Issue240 感觉很不好，大家指点一下吧！

bvbUID: 194706

"Although many people think that the luxuries and conveniences of contemporary life are entirely harmless, in fact, they actually prevent people from developing into truly strong and independent individuals."
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  The assertion that luxuries and conveniences deprive our strength and independence sounds plausible, it reflects only the negative aspect of how technology affects our lives. I strongly believe that we still have the necessity and possibility to be strong and independent, even with the comfort offered by the technology of contemporary life.

  The speaker most probably summarize on the fact that the advances of the technology in contemporary life make many things easier. And that is true, particularly in physical aspect. The transportation means has developed from walking to horse riding, then cycling, and today automobiles or jet planes, months of walking or riding has been something of the past. Building a magnificent building such as the Great Wall will never be as exhausting as before, modern machineries will lift those heavy bricks to the top of the mountain, no muscled builders needed. As a result, people in this era are getting weak and fat physically as never before.

  But strength and independence is manifold. The contemporary life, though requires little physical strength, remains demanding in other aspects of strength and independence. Human being is still far from an intensive understanding of the world we live in, and the process of discovering the unknown part is an unprecedented challenging and complex job. This requires people that are mentally strong: either willing to challenge themselves in solving abstract problems, or work independently to explorer the unpredictable new fields that no other people want do dabble. This explains why, with the advancement of the auxiliaries such as computers, actual working hours and complexities in fields like research or business management has never decreased. Strength and independence will not be out of date.

  Another fact to release the concern of the degeneration is that human is aggressive. Even though the need for physical strength and independence no longer exists, we will still train ourselves to remain strong instead of watching ourselves getting weak and die helplessly. One convincing example is the boom of modern tourism and remoteness exploration. Fewer and fewer people choose to sit in a tour bus and watch out of the windows like watching TV. In many sites full of untouched sceneries, hikers with a giant backpack and camp are walking the traces of the beasts through the wildness alone. By the progress of this physically challenging activities, people shape there strong and independent characters while admiring the great natural beauties.

  In sum, even though the luxuries and conveniences of the contemporary life, we still have the necessity and the possibilities to be a strong and independent individuals.

附提纲：
position: L&C will never prevent people from developing into truly st... as it may seem to.

why: L&C enable us to live a comfortable life where there is no, if any, physically challange.
example: Improved transportation, automated mechineries

contradiction(objective): Though physically, life is getting easy, but in other aspects not.
ex: a large and complex part of the world remains to be unknown. The actual work hours and intensity of many fields have never decreased.

controdiction(subjective): People still can choose to be a strong independent individual even though the circumstances is getting easy.
ex: thouse montain climbers and remoteness explorers.

onlyfishUID: 192741

"Although many people think that the luxuries and conveniences of contemporary life are entirely harmless, in fact, they actually prevent people from developing into truly strong and independent individuals."
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The assertion that luxuries and conveniences deprive our strength and independence sounds plausible,(;) it reflects only the negative aspect of how technology affects our lives. I strongly believe that we still have the necessity and possibility to be strong and independent, even with the comfort offered by the technology of contemporary life.

The speaker most probably summarize(summarizes) on the fact that the advances of the(去掉） technology in contemporary life make many things easier. And that is true, particularly in physical aspect. The transportation means has developed from walking to horse riding, then cycling, and today automobiles or jet planes, （；）months of walking or riding has been something of the past. Building a magnificent building such as the Great Wall will never be as exhausting as before, modern machineries will lift those heavy bricks to the top of the mountain, no muscled builders needed. As a result, people in this era are getting weak and fat physically as never before.
证明了我们在很大程度上可以依靠机器和工具，而不需要费力气就能 完成很多事情，不能推出我们在体力上就弱了吧，加一句使
我们缺少锻炼之类的话就行了。

But strength and independence is （are)manifold. The contemporary life, though requires little physical strength, remains demanding in other aspects of strength and independence. Human being is still far from an intensive understanding of the world we live in, and the process of discovering the unknown part is an unprecedented challenging and complex job. This requires people that are mentally strong: either willing to challenge themselves in solving abstract problems, or work independently to explorer the unpredictable new fields that no other people want do dabble. This explains why, with the advancement of the auxiliaries such as computers, actual working hours and complexities in fields like research or business management has never decreased. Strength and independence will not be out of date.（should不等于is，个人觉得如果这段写成from empirical proof就可以证明了，比如我们在探索的时候仍然表现出很强的个人力量）

Another fact to release the concern of the degeneration is that human is aggressive. Even though the need for physical strength and independence no longer exists, we will still train ourselves to remain strong instead of watching ourselves getting weak and die helplessly. One convincing example is the boom of modern tourism and remoteness exploration. Fewer and fewer people choose to sit in a tour bus and watch out of the （去掉）windows like watching TV. In many sites full of untouched sceneries, hikers with a giant backpack and camp are walking the traces of the beasts through the wildness alone. By the progress of this physically challenging activities, people shape there（their) strong and independent characters while admiring the great natural beauties. 这段不错

In sum, even though the luxuries and conveniences of the contemporary life, we still have the necessity and the possibilities to be a strong and independent individuals.
结尾有点简单诶，把割断主要意思总结一下，再should就好了

加油

附提纲：
position: L&C will never prevent people from developing into truly st... as it may seem to.

why: L&C enable us to live a comfortable life where there is no, if any, physically challange.
example: Improved transportation, automated mechineries

contradiction(objective): Though physically, life is getting easy, but in other aspects not.
ex: a large and complex part of the world remains to be unknown. The actual work hours and intensity of many fields have never decreased.

controdiction(subjective): People still can choose to be a strong independent individual even though the circumstances is getting easy.
ex: thouse montain climbers and remoteness explorers.

bvbUID: 194706

真详细！太感谢了！