，贴到word上面惨不忍睹~
God~怎么原来没觉得45min写issue这么费尽~
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43"To be an effective leader, a public official must maintain the highest ethical and moral standards."

The speaker's assertion that a public official must have the highest ethical and moral spirit to be real effective is wrongheaded.  Misunderstanding the responsibility of public officials, the speaker fails to recognize that the merit of being an effective leader which should not only include high standard of morals and ethics but also compose of many other criterions.  The speaker seems to overrate the importance of moral and ethical standard, and unfairly allege that an effective leader "must" maintain the highest moral and ethical standards.

The first reason I disagree with the speaker is that, in the field of business, the value of an effective leader lies in his/her ability to make company competitive and gain profits not only for leaders themselves but also for all its faculty members and for the welfare of the whole society.   A case in point is Yang Yuanqing, the CEO of the "Lenovo" cooperation, who help the company win thousands million dollars and makes "Lenovo" take up nearly half of the PC market.  Recently, the combination of “IBM” and “Lenovo” aptly illustrate his competence, intelligence to be an effective business leader again.  However, the fact that it is unnecessary for an effective leader to maintain the highest ethical and moral standards, does not mean business leaders cannot concern about their moral code.  During the disaster of tsunami, many world famous company donated money to Red Cross in order to help those people who suffered in this catastrophe.  Therefore, for an effective, a basic standard of moral and ethics are needed but not necessarily the highest is demanded.

Similarly, what we call an effective political leader do not necessarily include highest ethical and moral standards.  What we expect from an effective leader is that he/she should know the deepest yearning of people, lead people to where they want to go and help people achieve their desires.  For example, American people wanted to climb out of the Great Depression and needed someone to ensure that they could do it, Roosevelt did, and thus win himself a second election for next Presidents and became the first President who got reappointment three times in American history; the British people still believed they could win the war after the defeat of 1940, Churchill told them they were right and thus be considered as the hero of World War Second and be named as one of the best Presidents in Britain.  Accordingly, it is not because their highest ethical or moral standards but their ability to achieve people's desire that make them becomes effective leaders.

Admittedly, there are still some areas that demand the leader maintain the highest standards of ethics and morals.  An extreme example is in the social-spiritual field, it is crucial and almost indispensable for leaders to have highest moral standards.  Without Gandhi's highest spirit of social responsibility, and without Martin Luther King's moral and ethical charisma, probably no one will believe in what they said.  As a matter of fact, spiritual leaders in the social or religious fields, who are supported by the general people, can only be effective through maintaining the highest ethical and moral standards than any others to win the credit and belief of their supporters.

In conclusion, while I concede the speaker’s assertion has some merit by underscoring the importance of moral and ethical standards in some cases, however, it is unfair and arbitrary for the speaker to claim that this standard of morality and ethics is the only criterion in determining a leader’s efficiency.  Only by having a deep understanding of different fields, could we realize what are essential for an effective leader.

gdhdannyUID: 125843

我给打5分，主要是考虑到内容上确实很有深度。

如果想要六分，应该在ability to achieve people's desire和the highest standards of ethics and morals这两个成功者的必要条件之间进行深入分析，到底他们的区别在什么地方。

从段落的完整性上讲，第一个body，就是经济领域那一段，我看可以当作模版，有正有反，有理有据。现在的问题就是如何让段落之间的组织可以更有说服力。

加油

莫名NUID: 146481

我就不打分了，没这个胆:P

danny说的很不错，偶觉得段落层次还是比较清晰的
不过有几个问题我没搞明白的
第一段偶觉得如果你是拿联想的例子作为反例，其他公司的例子做为正例的话，他们之间的衔接还不够，仅仅是一个however；即使就是一个however,最好能在举完例子以后有一个分析。因为一开始，我看得不是很明白

the British people still believed they could win the war after the defeat of 1940, Churchill told them they were right and thus be considere...
这句话我觉得有点问题，就是前一句和后一句之间没有任何的连词，那他们之间的关系是什么？我记得以前有人说过：两句独立的句子之间必定有连词，否则就是句号

后面的几段都写的不错

还有一个问题要注意的就是，避免把ISSUE写成和ARGU一样的风格哦，我觉得前两段的风格有点接近了

加油呢~~~
宽心，放心，你一定没有问题的:)

山坡羊UID: 169978

不过我有点不明白（本人还没正式写作文，可能所说不对）
原题说leader应该有高道德，没说不需要其它素质呢？这样反驳逻辑上是否有问题？

happymichelleUID: 154082

谢谢danny和莫名！
我把body1和2重写了一遍（针对danny说得political leader与moral standards的关系上，和莫名提出的lenovo和后面转折关系的问题）

In the field of business, the value of an effective leader lies in his/her ability to make a company gain profits not only for leaders themselves, but also for all employees and for the welfare of the whole society.  On one hand, it is crucial for an business leader to have sufficient competence, intelligence and self-conviciton that can beat its rivals and win the competition in the business world.  A case in point of these effective leaders is Yang Yuanqing, the CEO of the "Lenovo" cooperation, who help the company win thousands million dollars, makes "Lenovo" take up nearly half of the PC market and recently manages to accomplish the merger between “IBM” and “Lenovo”.  On the other hand, in many ways behaving ethically and morally can benefit a business.  Ethical conduct to the welfare of the society will gain a company a good reputation that earns repeat business, thus so many world famous companies donated money to Red Cross in order to help those people who suffered in this disaster of tsunami.  Besides, a leader that treats his/her employees farily and with respect will gain their loyalty, which, in turn, usually translates into higher productivity. Therefore, for an effective business leader, both the ability to compete and the high ethical standards are needed to maximize profits in the long run, but it does not necessarily mean that the highest standards is required.

Similarly, what we call an effective political leader do not necessarily include highest ethical and moral standards.  What we expect from an effective leader is that he/she should know the deepest yearning of people, lead people to where they want to go, and help people achieve their desires.  For example, American people wanted to climb out of the Great Depression and needed someone to ensure that they could do it, Roosevelt did, and thus win himself a second election for next Presidents and became the first President who got reappointment three times in American history. In some cases, taking the highest ethical course of action may even reduce a leader or a government’s effectiveness.  Since different countries might have their different interests, which can sometimes conflict with others, a pontent government should, first and foremost, consider the welfare and safety of its own.  If a leader pursue the “highest” moral moral, and stand from the whole world’s point of view, his/her country might be on the verge of extinction. Accordingly, it is not because their highest ethical or moral standards but their ability to achieve people's desire that make them becomes effective political leaders.

happymichelleUID: 154082

最初由 山坡羊 发布
[B]不过我有点不明白（本人还没正式写作文，可能所说不对）
原题说leader应该有高道德，没说不需要其它素质呢？这样反驳逻辑上是否有问题？ [/B]

题目是43"To be an effective leader, a public official must maintain the highest ethical and moral standards."

你提的问题很好，关键在是不是"must"这个问题上
我的body2的确写的有点偏题了，应该说对于political leader，moral standards不是必需的，甚至有的时候还有害

cu_may2003UID: 193268

ah, if these essays are to be graded at ETS in the united states, then you better conform with their belief that political leaders need to have high moral standards.  that would win you points.   
The graders are people, thus they can be subjective. And if you write political leaders should not have high moral standards, the graders will think you're unethical, thus unsuitable for the elite universities.

eustaciaUID: 175283

我自叹不如啊，你的内容很丰富，举了很多例子，并且语言也很流畅

magicyangUID: 189132

最初由 山坡羊 发布
[B]不过我有点不明白（本人还没正式写作文，可能所说不对）
原题说leader应该有高道德，没说不需要其它素质呢？这样反驳逻辑上是否有问题？ [/B]

我也有同感。如果反驳的话，就是说政治人物可以不具备高道德，
这样说的通吗？
但我还是很佩服你的作文，我的英语很虚弱，我写不出，也许我说的不对，我只是想搞清楚这样的作文到底应该怎么写。

ryanqUID: 154025

yun,楼住几天前都考完了，看一看，学习学习就行了，还揪出来这发感慨....