Issue122 知识归功于不同意见，前几天写的第一篇issue, 请赐砖头，必回拍，谢谢！

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呵呵，大家好！
偶一直在综合版写日记，快一月了，迷茫困惑中。今天渐有点头绪，不怎么看范文了，先自己写了再说。
这是我的第一篇，大概两三小时，再改了一小时，对一些用法还是不确定。鼓足勇气贴上来主要是为了请大家看看水平给点建议，也是把自己逼上来，不再逃避了，开写！
以前一直因为自己写得不好，虽也看看朋友的文章，但不敢发言，现在可能看了一些范文有点感觉了，就斗胆尽绵薄之力吧，尽量改作文，拍我者必回拍，最晚在两天内。谢谢！
题目：
Issue122 "We owe almost all our knowledge not to people who have agreed, but to people who have disagreed."
正文：
Do we owe almost all our knowledge not to people who have agreed, but to people who have disagreed? The speaker claim so. I concede that we gain much knowledge from different ideas. Otherwise, in my view, the speaker’s assertion goes too far by overlooking that undue disagreement might impede wisdom advancing and the agreement can also serve to knowledge accumulation.

The benefits of disagreement for knowledge are not deniable. Indeed, it is the very fundament that our knowledge advance. For supporting examples one should look no further than the history of science. Consider disagreeing the notion that the Earth was in a fixed position at the center of the universe, Copernicus paved for the way for the corroborating observations of Galileo a century later, and ultimately for Newton's principles of gravity upon which all modern science depends.

Otherwise, under some circumstances undue disagreement can also impede developing knowledge, especially when the overwhelming power insists on its wrong opinion. For instance, in the medium era, the inquisition persecutes many innocent people whose ideas opposing it and impedes diffusing some enlightened wisdom which is not in accord with it. This also occurs when most people disagree with the correct idea which few people hold. For example, today, the notion that eating much meat is helpful to health still prevail although it has many infects in that the force of disagreement of majority affects the society’s knowledge system.

Acknowledging the many benefits and sometime harm of disagreement, however, we should not overlook how agreement propels the human knowledge, which also plays a great role in our wisdom accumulation, whether by infirming us and goading us to gain further knowledge, or by providing the more profound knowledge.

First, those who have the same viewpoints with us can also contribute to our knowledge accumulation by giving us confidence about our own knowledge and urging us to make more effort for profound knowledge. At personal level, through parents and teachers’ agreements children augment their basic knowledge step by step; otherwise, they might lose interest in learning and gain nothing as a result. In addition, at the science and art realm, appropriate recognition would give the genial inspiration to continue his or her creations, some of which are so obscure that most people tend to laugh at them. One can go no further to see this point by examining the role played by the Nobel Praise in the academia and art field.

Moreover, not only gain we confidence and enthusiasm for probing further knowledge indirectly, but we achieve profound knowledge directly, in that our knowledge system is an accumulating one. For example, people agreeing with the right knowledge make great effort on compiling, coordinating, and disseminating them, during which more profound ideas are added. Indeed, any theoretic can not remain what it is original.

To sum up, I concede that we gain much from people disagree. Otherwise, people whose ideas we share in common also contribute to our knowledge accumulation, by give us confidence, enthusiasm and profound knowledge.

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Issue122 "We owe almost all our knowledge not to people who have agreed, but to people who have disagreed."
正文：
Do we owe almost all our knowledge not to people who have agreed, but to people who have disagreed? The speaker claim so. I concede that we gain much knowledge from different ideas. Otherwise, in my view, the speaker’s assertion goes too far by overlooking that undue disagreement might impede wisdom advancing and the agreement can also serve to knowledge accumulation.

The benefits of disagreement for knowledge are not deniable. Indeed, it is the very fundament that our knowledge advance It is an important factor that promote our knowledge and technology levels. For supporting examples one should look no further than the history of science.没必要用这么长的一句话表达一个很简单的意思。改为：For example, in perspective of science, …… Consider disagreeing the notion that the Earth was in a fixed position at the center of the universe, Copernicus paved for the way for the corroborating observations of Galileo a century later, and ultimately for Newton's principles of gravity upon which all modern science depends. 1。只举了例子，没有具体的分析，也没有回应开头ts的句子，不好，要改。2。本身你的这个例子就叙述不是很fit，那么长的一句话，关于“disagree”没说多少，不是很应该。3。这样的例子很多，因为科学的发展总是在曲折中前进的，所以一个正确的结论总是很多谬误的disagreement，这个例子举有点滥了4。没有分析，所以仅从字数上一看，就给人“单薄”的感觉

Otherwise,这里的otherwise意义比较低多，建议还了，用what’s more under some circumstances undue disagreement can also impede developing knowledge, especially when the overwhelming power insists on its wrong opinion.只是把ts句说了，没有简短的理论分析。 For instance, in the medium era, the inquisition persecutes many innocent people whose ideas opposing it and impedes diffusing some enlightened wisdom which is not in accord with it. This also occurs when most people disagree with the correct idea which few people hold. For example, today, the notion 到此用了2此，问题是用的对吗？也可以用idea，什么的that eating much meat is helpful to health still prevail although it has many infects in that the force of disagreement of majority affects the society’s knowledge system.缺少分析、总结

Acknowledging the many benefits and sometime harm of disagreement, however, we should not overlook how agreement propels the human knowledge, which also plays a great role in our wisdom accumulation, whether by infirming us and goading us to gain further knowledge, or by providing the more profound knowledge.

First, those who have the same viewpoints with us can also contribute to our knowledge accumulation by giving us confidence about our own knowledge and urging us to make more effort for profound knowledge. At personal level, through parents and teachers’ agreements children augment their basic knowledge step by step; otherwise, they might lose interest in learning and gain nothing as a result. In addition, at the science and art realm, appropriate recognition would give the genial inspiration to continue his or her creations, some of which are so obscure that most people tend to laugh at them. One can go no further to see this point by examining the role played by the Nobel Praise in the academia and art field.举个自己的自己的例子最好了

Moreover, not only gain we confidence and enthusiasm for probing further knowledge indirectly, but we achieve profound knowledge directly, in that our knowledge system is an accumulating one. For example, people agreeing with the right knowledge make great effort on compiling, coordinating, and disseminating them, during which more profound ideas are added. Indeed, any theoretic can not remain what it is original.

To sum up, I concede that we gain much from people disagree. Otherwise, people whose ideas we share in common also contribute to our knowledge accumulation, by give us confidence, enthusiasm and profound knowledge

小结：
1．结构层面：段分的有点多了，让每一段的感觉很“单薄”，不是很“有力”
2。每一段的结构有问题，建议用：ts――》几句理论分析――》举例――》例子分析（往你的ts句上靠套，也是一种解释的方式）――》总结的话，回应段首ts句

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非常感谢naiba369! 你是我的第一个修改者，意义重大，呵呵！也真的获益甚多！谢谢！

下面是我改后的，花了2小时20分钟，头都大了，不知有没有进步。

希望继续拍砖！

在段落上合了一段。结构上基本用naiba369的建议：几句理论分析――》举例――》例子分析总结的话，回应段首ts句

另外， 两个notion 的用法见于280，（我的主要语言都来自那里）不知是否真不妥，先换成ｉｄｅａ了。
另外，for supporting examples one should look no futher than 是否太罗嗦？我也是看280 常这么用。
谢谢！

Do we owe almost all our knowledge not to people who have agreed, but to people who have disagreed? The speaker claim so. I concede that we gain much knowledge from different ideas. Otherwise, in my view, the speaker’s assertion goes too far by overlooking that undue disagreement might impede wisdom advancing and the agreement can also serve to knowledge accumulation.

The benefits of disagreement for knowledge are not deniable. First and foremost, the controversies can help people find the underlying fallacies of our ideas or perspectives which people may often overlook For example, Before Silent Spring, which is written by Rachel Cason, exposed the dark side of science, nearly all Americans believed that science was a force for good and the destruction of nature can no longer be called progress. thanks to her brave disagreement with the mainstream perspective, we can find our fallacies and not begin to pay attention to nature too late. Moreover, Disagreement inspires us to learn more. when encountering certain theory opposing ours, we tend to select more proof to confirm us and learn more whether at last we find the former one we cherish correct or not. If all of us start agreeing with the existing theories and with each other, there will be no inspiration for us to explore further. in addition, disagreement gives us new angles for watching things, even when it goes wrong. accordingly, it is the disagreement that human knowledge advance upon.
acknowledging that most disagreement serve well to purposes of knowledge developing, we could not overstate its benefit. However, under some circumstances undue disagreement can also impede developing knowledge, when the overwhelming power insists on its wrong opinion, and when most people disagree with the correct idea which few people hold, and when the debate becomes irrational denouncement or personal attack. For instance, in the medium era, the inquisition persecutes many innocent people whose ideas opposing it and impedes diffusing some enlightened wisdom which is not in accord with it. The agreement from inquisition are destructive to knowledge. This also occurs when most people disagree the incorrect perspective. For example, today, the unture idea that eating much meat is helpful to health still prevails in that the force of disagreement of majority affects the society’s knowledge system. This kind of disagree can submerge the sound idea. finally, the irrational disagreement between shrews seems meaningless as well. Thus, we can not overvalue the disagreement by noting that undue disagreement can also impede developing knowledge.

Another problem with the statement is that it undervalues the benefits of agreement , which also plays a great role in our wisdom accumulation, whether by infirming us and goading us to gain further knowledge, or by providing the more profound knowledge. First, those who have the same viewpoints with us can also contribute to our knowledge accumulation by giving us confidence about our own knowledge and urging us to make more effort for profound knowledge. At personal level, through parents and teachers’ agreements children augment their basic knowledge step by step; otherwise, they might lose interest in learning and gain nothing as a result. In addition, at the science and art realm, appropriate recognition would give the genial inspiration to continue his or her creations, some of which are so obscure that most people tend to laugh at them. One can go no further to see this point by examining the role played by the Nobel Praise in the academia and art field. In fact, without agreement from other, we hardly continue our further research.

In addition, not only achieve we confidence and enthusiasm for probing further knowledge indirectly, but we achieve profound knowledge directly, in that our knowledge system is an accumulating one. People agreeing with the right knowledge make great effort on compiling, coordinating, and disseminating them, during which more profound ideas are added. Most academic systems have been improved and perfected by those numerous people who agree, and it remains the same in the art field, such as the Bibles and Homer epic. Indeed, agreement contributes much in enriching and modifies human knowledge.

To sum up, in my view, the speaker’s assertion goes too extreme. I concede that we gain much from people disagree. Otherwise, people whose ideas we share in common also contribute to our knowledge accumulation, by give us confidence, enthusiasm and more profound and perfect knowledge

naiba369UID: 131655

另外， 两个notion 的用法见于280，（我的主要语言都来自那里）不知是否真不妥，先换成ｉｄｅａ了。
另外，for supporting examples one should look no futher than 是否太罗嗦？我也是看280 常这么用。
谢谢

老外280，我没怎么看，dendis说里面良莠不齐，很难说，自己还是要再认真考虑一下的

用词/句，我提倡简洁而准确，个人习惯了

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sp， try～～