issue144 艺术类lasting value

haiyaUID: 187989

144 "It is the artist, not the critic, who gives society something of lasting value."

Do artists or critics give society something of lasting value? Although critics are helpful, more often than not, to interpret and evaluate the art, I fundamentally agree with the assertion that the lasting value for society exists in art itself other than in the critique.

Admittedly, I concede that critics help laymen understand the art work well since they are familiar with its background, author and meaning to the author's contemporaries. I also concede that the constructive critique, which is critics’ feedback to certain art works, gives artists more idea to improve works and may even inspire artists to create new genre and style.

However, any persons who have studied arts when and where will agree that the true art is a product of artists’ authentic passion, a manifestation of the artist's unique creative impulses and a creativity of the artists' spirit. Thus, referring to the lasting value, the artists, who create art, play a profound role to give society more thoughts and ideas. Appreciating an art work is like having a talk with artists so that we are conveyed more information from arts. If we prefer to gain critics' talk content with artists other than to participating positively in the communication, the lasting value of the art for society may be ignored or filtrated by critic's narrow and subjective evaluation conforming to the established and out-dated standard. Examples from painting, music and literature support the point.

In the realm of painting, when Monet's "Impression, Sunrise" first displaced in one Salon in Paris, it didn't win any praise but all critique from the critics. They excluded this type of painting since there was no genre had put so much emphasis on the usage of sunlight before impressionism. However, it was Impressionism that has epochal meaning to Western Arts. Monet introduced sunlight outside as an element to describe the nature. What’s more, by his painting, Monet, as an artist, gave the society new concept of beauty and gave birth to many genre afterwards. On the contrary, critics attempted to judge Impressionism according to the former principle and might be surprised ultimately that what they regarded as nonsense became the new leaf in history of art.

In the realm of music, the esteemed critics, who were accustomed to the predictable harmonious and melodious length of Haydn, dismissed Beethoven's music as literally causing their ear to hurt. In fact, Beethoven, as an artist, converted the sorrow and frustration in our life into enthusiasm and infuriation to overcome the obstacle by the symphony. From his music world, the society obtains courage and strength continuously. Therefore, if we follow such critique, we may miss the greatest music and a collision with the heart of a greatest musician.

In the realm of literature, there also existed a significant writer whose works were criticized as barbaric. He was Shakespeare. Voltaire, who was immersed in the spirit to discover a way of reconciling new ideas with old classic faith, condemned Shakespeare's literature because he didn’t conform to the neo-classical principle of unity. Nonetheless, his critique didn't interrupt society to gain the lasting value from Shakespeare’s works. Shakespeare endowed his work the roman and optimism accord with the movie "Shakespeare in Love" as well as the realism and profundity like the prince's word "To be or Not To Be". His thoughts influenced the era of Renaissance and gave persons more lasting value.

In sum up, the essence of art, which are conveyed to the society as lasting value is thoughts of artists not the critique of critics. Without critics, art is still art. Whereas without artists, art is nothing.


艺术类的，提纲总是写得n多。。因为例子实在记不住。本来想虽然提纲写了好久，但还是还限时写的。结果限时的时候老出状况，还有2分钟时结尾刚刚写好。
然后自己又改了好久。比上篇艺术类满意点。

ally00lingUID: 178366

我来看看，不过艺术的没写过 :D

imongUID: 140258

Do artists or critics（觉得怪异） give society something of lasting value? Although critics are helpful, more often than not, （奇怪的插入语）to interpret and evaluate the art, I fundamentally agree with the assertion that the lasting value for society exists in art itself other than in the critique.（好像后面也有个地方 other than和rather than用混了？Critique这个词 似乎也还再考究）

文章有些地方没必要写的太客气 那两个Admittedly/Concede显得多余 全删掉几乎都没问题 既然自己认为自己是正确的 为什么非要装模做样的例行公事让步呢？不是为了让步而让步的。

the lasting value of the art for society may be ignored or filtrated by critic's narrow and subjective evaluation
filtrate这个词 似乎应该是filter out（也不知道相应的是褒义还是贬义）？大胆下笔之后 也要求证才是。
后面举例子的时候 注意再扣上前面的观点句来展开和叙述。

看起来例子很丰富。评个精 大家讨论讨论。

nightsky2004UID: 155946

我也来看看，我就是写不好艺术类。

flyingwindUID: 189320

true art is a product of artists’ authentic passion, a manifestation of the artist's unique creative impulses and a creativity of the artists' spirit
这个句子------------------------------------------厉害！！！

haiyaUID: 187989

汗，这句句子是参考280的，觉得不错才用上的。。。好不容易被表扬了一把，竟然。。。-_-!!

haiyaUID: 187989

to imong, 谢谢：）

关于那两个concede，我这篇的结构是因为以前看到前人其他主题的文章时，觉得很有力，很想试着用一把，觉得这个题目可以下刀：）

就很想尝试一下。

flyingwindUID: 189320

呵呵，我就是看着这句很有气势
很cool啊

haiyaUID: 187989

To imong,
1.我觉得肯定一下critique的作用还是需要的
2.查了一下filter out （用cb查的），走漏消息的意思？直接用filter可以吗？

3我重新看了遍我的文章，虽然我在写的时候已经尽量配合主题。但重新看了一遍还是觉得不满意。

应该怎么改？能不能就一节做一下说明？

zffUID: 191904

shoud you  exchange the 'other than' in your part one with the 'rather than'?

coolblazeverestUID: 189260

今天模考了同主题，正在郁闷中呢！
学习一下！

haiyaUID: 187989

谢谢，多给我点意见吧。

可以互改一下：）

LSDUID: 157855

144 "It is the artist, not the critic, who gives society something of lasting value."

Do artists or critics give society something of lasting value?[这个问句在这里是什么作用呢？是不是那个or没用好啊？呵呵，个人意见] Although critics are helpful, more often than not, to interpret and evaluate the art, I fundamentally agree with the assertion that the lasting value for society exists in art itself other than in the critique.

Admittedly, [I concede that critics help laymen understand the art work well since they are familiar with its background, author and meaning to the author's contemporaries.] [I also concede that the constructive critique, which is critics’ feedback to certain art works, gives artists more idea to improve works and may even inspire artists to create new genre and style. ][这两个观点都很好]

However, [any persons who have studied arts when and where will agree that the true art is a product of artists’ authentic passion, a manifestation of the artist's unique creative impulses and a creativity of the artists' spirit.] Thus, [referring to the lasting value这里突出的很好，赞！], the artists, who create art, play a profound role to give society more thoughts and ideas. Appreciating an art work is like having a talk with artists so that we are conveyed more information from arts. If we prefer to gain critics' talk content with artists other than to participating positively in the communication, [the lasting value of the art for society may be ignored or filtrated by critic's narrow and subjective evaluation conforming to the established and out-dated standard.清晰的观点，很好] Examples from painting, music and literature support the point.

[In the realm of painting], when Monet's "Impression, Sunrise" first displaced in one Salon in Paris, it didn't win any praise but all critique from the critics. They excluded this type of painting since there was no genre had put so much emphasis on the usage of sunlight before impressionism. However, it was Impressionism that has epochal meaning to Western Arts. Monet introduced sunlight outside as an element to describe the nature. What’s more, by his painting, Monet, as an artist, gave the society new concept of beauty and gave birth to many genre afterwards. On the contrary, critics attempted to judge Impressionism according to the former principle and might be surprised ultimately that what they regarded as nonsense became the new leaf in history of art.[例子很好，评论的也很到位]

[In the realm of music], the esteemed critics, who were accustomed to the predictable harmonious and melodious length of Haydn, dismissed Beethoven's music as literally causing their ear to hurt. In fact, Beethoven, as an artist, converted the sorrow and frustration in our life into enthusiasm and infuriation to overcome the obstacle by the symphony. From his music world, the society obtains courage and strength continuously. Therefore, if we follow such critique, we may miss the greatest music and a collision with the heart of a greatest musician. [这段同样不错]

[In the realm of literature], there also existed a significant writer whose works were criticized as barbaric. He was Shakespeare. Voltaire, who was immersed in the spirit to discover a way of reconciling new ideas with old classic faith, condemned Shakespeare's literature because he didn’t conform to the neo-classical principle of unity. Nonetheless, his critique didn't interrupt society to gain the lasting value from Shakespeare’s works. Shakespeare endowed his work the roman and optimism accord with the movie "Shakespeare in Love" as well as the realism and profundity like the prince's word "To be or Not To Be". His thoughts influenced the era of Renaissance and gave persons more lasting value.[同样精彩的论述]

In sum up, the essence of art, which are conveyed to the society as lasting value is thoughts of artists not the critique of critics. Without critics, art is still art. Whereas without artists, art is nothing.
[很成功的一篇文章，使我受益匪浅。谢谢楼主分享！]

bannissmentUID: 194122

Do artists or critics give society something of lasting value? Although critics are helpful, more often than not, to interpret and evaluate the art, I [fundamentally删了吧] agree with the assertion that the lasting value for society exists in art itself other than in the [U]critique.[/U] 这个词呢主要指评论文和批评这个概念；criticism用于一条条的批评意见，比较具体。后面也可以用的。

Admittedly, I concede that critics help laymen understand 〔删the 〕〔[U]art work [/U]  指书刊上的图片。。〕well since they are familiar with its background, author and meaning to the author's contemporaries. I also concede that the constructive critique, which is critics’ feedback to certain art works〔最好不要一会单数，一会复数，统一〕, gives artists more idea to improve works and may even inspire artists to create new genre and style.〔两词意思一样了就删一个〕

However, any persons who have studied arts [U]when and where [/U]〔是whenever wherever的意思？〕  will agree that the true art is a product of artists’ authentic passion, a[U] manifestation of the artist's unique creative impulses and a creativity of the artists' spirit. [/U]  〔这句话是经不起推敲的，虽然花哨〕Thus, referring to the lasting value, [U]the artists[/U] ,〔个人认为不用加the，或者如题目中，用单数加the〕 who create art, play a profound role to give society more thoughts and [U]ideas[/U] 〔注意和前文的单数统一〕. Appreciating an art work is like having a talk with artists so that we are conveyed more information from arts. If we prefer to gain critics' talk content with artists other than to participating 〔to后面跟verb还是ing〕positively in the communication, the lasting value of the art for society may be ignored or filtrated by critic's narrow and subjective evaluation conforming to the established and out-dated standard. Examples from painting, music and literature support the point.

In the realm of painting, when Monet's "Impression, Sunrise" first displaced in one Salon in Paris, it didn't win any praise but all critique from the critics. They excluded this type of painting since there was no genre had put so much emphasis on the usage of sunlight before impressionism. However, it was Impressionism that has epochal meaning to Western Arts. Monet introduced sunlight outside as an element to describe the nature. What’s more, by his painting, Monet, as an artist, gave the society new concept of beauty and gave birth to many genre afterwards. On the contrary, critics attempted to judge Impressionism according to the former principle and might be surprised ultimately that what they regarded as nonsense became the new leaf in history of art.〔这段写的不错〕

In the realm of music, the esteemed critics, who were accustomed to the predictable harmonious and melodious length of Haydn, dismissed Beethoven's music as literally causing their ear to hurt. In fact, Beethoven, as an artist, converted the sorrow and frustration in our life into enthusiasm and infuriation to [U]overcome the obstacle [/U] 〔没有限定语，不知道指什么，也容易和后面短语连起来〕 by the symphony. From his music world, the society obtains courage and strength continuously. Therefore, if we follow such critique, we may miss the greatest music and a collision with the heart of a greatest musician.

In the realm of literature, there also existed a significant writer whose works were criticized as barbaric. He was Shakespeare. Voltaire, who was immersed in the spirit to discover a way of reconciling new ideas with old classic faith, condemned Shakespeare's literature because he didn’t conform to the neo-classical principle of unity. Nonetheless, his critique didn't interrupt society to gain the lasting value from Shakespeare’s works. Shakespeare endowed his work the roman and optimism [U]accord with[/U] 〔做什么成分？〕 the movie "Shakespeare in Love" as well as the realism and profundity like the prince's word "To be or Not To Be". His thoughts influenced the era of Renaissance and gave persons more lasting value.〔这一段的例子堆积的有些多了〕

In sum 〔删up〕查不到这种用法，哪里见到的？, the essence of art, which are conveyed to the society as lasting value is 〔the〕thoughts of artists not the critique of critics. Without critics, art is still art. Whereas without artists, art is nothing. 〔there's no art比较合逻辑吧？〕
写的很好，例子很丰富也有层次，但是分析比较少，逻辑推理稍不足，且用词注意细节，前后一致，群体名词和专有名词写的工整些就更好了。

haiyaUID: 187989

谢谢各位，恩。
等一下决定把它改一下再贴上来：）