issue5 全国统一课程... 认真修改过:)

G猫UID: 192988

隔了这么久,终于写了第三篇issue出来, 大家帮忙看看吧.
多谢了.
限时的时候只写了526个词,后来修改又添了一些内容上去.

Issue5  第2篇 全国统一课程！
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作者：G猫     共用时间：43分49秒     526 words
从2005年1月12日10时7分到2005年1月12日10时43分
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A nation should require all its students to study the same national curriculum until they enter college rather than allow schools in different parts of the nation to determine which academic courses to offer.
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Should a nation require all its students to study the same national curriculum until they enter college rather than allow schools in different parts of the nation to determine which academic courses to offer, as the speaker says? I concede that a common core curriculum is necessary for any country. At the same time, the government should allow the local authorities the freedom to implement the curriculum with flexibility according to the local situation.

A common core curriculum is indispensable for an effective education system. First of all, the same national curricula could prepare recruits of similar knowledge framework for the university, so that the university administrators and faculty are able to choose appropriate instruction materials and arrange proper schedules for the freshman; otherwise, freshman coming from different regions may vary significantly in lore and ability, which will rise problems to higher education: the professors may be in a dilemma of setting the instruction pace while the students may be “forced” to skip classes with the complaint of either too simple or too elusive materials. In addition, supported by intellectual and financial resources on a national level, the schooling system with a common curriculum is more likely to develop into a productive and scientific one which may result in better effect of teaching. In other words, the federal government has an abundant pool of leading education experts as well as a sufficient amount of money to conduct research with the aim of boosting the quality of education, which may open doors to the improvement of current system. Finally, the same national curriculum makes possible a uniform and relatively objective standard to judge the performance of students, the outcomes of which are necessary for a nation-wide selection--such as the entrance examination of university and college--of qualified applicants. In a word, the common curriculum is an essential component of a sound education system.

Hence, we could not deny the significance of the same national curriculum. But at the same time, the federal government should entitle local officials to add on or cut off courses according to the real conditions. First consider that, different parts of a country usually have their own unique cultures. One of the education's purposes is to transmit the brilliant culture that has been tested by the fire of history; the local cultural legacy is definitely something that should be transmitted from generation to generation, yet this could not be required by a common curriculum. Therefore, the local authority should set correspondent courses to perpetuate its cultural heritages. The languages of minority, for example, is of great significance for the culture diversity, thus should be taught in the local school to make for the common curriculum prescribed by the federal government. Moreover, with the divergent economic development of different regions, there inevitably formed gaps of economic strength between regions. As a result, some under-development areas may not have enough ability to offer some common courses. Such as poor villages, it is very difficult for them to build a computer or biological laboratory. Thus providing students with curriculum that require advancing and expensive equipment seems unrealistic in these areas. In short, due to the regional situation, both cultural and economic, local alternatives are indispensable supplement for a common curriculum designed by the central government.

To sum up, a common core curriculum and the featured local alterations are both necessary to the country, the society and the students themselves. The same national curriculum brings an ordered education environment and ensures students' better acquirement of basic knowledge and ability, while the local features will contribute to the culture diversity and tradition preservation. An ideal education calls for a combination of common core curriculum and local supplements. Therefore the central and local government should make joint effort to promote a better education system for the children.

乒乓球爱上九月UID: 162925

不太同意这种观点的写法，题目认为用A不用B，你如果认为at the same time A 和B 都要，至少有个前提：A和B可以同时存在。可能性和必要性一样重要挖。否则，可以算是不切题。

delta496UID: 193816

I concede that a common core curriculum is necessary for any country. At the same time, the government should allow the local authorities the freedom to implement the curriculum with flexibility according to the local situation.
我觉得这个观点可以成立，没有偏题啊！

乒乓球爱上九月UID: 162925

我的看法是,题目认为应该建立统一标准而不是各自为营.

G猫的回应是: 两个都很重要.

这样理解对不对?

我觉得这样的话,就有点偏了的说.  讨论讨论吧.

delta496UID: 193816

我认为G猫的观点是 combine a required national core curriculum with additional courses implemented by local authorities
即：国家标准＋地区补充
    而 补充 不等于 各自为营
    国家标准 和 地区补充 可以同时存在
    而 统一标准 和 各自为营 确实不能同时存在

阿莱UID: 190806

非常明显 人家讨论的就是应该还是不应该 说别的都远了 off the point

G猫UID: 192988

晕~off the point?
好大的问题呀,
我考虑考虑

nickaaronleeUID: 183378

我也觉得应该选择其中的一个，请问如果在body 3加一个让步可否？

乒乓球爱上九月UID: 162925

这样可能好一点,改一下看看呢.

G猫UID: 192988

根据斑竹的意见,我稍微修改了一下一些关键的部分: 文章开头, 各body的ts等, 大家再帮我看看这样可以不? 非常感谢:)

Should a nation require all its students to study the same national curriculum until they enter college rather than allow schools in different parts of the nation to determine which academic courses to offer, as the speaker says? I agree with the speaker in that a common curriculum is necessary for any country. At the same time, however, the government should allow the local authorities the freedom to implement the curriculum with flexibility according to the local situation.

A common core curriculum, which is indispensable for an effective education system, should be set uniformly by the central government to guide the education all over the country. This proposition is based on the following reasons. First of all, the same national curricula could prepare recruits of similar knowledge framework for university, so that the university administrators and faculty are able to choose appropriate instruction materials and arrange proper schedules for the freshman; otherwise, freshman coming from different regions may vary significantly in lore and ability, which will rise problems to higher education: the professors may be in a dilemma of setting the instruction pace while the students may be “forced” to skip classes with the complaint of either too simple or too elusive materials. In addition, supported by intellectual and financial resources on a national level, the schooling system with a common curriculum is more likely to develop into a productive and scientific one which may result in better effect of teaching. In other words, the national government has an abundant pool of leading education experts as well as a sufficient amount of money to conduct research with the aim of boosting the quality of education, which may open doors to the improvement of current system. Finally, the same national curriculum makes possible a uniform and relatively objective standard to judge the performance of students, the outcomes of which are necessary for a nation-wide selection--such as the entrance examination of university and college--of qualified applicants. In a word, the common curriculum is an essential component of an effective education system thus every nation should take pains to perfect it.

Although a basic common curriculum is needed, this does not incompatible with some local supplement or reduction. Following the national standard to impart fundamental skills and knowledge, the local officials should have authority to add on or cut off courses according to the real conditions. First consider that, different parts of a country usually have their own unique cultures. One of the education's purposes is to transmit the brilliant culture that has been tested by the fire of history; the local cultural legacy is definitely something that should be transmitted from generation to generation, yet this could not be required by a common curriculum. Therefore, the local authority should set correspondent courses to perpetuate its cultural heritages. The languages of minority, for example, is of great significance for culture diversity, thus should be taught in the local school to make for the common curriculum prescribed by the central government. Moreover, with the overbalanced economic development of different regions, there inevitably formed gaps of economic strength between regions. As a result, some under-development areas may not have enough ability to offer some common courses. Such as poor villages, are in difficulties to afford a computer or biological laboratory. Thus providing students with curriculum that require advancing and expensive equipment seems unrealistic in these areas. In short, due to the regional situation, both cultural and economic, local alternatives are indispensable supplement for a common curriculum designed by the central government.

To sum up, a common core curriculum and the featured local alterations are both necessary to the country, the society and the students themselves. The same national curriculum brings an ordered education environment and ensures students' better acquirement of basic knowledge and ability, while the local features will contribute to the culture diversity and tradition preservation. An ideal education calls for a combination of common core curriculum and local supplements. Therefore the central and local government should make joint effort to promote a better education system for the children.

乒乓球爱上九月UID: 162925

文章的主题句应当强调 将各地区自主安排的[B]重要性 [/B]  和 [B]可能性[/B] 。

题目意思是说只要统一不要特色。

你的观点就要强调两者共存的重要性，对吧？

那么要支持你的观点，第一，两者是否能共存？这是一个前提问题，否则后面都是在白说。试问，如果是非此即彼的关系，你的讨论有什么意义？

第二，才是 特色的重要性 也就是你body第二段说的。注意应当结合统一来说，比如统一在某方面有缺陷的时候，特色能够如何如何。（体现结合的意思）

至于你花了巨大篇幅的BODY第一段，在我看来不必如此费力，题目也认同的，因为这不是你立论的关键点。

个人观点 仅供参考。大家都谈谈自己的观点吧。

G猫UID: 192988

想到一点说一点吧.

至于你花了巨大篇幅的BODY第一段，在我看来不必如此费力，题目也认同的，因为这不是你立论的关键点。

首先,这个观点我不同意, 如果这样说的话, 凡是我们完全认同should的题只要认同人家观点就可以了, 就不用证明了,道理就是你所说的: 题目都认同, 还有什么必要证明

G猫UID: 192988

哎呀, 我现在已经晕头转向的啦, 大家都来讨论讨论吧.
不过到目前为之,我并不觉得这样跑题, 就是还没想清楚怎么支持自己:(

乒乓球爱上九月UID: 162925

恩 我也有困惑

我刚才一直在看imong的两个专题 你看看对你有没有帮助呢

http://211.151.90.54/bbs/showthread.php?s=&threadid=201853
http://211.151.90.54/bbs/showthread.php?s=&threadid=201072

乒乓球爱上九月UID: 162925

这样的思路是不是好一点？

1。没有A不行
2。没有B不行
3。两者可以共存


再次申明 这个观点只是建议 表影响你了