issue 94 欢迎批评，有贴必应，谢谢

augustUID: 189758

94"Universities should require every student to take a variety of courses outside the student's field of study because acquiring knowledge of various academic disciplines is the best way to become truly educated."

16.17
I fundamentally agree with the author's statement that university should offer students various courses outside the student's major course of study. It is no doubt that without acquiring a variety of knowledge an individual will only become a machine which functions in the society, rather than a truly educated person. Nevertheless, I would caution that extending this statement too far will go to the other end and still harm the society..

The primary reason why I agree with the statement is that the purpose of education, or the meaning of truly educated, is to develop the personality of an individual and the significance of him to himself and to others. A variety of courses other than courses in one's major field may help a lot to shape one's personality and characters. For example, an electrical engineering major should learn something about literature, philosophy and history besides the courses in the major field. Although in someone's viewpoint, these courses does not have any "practical" use because they don't offer job-related skills, but these courses will complement an individual some other benefits which help him shape his personality and character. Literature tells us how beautiful language is; philosophy teaches us the meaning of life; history let us know the past and therefore help us predict the future. In other words, the study in these area help to broaden our eyeshot and deepen our understanding of the nature and the society.

More over, in this changing and increasingly competitive world, one's knowledge acquired in university is far more enough to ensure a future career. Actually, the boundary between a major and another is so vague that one college student is not sure what job he will take after graduation. The life-long learning belief is rooted in our mind and we know that unless keep learning through out our life we may be eliminated by the society. Nowadays the employers tend to hire people who have creative ideas and the capability to master a skill in a short period of time instead of people who can only master in a single field. Therefore the significance of obtaining some basic skills such as logical thinking, critical thinking, and creative problem-solving turn out to be obvious. Those subjects such as physics, art, psychology, or even geography, provide these skills. For instance, through studying physics we acquire the ability of logical thinking; through studying art we learn creative thinking, through studying psychology we learn how to understand others.   

However, the call for a broad educational experience as the path to be truly educated comes with one important caveat. If one just dabbles at a hodge-podge of academic offerings, he is a mere dilettante in those academic areas. Compared with some students who excel at one major area, he is less competitive in job finding. In other words, he falls behind his peers who is expert in one specific area at the beginning.

In the final analysis, to become truly educated one indeed need a broad courses of study, which is beneficial to himself as well as to his professional career. But we should also note that in order to be more competitive in the job market, one must excel his own major. The significance is how to strike a proper balance between them.

圣光UID: 193720

94"Universities should require every student to take a variety of courses outside the student's field of study because acquiring knowledge of various academic disciplines is the best way to become truly educated."

16.17
I fundamentally agree with the author's statement that university should offer students various courses outside the student's major course of study. It is no doubt that without acquiring a variety of knowledge an individual will only become becomesa machine which functions in the society, rather than a truly educated person. Nevertheless, I would caution that extending this statement too far will go to the other end and still harm the society..

The primary reason why I agree with the statement is that the purpose of education, or the meaning of truly educated, is to develop the personality of an individual and the significance of him to himself and to others. A variety of courses other than courses in one's major field may help a lot to shape one's personality and characters. For example, an electrical engineering major should learn something about literature, philosophy and history besides the courses in the major field. Although in someone's viewpoint, these courses does not have any "practical" use because they don't offer job-related skills, but (although 后面还加but?)these courses will complement an individual some other benefits （觉得这里表意奇怪，补偿利益么？是不是give benefits好些啊？）which help him shape his personality and character. Literature tells us how beautiful language is; philosophy teaches us the meaning of life; history let us know the past and therefore help us predict the future. （注意人称单复数，主谓一致！）In other words, the study in these area areashelp to broaden our eyeshot and deepen our understanding of the nature and the society.这里不如直接说对于更好理解自己major，因为你讨论的就是要不要学专业以外的东西。

More over（合在一起！moreover）, in this changing and increasingly competitive world, one's knowledge acquired in university is far more enough 是想说远远不能满足未来工作的需要么？这样说是这个意思？存疑！to ensure a future career. Actually, the boundary between a major and another is so vague that one college student is not sure what job he will take after graduation. The life-long learning belief is rooted in our mind and we know that unless wekeep learning through out thoughoutour life we may be eliminated by the society. Nowadays the employers tend to hire people who have creative ideas and the capability to master a skill in a short period of time instead of people who can only master in a single field. Therefore the significance of obtaining some basic skills such as logical thinking, critical thinking, and creative problem-solving turn out to be obvious. Those subjects such as physics, art, psychology, or even geography, provide these skills. For instance, through studying physics we acquire the ability of logical thinking; through studying art we learn creative thinking, through studying psychology we learn how to understand others.

However, the call for a broad educational experience as the path to be truly educated comes with one important caveat. If one just dabbles at a hodge-podge of academic offerings, he is a mere dilettante in those academic areas. Compared with some students who excel at one major area, he is less competitive in job finding. In other words, he falls behind his peers who is expert in one specific area at the beginning.

In the final analysis, to become truly educated one indeed need a broad courses of study, which is beneficial to himself as well as to his professional career. But we should also note that in order to be more competitive in the job market, one must excel his own major. The significance is how to strike a proper balance between them.一开始说基本同意题目的论点，后面又说要在两者间找平衡，似乎有点前后不一致。而且你行文的重点也在于学习其他知识的重要性，很可能被ETS说你论证不充分

觉得作为第一篇，比我的好多了，可能在逻辑上加强一点就好了。
以上意见，仅供参考，欢迎讨论，欢迎回拍。：）

augustUID: 189758

意见很中肯，首先表示感谢！ :)

1.“这里不如直接说对于更好理解自己major，因为你讨论的就是要不要学专业以外的东西。”
  因为整篇文章分两方面讲，第一方面是讲对develop one's personality 的好处，作为总结句，所以还是叙述对enhance personality有关的东西

2." 一开始说基本同意题目的论点，后面又说要在两者间找平衡，似乎有点前后不一致。而且你行文的重点也在于学习其他知识的重要性，很可能被ETS说你论证不充分"

   从开头段可以看出本文是由倾向性地赞成观点，最后一句话确实有可能误导。不过从整篇文章来看还是一赞成为主。

改进： 在开头段把赞成的两方面理由简要表达一下，这样在逻辑上显得条例更清晰一些