issue71 觉得这个有点奇怪，怕自己写跑了

onlyfishUID: 192741

issue71. "Spending time alone makes one a better companion to others."

1 the basis of a good companion is the feature of consideration and tolerance.
2 techniques: a   a good listener
                 b   know how to balance the interest between
3 cooperation understanding ---- practice

i feel t he topic is so strange because i cannot think up a single word to support the issue and i think the statement of the speaker is absolutely wrong which does not comply with the principle of ETS.
还有我觉得这是一片事实型的issue，我好像写成倾向型的了,不知道这样写是不是算跑题了

I totally disagree with what the speaker said. If we hold the given statement as true, according to the statement, we can automatically deduce that the more time one spends along, the better companion one will be. Therefore, a person who lived alone even he/ she like living alone will be a good companion, or some savage people who live alone in the forest and never spend time with others will be a good companion.

In my opinion, the basis of a good companion is consideration which cannot be acquired naturally or from the genetic reason, and it only can be cultivated when someone spends time with others. Since people's thought and behavior is affected by the environment and surroundings to a large extent, the character and personality depend on the situation we live in as well. If a person will spend most time alone, he/ she will be used to think himself/ herself only and give little consideration to other people. This probably fosters a selfish feature which will lead to incompatibility of others. in the other side, ignoring other people always companies intolerance. If other people offense him/her unintentionally, he/she will remember clearly and even plot some revenge. Such a person surely cannot be a companion not to mention a good companion. A person spends his/ her time with others will avoid this to some degree because at least he/she will know that he/she are sharing the world with others.

However, only having consideration does not naturally mean a good companion, for what is more important for a good companion is to know what the other people really want and really think. This requires a good listener. As we know one have several ways to express just one meaning, and some are clear while some are very obscure, only when one could distinguish the effective words and grasp the real statement, one could know what other people actually want to say. Similarly, no one is a born good listener. To achieve this goal, one needs to practice. I always admire the listening skill of my roommate, and when I asked her how she acquire this skill, she said to me she shared room with 2 sisters, and she always listened to the complains or other pouring of mood of them which give her practice. Besides, slight shades between the tune and gestures in speaking will lead to a different effect, one cannot pay much attention to them unless he/ she always spend time with others and talks with others and then become very familiar with the difference. This skill cannot be acquired when one spends time alone.

Moreover, companion means a relationship between at least two people. Therefore, to become a good companion, one should learn how to balance with the interest and solve the abrasion between them. For example, my roommate and I have some difference of the sleeping habit. She always sleeps in the mid night and get up later while I like sleeping and waking up early; but when her lamp is on, I cannot go to sleep. I feel very upset and annoyed. When my roommate realize, she just hang a curtain between us, and all the problems have gone. This may be only a small affair but I have never encountered such thing because I never have the experience to share a room with others, so i even do not know how to come over it. as for my roommate it is a common problem when she shared room with her sisters. Since she always faces these, she has a lot of experience and can solve them easily which also cannot be attained by spending time alone.

In conclusion, if one always spends time alone, he/ she will lack of the fundamental skills to company with others and will be hardly cultivated into a good companion for he/ she are too used to think himself/ herself only. What we need to be a better companion can be only acquired by spending with others rather than alone.

crystal_shenUID: 158842

I totally （不同意就是完全不同意啦） disagree with what the speaker said. If we hold the given statement as true, according to the statement, 多余 we can automatically deduce that the more time one spends along拼写错误, the 应该用abetter companion one will be. Therefore, a person who lived alone even he/ she like living alone will be a good companion, or some savage people who live alone in the forest and never spend time with others will be a good companion. 感觉这几句不妥……尤其是therefore

In my opinion, the basis 换作essential characteristic好吗of a good companion is consideration?? not expressed clearlywhich cannot be acquired naturally or from the genetic reason, and it only can be cultivated when someone => onespends time with others. Since people's  => one'sthought and behavior is => are affected by the environment and surroundings to a large extent, the character and personality depend on the situation we live => one lives in as well. If a person will spend => spends most time alone, he/ she will be used to think himself/ herself only and give little consideration to other people. This probably fosters a selfish feature which will lead to incompatibility of others. in => Onthe other side, ignoring other people always companies intolerance. If other people offense him/her unintentionally, he/she will remember clearly and even plot some revenge. Such a person surely cannot be a companion not to mention a good companion. A person spends his/ her time with others will avoid this to some degree because at least he/she will know that he/she are sharing the world with others.

However, only having consideration does not naturally mean a good companion, for what is more important for a good companion is to know what the other people really want and really thinkhow people think OR what people think about. This requires being a good listener. As we know one have several ways to express just one meaning, and some are clear while some are very obscure, only when one could distinguish the effective words and grasp the real statement, one could know what other people actually want to say. Similarly, no one is a born good listener => no one is born as a good listener. To achieve this goalthis goal is not proper and obscue..., one needs to practice. I always admire the listening skill of my roommate, and when I asked her how she acquire this skill, she said to me she shared room with 2 sisters, and she always listened to the complains or other pouring of mood of them which give her practice. Besides, slight shades between the tune and gestures in speaking will lead to a different effect, one cannot pay much => enough attention to them who are 'them' here? unless he/ she always spend time with others and talks with others and then become very familiar with the differences. This skill cannot be acquired when one spends time alone.cannot 太武断，不妨用is hardly…… 多次出现 this skill，但有些罗嗦重复，多些变换会好些

Moreover, companion means a relationship between at least two people. Therefore, to become a good companion, one should learn how to balance with the interest and solve the abrasion between themwhat is 'them' for? . For example, my roommate and I have some differences of => in the sleeping habit. She always sleeps in the mid night and gets up later while I like sleeping and waking up early => earlier; but => and when her lamp is on, I cannot go to sleep. I feel very upset and annoyed. When my roommate realize, she just hang a curtain between us, and all the problems have gone. 讲述故事是否应该使用过去时态，而不是现在时态This may be only a small affair but I have never encountered such thing because I never have the experience to share a room with others, so i even do not know how to come over it. as for my roommate it is a common problem when => since she shared room with her sisters. Since she always faces these => As she used to facing problems like this, she has a lot of experience and can solve them easily which also cannot be => is either hardly attained by spending time alone.

In conclusion, if one always spends time alone, he/ she will be lack of the fundamental skills to company with others and will be hardly cultivated into a good companion for he/ she are too used to think himself/ herself only 'be used to sth./ doing sth.'  and ' he/she is'. you should write:' ... for he/she is used to thinking .... What we need to be a better companion can be only acquired by spending with others rather than alone.最后这句话很别扭。What is needed as a good companion could be better acquired by spending time with others rather than staying alone.


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crystal_shenUID: 158842

个人感觉文章开头，和第二段的说理有些牵强，不够说服力……

呵呵，努力努力啊！

我也快考作文了，03/09北京鼎均，大家都要加油啊！！

:)

G猫UID: 192988

issue71. "Spending time alone makes one a better companion to others."

1 the basis of a good companion is the feature of consideration and tolerance.
2 techniques: a a good listener
b know how to balance the interest between
3 cooperation understanding ---- practice

i feel t he topic is so strange because i cannot think up a single word to support the issue and i think the statement of the speaker is absolutely wrong which does not comply with the principle of ETS.
还有我觉得这是一片事实型的issue，我好像写成倾向型的了,不知道这样写是不是算跑题了

I totally disagree with what the speaker said. If we hold the given statement as true, according to the statement, we can automatically deduce that the more time one spends along, the better companion one will be. Therefore, a person who lived alone even he/ she like living alone will be a good companion, or some savage people who live alone in the forest and never spend time with others will be a good companion.

In my opinion, the basis of a good companion is consideration which cannot be acquired naturally or from the genetic reason, and it only can be cultivated when someone spends time with others. Since people's thought and behavior is affected by the environment and surroundings to a large extent, the character and personality depend on the situation we live in as well. [因为人的想法和行为受到环境的影响, 所以体谅他人的品质应该从和别人相处中得到? 这并不太合逻辑吧] If a person will spend most time alone, he/ she will be used to think himself/ herself only and give little consideration to other people. This probably fosters a selfish feature which will lead to incompatibility of others. In [on] the other side, [我感觉on the other side 一般表示从反方向论证, 后面的论点跟前面的关系应该是一致的,最好用moreover之类的, 不过这个我也不确定,只是感觉] ignoring other people always companies intolerance. If other people offense him/her unintentionally, he/she will remember clearly and even plot some revenge. [觉得没有提出令人信服的理由, 只是无端自己下了这样的结论] Such a person surely cannot be a companion not to mention a good companion. A person spends his/ her time with others will avoid this to some [这同样是自己一厢情愿的想法, 你凭什么说呢, 他知道他和别人共享一个世界? 同样是没有说服力] degree because at least he/she will know that he/she are sharing the world with others.

However, only having consideration does not naturally mean a good companion, for what is more important for a good companion is to know what the other people really want and really think. This requires a good listener. As we know one have several ways to express just one meaning, and some are clear while some are very obscure, only when one could distinguish the effective words and grasp the real statement, one could know what other people actually want to say. Similarly, no one is a born good listener. To achieve this goal, one needs to practice. [这里差一句.”而和别人的沟通可以达到practice的目的” 这样才有效地论证了ts] I always admire the listening skill of my roommate, and when I asked her how she acquire this skill, she said to me she shared room with 2 sisters, and she always listened to the complains or other pouring of mood of them which give her practice. Besides, slight shades between the tune and gestures in speaking will lead to a different effect; one cannot pay much attention to them unless he/ she always spend time with others and talks with others and then become very familiar with the difference. This skill cannot be acquired when one spends time alone. [这段的逻辑关系感觉还可以, 但是内容我实在觉得不是那么合适, 例子也写的有点罗嗦]

Moreover, companion means a relationship between at least two people. Therefore, to become a good companion, one should learn how to balance with the interest and solve the abrasion between them. [这里应该要说明，通过和人相处才能学会。。。不然这个例子没有支持的对象，因为它并不直接指向你的ts] For example, my roommate and I have some difference of the sleeping habit [这样的表述怪怪的]. She always sleeps in the mid night and get up later while I like sleeping and waking up early [would like to 好点吧]; But when her lamp is on, I cannot go to sleep. I feel very upset and annoyed. When my roommate realize, she just hang a curtain between us, and all the problems have gone. [又是好长个例子]This may be only a small affair but I have never encountered such thing because I never have the experience to share a room with others, so i even do not know how to come over it. as for my roommate it is a common problem when she shared room with her sisters. Since she always faces these, she has a lot of experience and can solve them easily which also cannot be attained by spending time alone.

In conclusion, if one always spends time alone, he/ she will lack of the fundamental skills to company with others and will be hardly cultivated into a good companion for he/ she are too used to think himself/ herself only. What we need to be a better companion can be only acquired by spending with others rather than alone.
[其实B1和B3的想法都可以，但是没有很好的展开论证，逻辑漏洞很多，而且例子不太好， 加油]