issue5 猛批吧，第一次写

crazyfox3UID: 171430

题目：A nation should require all its students to study the same national curriculum until they enter college rather than allow schools in different parts of the nation to determine which academic course to offer.

作文：

when it comes to the national curriculum.the speaker conecede that a nation require all strudents to study the same academic courses that I do agree  with the view.Because this point of view not  only can built an unitive education system,but also can help students enter to the college successfully.

The national currculum make it easily when some students or some teachers transfer from one school  to  the other one.They do not need to prepare or learn something for the new academic courses , because the curriculums are same. secondly, using the national curriculum can imrove the qualit and quantity of the teaching.If every school use one crriculum,teachers can help each other from  different schools.Also , the level of education in the nation will be enhanced.

On the other hand , students are too young to choose their academic courses until they enter the  college. Most of young students do not know which courses is important and they must to learn,and which courses is optional.So,may be the students select the easy and interesting courses which  actually can not help the students gain enough knowledge that they need.

However,schools should establish several courses which are the unique courses or difficult to  other courses. This not only can allure the students from other schools,but also help students to perpare the knowledge for entering the college.

In a conclusion,I thing that schools in one nation should use the same curriculum until they enter college . Ulteriorly, based on the national course,school should also have their own course for the students to learn.  

字数太少了，怎么办啊

zhoulin00001UID: 189304

先占座
字数少可以每个观点都从正反两方面写
另外多举例子，多分析

zhoulin00001UID: 189304

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The national currculum make it easily when some students or some teachers transfer from one school to the other one.They do not need to prepare or learn something for the new academic courses , because the curriculums are same. secondly, using the national curriculum can imrove the qualit and quantity of the teaching.If every school use one crriculum,teachers can help each other from different schools.Also不能放句首 , the level of education in the nation will be enhanced.

On the other hand , students are too young to choose their academic courses until they enter the college. Most of young students do not know which courses is important and they must toto去掉 learn,and which courses is optional.So,,去掉may be->maybe the students select the easy and interesting courses which actually can not help the students gain enough knowledge that they need.

However,schools should establish several courses which are the unique courses or difficult to other courses. This not only can allure the students from other schools,but also help students to perpare the knowledge for entering the college.

In a conclusion,I thing that schools in one nation should use the same curriculum until they enter college . Ulteriorly, based on the national course,school should also have their own course for the students to learn.

感觉条理，思路都挺好，但写的比较空，另外注意标点后要加个空格，其他建议如上。
让我们共同努力把。

龙非UID: 193190

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On the other hand , students are too young to choose their academic courses until they enter the college. Most of young students do not know which courses isare important and they musthave to learn,and which courses isare optional.So,may be the students select the easy and interesting courses which actually can not help the students gain enough knowledge that they need.

However,schools should establish several个人感觉用some会好一点 courses which are the unique courses or difficultdifferent？？ to other courses. This not only can allure the students from other schools,but also help students to perpare the knowledge for entering the college.

In a conclusion,I thing that schools in one nation should use the same curriculum until they enter college . Ulteriorly, based on the national course,school should also have their own course for the students to learn.跟第一段的论点并没有对应起来

个人建议：
1）错别字，时态错误较多，应该从小处着手，同时在发贴的时候应该自己再检查一下这些小错误
2）从整体看，论据并没有很好地支持了论点，没有说服力。在文章中间已经离题，没有紧紧地围绕着自己的观点－－

I do agree with the view

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