issue 227 新人新发,请拍砖

asparagusUID: 194569

Issue 227

It is more important to allocate money for immediate, existing social problems than to spend it on long-term research that might help future generations.


There are so many problems to deal with in the modern society that are immediate: unemployment, natural disaster etc. We also face the long-term research tasks that will make our future generation live better.Of course, both of them are important, but the money is limited, which of them should the society place first? I think the society should pay more attention on immediate society problems.

Admittedly,the society is benefit from long-term research. Long-term research can bring out new science and technology.Without the work of Von Newman and other scientists, computer science and technology would still be Babbage's dream. Long term research can also help the society to avoid potential danger. Most of the asian-pacific countries have established tsunami forecast system that can inform people who live near the coastline the latest news of tsunami. If the Indian Ocean countries could have built a similar system, the recent tsunami would not taken so many lives.

As I mentioned the tsunami, I remember one story in Aesop's Fables. One day a child was playing on the bank, unfortunately he fell into the river.Just then an old man passed by saw the boy, he scolded at him: "Fool boy, Haven't you been told not to play on the bank? I'll tell your mother then." The boy replied: "I see, but please save me." When time and money are limited, what should the society do? Do just as the old man did? The society should place the urgent social problem first. Take the recent tsunami for example, after the tsunami, what should the international society do first? Help to set up a new tsunami system for the Indian Ocean countries? It is important really, but the survivor need clean wanter, food, medicine and new homes.Of course the society should settle this urgent problem before starting the long-term research.

In addition, what is the reason for long-term research? To solve existing social problems more completely and quickly is an important reason and immediate social problems also stimulate the long-term research. If we allocate more money for immediate social problems, we actually use some of it in long-term research. At the beginning of the 21st century, the society encounted the Y2k problem: the confusion of 1900 and 2000 in old-fashioned computer. Scientists also brought along long-term computer research when the solving of the immediate problem is going on. Long-term research can get experience from settlement of immediate social problems. It is killing two birds with one stone to allocate more money for immediate problems.

To sum up, the society should allocate more money on solving the present social problems, which are more urgent and also can supply experience for the long-term research that might help the future generations. We also should leave something to our future generations so that they can be independent enough to develop human's future.

ilmfampUID: 188503

今天刚写过issue56,跟227主题接近，我试着分析一下这篇文章：
Issue 更强调的是逻辑，包括每段之间和每段内部的逻辑性。
1。从段与段之间的逻辑性来看：
主题：the society should pay more attention on immediate society problems.
B1:the society is benefit from long-term research
B2: society should settle this urgent problem before starting the long-term research.
B3: It is killing two birds with one stone to allocate more money for immediate problems.
B1,社会可以从long-term research受益那么推理下去就是应该给它投钱，让步是可以的但是要围绕主题。在该段就应该有转到说immediate society problems更重要的意思
B2.主题是应该解决immediate society problems，这一段只是主题的复述而不是论证
B3.给immediate society problems投资是一石两鸟，似乎可以支持主题。但是主题说的是给那个投资更重要谈的是重要性不是有效性。
2．从段内逻辑来看
B2与B3的共同点是没有在开头给出topic sentence
B2将的故事估计老外看不懂
B3 提出了好几个分论点但没有论据分别去支撑他们

呵呵，不知道分析的对不对

poohUID: 146994

No.1 issue 227 新人新发,请拍砖
Issue 227

It is more important to allocate money for immediate, existing social problems than to spend it on long-term research that might help future generations.


There are so many problems to deal with in the modern society that are immediate: unemployment, natural disaster etc. We also face the long-term research tasks that will make our future generation live better.Of course, both of them are important, but the money is limited, which of them should the society place first? I think the society should pay more attention on immediate society problems.

Admittedly,the society is benefit from long-term research. Long-term research can bring out new science and technology.Without the work of Von Newman and other scientists, computer science and technology would still be Babbage's dream. babbage's dream? 是指什么呢？ Moreover, Long term research can also help the society to avoid potential danger. Most of the asian-pacific countries have established tsunami forecast system that can inform people who live near the coastline the latest news of tsunami. 这个预警系统是research后的结果，要讲明白因果关系If the Indian Ocean countries could have built a similar system, the recent tsunami would not taken so many livesaway . 我在想自然灾害的问题，你开头第一句说There are so many problems to deal with in the modern society that are immediate: unemployment, natural disaster etc. 显然你是把自然灾害划到了immediate problems里面，可是这段却说的是long-term research

As I mentioned the tsunami, I remember one story in Aesop's Fables. One day a child was playing on the bank, unfortunately he fell into the river.Just then an old man passed by saw the boy, he scolded at him: "Fool boy, Haven't you been told not to play on the bank? I'll tell your mother then." The boy replied: "I see, but please save me." When time and money are limited, what should the society do? Do just as the old man did? The society should place the urgent social problem first. Take the recent tsunami for example, after the tsunami, what should the international society do first? Help to set up a new tsunami system for the Indian Ocean countries? It is important really, but the survivor need clean wanter, food, medicine and new homes.Of course the society should settle this urgent problem before starting the long-term research. 仍然怀疑建立预警系统是否是long-term research

In addition, what is the reason for long-term research? To solve existing social problems more completely and quickly is an important reason and immediate social problems also stimulate the long-term research. 这么说恐怕有问题。这里应该好好理解一下题目说的long-term research that might help future generations. 注意这里强调benefit future generations 比如一些基础科学的研究，或许当前看来没有什么实际用处  If we allocate more money for immediate social problems, we actually use some of it in long-term research. At the beginning of the 21st century, the society encounted the Y2k problem: the confusion of 1900 and 2000 in old-fashioned computer. Scientists also brought along long-term computer research when the solving of the immediate problem is going on. Long-term research can get experience from settlement of immediate social problems. It is killing two birds with one stone to allocate more money for immediate problems. 当然，如果你这段的看法也未尝不可，只要你可以自己讲明白了，尽管跟一般人的理解不太一样

To sum up, the society should allocate more money on solving the present social problems, which are more urgent and also can supply experience for the long-term research that might help the future generations. We also should leave something to our future generations so that they can be independent enough to develop human's future.

asparagusUID: 194569

多谢ilmfamp 和 pooh姐 啦, 这是我修改后的,希望大家继续拍砖啊

Issue 227

It is more important to allocate money for immediate, existing social problems than to spend it on long-term research that might help future generations.


There are so many problems to deal with in the modern society that are immediate: unemployment, natural disaster etc. We also face the long-term research tasks that will make our future generation live better.Of course, both of them are important, but the money is limited, which of them should the society place first? I think the society should pay more attention on immediate society problems.

Admittedly,the society is benefit from long-term research. Long-term research can bring out new science and technology.Without the framework for modern computer and lots of basic algorithms developed by Von Newman and other scientists, we would still have to use abacus for computation. Moreover, long-term research can also help to avoid potential danger. Most of the asian-pacific countries have established tsunam forecast system based on the long-term research of undersea crust movements by geographers. If the Indian Ocean countries could have built a similar system, the recent tsunami would not taken so many lives away.

Unfortunately, time is not always enough for both solving of existing social problems and long-term research, therefore the society must choose a more urgent one. I remember a story in Aesop's Fables that just fit the situation. One day a child was playing on the bank, suddenly he fell into the river.Just then an old man passed by saw the boy, he scolded at him: "Fool boy, Haven't you been told not to play on the bank? I'll tell your mother then." The boy replied: "I see, but please save me first." It tell us to pick up urgent social problem before long-term research. Take the recent tsunami for example, after the strike, what should the international society do first? Starting the long-term research of the crust under Indian Ocean? It is important really, but now the survivors need clean wanter, food, medicine and new houses. Of course the international society should settle these urgent problems before exploration of the seafloor which may collect some information for the new tsunam forecast system.

In addition, money would also be not sufficient enough to support both the settlement of existing problems and the long-term research. Because of that it is important to allocating more money for immediate social problems rather than long-term research since solving of existing problems can stimulate the long-term research but the opposite is not always true. During settling immediate social problems, the long-term research would get great deal of data, ideas and experiences. At the beginning of the 21st century, the society encounted the Y2k problem: the confusion of 1900 and 2000 in old-fashioned computer. After the Y2k problem, computer scientists and statistists got a great quantity of data and experience which ought to have cost them a lot. It is killing two birds with one stone to allocate more money for immediate problems.

To sum up, the society should allocate more money on solving the present social problems, which are more urgent and can also supply lots of essentials for the long-term research. We also should leave something to our future generations so that they can be independent enough to develop human's future.