issue57 关于书本知识和经验。都860字了，累啊！欢迎拍砖，必回拍。谢谢！

山坡羊UID: 169978

issue57 关于书本知识和经验。都860字了，累啊，欢迎拍砖，必回拍。谢谢！

题目：
Issue 57 "The depth of knowledge to be gained from books is much richer and broader than  what can be learned from direct experience."

正文：
Is the depth of knowledge gained from books much richer and broad than what can be learned from direct experience? I concede that we gain much richer knowledge from books than from direct experience under most circumstances. Nevertheless, the assertion goes too extreme, for the reason that under some circumstances direct experience can provide more abundant and profound knowledge than books do. Thus, for learning more effectively we should strike a balance between learning from books and direct experience.

On the one hand, valuable books, which involve abundant and profound knowledge written by outstanding predecessors, can give us much broader and deeper than what we gain through experiencing by ourselves, in that too much factors keep people from some of our experiences, considering the feasibility limited by the current conditions and human energy, or whether it is necessary to do so.

On the one hand, first, although human have make a great progress in many respects in modern time, we are still far from omniscient or omnipotent, so there exists some knowledge we can not experience by the technology and ability we owed. For example, while we can not go back to Tang Dynasty and learn how people in that period used to work or disport, through ample history records and literature such as poems, prose, we can depict a vivid picture of life scene of those people. Books help us know much more out of our own district and era. It remains the same when it comes to natural science field. We learn many the theories though not experiencing even experiments, such as the special theory of relativity telling us that when an object's velocity is close to that of light, time will be much slower and even stop with respect to the object. Without the knowledge of books, the profound perspective hardly occur to us during we experience daily life. And , none of us could sit in such spaceship at so a rapid speed, however, we also understand it from books. Undoubtedly, books can give us much richer knowledge which we are not able to experience. In addition, we can gain much knowledge which we can achieve from direct experience but we have no time or conditions to gain. For instance, to a person who wants to learn all the social customs in every country on the earth, although it is not so difficult to go around the world as to go back in Tang Dynasty, he still has little opportunity to do so, limited by time and money, Fortunately, books can help him to gain his knowledge. Such similar situation occurs to most of us especially in our childhood and youth. By books, we can see much broader and profoundly than before, just like standing on the giant’s shoulder.

Moreover, even if we have time and energy and money to do some things to gain more profound knowledge from direct experience, it seems not necessary to do so. For example, we can learn formulas of math and chemistry from our daily life and thinking, analyzing, but is it worthy to spending so much resources on it? Instead, we just need studying from certain books containing much wisdom accumulated by sages in all times, and can learn more profoundly and easily. In fact, books can give us more in the same time during which we experience directly. Thus, in many cases, we can gain much deeper and richer knowledge from books than from direct experience.

Acknowledging that in most cases we can learn much from books than from direct experience, we also should the indispensable role which direct experience play in learning, and under some circumstance, knowledge from experience are more richer and profound, since books, which record much brightness of human beings, however, can not involve all the knowledge we needed. First, in some realms needing more practical knowledge, direct experience seems more important, For knowledge of such fields in books are usually dogmatic and superficial. For example, we can learn much about how to riding a bicycle from practicing actually than from books. And, knowledge from direct experience seems richer and deeper to a stock broker in Wall Street, for knowledge from books can help little solve the fluctuate situation. In addition, in some areas predecessors did little or only record little in books, direct experience can make our knowledge richer and deeper. For example, researching a aboriginal tribe whose society is seldom recorded by books, the anthropologist should live with them in a proper way for some time, observing, recording, reflecting. Thus, such direct experience benefits much to rich and broad our knowledge of the tribe. Also, some knowledge in books are not profound or even incorrect, by direct experience we can gain much profound and perfect knowledge. Accordingly, in some cases, the knowledge gained from direct experience are more richer than from books.

In sum, the depth of knowledge from books is much richer and broader than that from direct experience under many but not all circumstance, yet, direct experience also play a indispensable role in human learning. Thus, we should well utilize both the two important knowledge resources to learn more effectively.

请大家多提意见吧。谢谢！

dvdwormUID: 168213

正文：
Is the depth of knowledge gained from books much richer and broad（改为broader） than what can be learned from direct experience? I concede that we gain much richer knowledge from books than from direct experience under most circumstances. Nevertheless, the assertion goes too extreme, for the reason that under some circumstances direct experience can provide more abundant and profound knowledge than books do. Thus, for learning more effectively we should strike a balance between learning from books and direct experience.

On the one hand, valuable books, which involve abundant and profound knowledge written by outstanding predecessors, can give us much broader and deeper （缺knowledge这个词吧）than what we gain through experiencing by ourselves, in that too much factors keep people from some of our experiences, considering the feasibility limited by the current conditions and human energy, or whether it is necessary to do so. （这部分我不太明白，感觉你没说清楚）

On the one hand, first（改为firstly）, although human have make（改为made） a great progress in many respects in modern time, we are still far from omniscient or omnipotent, so there exists some knowledge we can not experience by the technology and ability we owed. For example, while we can not go back to Tang Dynasty and learn how people in that period used to work or disport, through ample history records and literature such as poems, prose, we can depict a vivid picture of life scene of those people. Books help us know much more out of our own district and era. It remains the same when it comes to natural science field. We learn many the theories though not experiencing even experiments, such as the special theory of relativity telling us that when an object's velocity is close to that of light, time will be much slower and even stop with respect to the object. Without the knowledge of books, the profound perspective hardly occur to us during we experience daily life. And , none of us could sit in such spaceship at so（改为such） a rapid speed, however, we also understand it from books. Undoubtedly, books can give us much richer knowledge which we are not able to experience. In addition, we can gain much knowledge which we can achieve from direct experience but we have no time or conditions to gain. For instance, to a person who wants to learn all the social customs in every country on the earth, although it is not so difficult to go around the world as to go back in Tang Dynasty, he still has little opportunity to do so, limited by time and money, Fortunately, books can help him to gain his knowledge. Such similar situation occurs to most of us especially in our childhood and youth. By books, we can see much broader and profoundly than before, just like standing on the giant’s shoulder.

Moreover, even if we have time and energy and money to do some things to gain more profound knowledge from direct experience, it seems not necessary to do so. For example, we can learn formulas of math and chemistry from our daily life and thinking, analyzing, but is it worthy to spending so much resources on it? Instead, we just need studying from certain books containing much wisdom accumulated by sages in all times, and can learn more profoundly and easily. In fact, books can give us more in the same time during which we experience directly. Thus, in many cases, we can gain much deeper and richer knowledge from books than from direct experience.

Acknowledging that in most cases we can learn much from books than from direct experience, we also should （缺词吧？）the indispensable role which direct experience play in learning, and under some circumstance, knowledge from experience are more richer and profound（改为profounder吧？平行结构）, since books, which record much brightness of human beings, however, can not involve all the knowledge we needed.（这一句太长有点乱，试着拆开说是不是更好一点） First（改为Firstly）, in some realms needing（改为need,动名词不能单独做谓语吧） more practical knowledge, direct experience seems more important, For （改为for ,小错误）knowledge of such fields in books are usually dogmatic and superficial. For example, we can learn much about how to riding a bicycle from practicing actually than from books. And, knowledge from direct experience seems richer and deeper to a stock broker in Wall Street, for knowledge from books can help little solve the fluctuate situation. In addition, in some areas predecessors did little or only record little in books, direct experience can make our knowledge richer and deeper. For example, researching a aboriginal tribe whose society is seldom recorded by books, the anthropologist should live with them in a proper way for some time, observing, recording, reflecting. Thus, such direct experience benefits much to rich and broad our knowledge of the tribe. Also, some knowledge in books are not profound or even incorrect, by direct experience we can gain much profound and perfect knowledge. Accordingly, in some cases, the knowledge gained from direct experience are（前面是knowledge,所以应改为is） more richer than from books.

In sum, the depth of knowledge from books is much richer and broader than that from direct experience under many but not all circumstance, yet, direct experience also play（前面是experience,所以应改为plays） a indispensable role in human learning. Thus, we should well utilize both the two important knowledge resources to learn more effectively.

逻辑和思想都表达的不错，但是语法出现了不少小错误，有个别句子写的不太好懂，在语言上再下点工夫吧，另外你写的挺长（有时为了说明一个问题举了好几个例子，但是有些例子似乎不需要），考试时好像不需要也没时间写这样长。欢迎改我的文章。

dvdwormUID: 168213

看到了你想改作文时间的贴子我觉得从你这篇文章反映的水平来看我觉得改的必要性不大，另外T是比较简单的，你不必太担心。

山坡羊UID: 169978

谢谢！可能得删例子了，正改你的，呵呵

山坡羊UID: 169978

谢谢！刚刚那条信息我们几乎同时发，hoho

snowyfxUID: 189264

正文：
Is the depth of knowledge gained from books much richer and broad than what can be learned from direct experience? I concede that we gain much richer knowledge from books than from direct experience under most circumstances. Nevertheless, the assertion goes too extreme, for the reason that under some circumstances direct experience can provide more abundant and profound knowledge than books do. Thus, for learning[to learn] more effectively we should strike a balance between learning from books and direct experience.

On the one hand, valuable books, which involve abundant and profound knowledge written by outstanding predecessors, can give us much broader and deeper[knowledge] than what we gain through experiencing by ourselves, in that too much factors keep people from some of our experiences, considering the feasibility limited by the current conditions and human energy, or whether it is necessary to do so. [这段在这有点别扭，可以不要，如果内容要的话，可以穿到下面段中去]

On the one[other] hand, first, although human have make a great progress in many respects in modern time, we are still far from omniscient or omnipotent, so there exists some knowledge we can not experience by the technology and ability we owed[owned]. For example, while we can not go back to Tang Dynasty and learn how people in that period used to work or disport, through ample history records and literature such as poems, prose, we can depict a vivid picture of life scene of those people. Books help us know much more out of our own district and era. It remains the same when it comes to natural science field. We learn many the theories though not experiencing even experiments, such as the special theory of relativity telling us that when an object's velocity is close to that of light, time will be much slower and even stop with respect to the object. Without the knowledge of books, the profound perspective hardly occur to us during we[our] experience daily life. And , none of us could sit in such spaceship at so a rapid speed, however, we also understand it from books. Undoubtedly, books can give us much richer knowledge which we are not able to experience. In addition, we can gain much knowledge which we can achieve from direct experience but we have no time or conditions to gain. For instance, to a person who wants to learn all the social customs in every country on the earth, although it is not so difficult to go around the world as to go back in Tang Dynasty, he still has little opportunity to do so, limited by time and money, Fortunately, books can help him to gain his knowledge. Such similar situation occurs to most of us especially in our childhood and youth. By books, we can see much broader and profoundly than before, just like standing on the giant’s shoulder. [例子都不错，如果保留的话，每个都要精简点]

Moreover, even if we have time and energy and money to do some things to gain more profound knowledge from direct experience, it seems not necessary to do so. For example, we can learn formulas of math and chemistry from our daily life and thinking, analyzing, but is it worthy to spending so much resources on it? [为什么不值得做没有作充分的证明]Instead, we just need studying from certain books containing much wisdom accumulated by sages in all times, and can learn more profoundly and easily. In fact, books can give us more in the same time during which we experience directly. Thus, in many cases, we can gain much deeper and richer knowledge from books than from direct experience.[这段与上段相比就略显单薄了]

Acknowledging that in most cases we can learn much from books than from direct experience, we also should the indispensable role which direct experience play in learning[we should also admit that direct experience play an indispensable role in our learning], and under some circumstance, knowledge from experience are [more去掉] richer and [加在这more]profound, since books, which record much brightness of human beings, however, can not involve all the knowledge we needed. First, in some realms needing more practical knowledge, direct experience seems more important, [For knowledge of such fields in books改为 while knowledge from books in such fields] are usually dogmatic and superficial. For example, we can learn much about how to riding[ride] a bicycle from practicing actually than from books. And, knowledge from direct experience seems richer and deeper to a stock broker in Wall Street, for knowledge from books can help little solve the fluctuate [fluctuant] situation. In addition, in some areas predecessors did little or only record little in books, direct experience can make our knowledge [richer and deeper用得有点多呀]. For example, researching a aboriginal tribe whose society is seldom recorded by books, the anthropologist should live with them in a proper way for some time, observing, recording, reflecting. Thus, such direct experience benefits much to rich and broad our knowledge of the tribe. Also, some knowledge in books are not profound or even incorrect, by direct experience we can gain much profound and perfect knowledge. Accordingly, in some cases, the knowledge gained from direct experience are more[要去掉了] richer than from books.

In sum, the depth of knowledge from books is much richer and broader than that from direct experience under many but not all circumstance[加s], yet, direct experience also play a indispensable role in human learning. Thus, we should well utilize both the two important knowledge resources to learn more effectively.
[1 段落划分上不太清晰，
2 例子都很不错，要讲的再简练点就更好了，
3 思路上好像还有点问题]
赞一个！写出这么多，真得很不易呀。我是怎么也写不出这么多阿。

snowyfxUID: 189264

正文：
Is the depth of knowledge gained from books much richer and broad than what can be learned from direct experience? I concede that we gain much richer knowledge from books than from direct experience under most circumstances. Nevertheless, the assertion goes too extreme, for the reason that under some circumstances direct experience can provide more abundant and profound knowledge than books do. Thus, for learning[to learn] more effectively we should strike a balance between learning from books and direct experience.

On the one hand, valuable books, which involve abundant and profound knowledge written by outstanding predecessors, can give us much broader and deeper[knowledge] than what we gain through experiencing by ourselves, in that too much factors keep people from some of our experiences, considering the feasibility limited by the current conditions and human energy, or whether it is necessary to do so. [这段在这有点别扭，可以不要，如果内容要的话，可以穿到下面段中去]

On the one[other] hand, first, although human have make a great progress in many respects in modern time, we are still far from omniscient or omnipotent, so there exists some knowledge we can not experience by the technology and ability we owed[owned]. For example, while we can not go back to Tang Dynasty and learn how people in that period used to work or disport, through ample history records and literature such as poems, prose, we can depict a vivid picture of life scene of those people. Books help us know much more out of our own district and era. It remains the same when it comes to natural science field. We learn many the theories though not experiencing even experiments, such as the special theory of relativity telling us that when an object's velocity is close to that of light, time will be much slower and even stop with respect to the object. Without the knowledge of books, the profound perspective hardly occur to us during we[our] experience daily life. And , none of us could sit in such spaceship at so a rapid speed, however, we also understand it from books. Undoubtedly, books can give us much richer knowledge which we are not able to experience. In addition, we can gain much knowledge which we can achieve from direct experience but we have no time or conditions to gain. For instance, to a person who wants to learn all the social customs in every country on the earth, although it is not so difficult to go around the world as to go back in Tang Dynasty, he still has little opportunity to do so, limited by time and money, Fortunately, books can help him to gain his knowledge. Such similar situation occurs to most of us especially in our childhood and youth. By books, we can see much broader and profoundly than before, just like standing on the giant’s shoulder. [例子都不错，如果保留的话，每个都要精简点]

Moreover, even if we have time and energy and money to do some things to gain more profound knowledge from direct experience, it seems not necessary to do so. For example, we can learn formulas of math and chemistry from our daily life and thinking, analyzing, but is it worthy to spending so much resources on it? [为什么不值得做没有作充分的证明]Instead, we just need studying from certain books containing much wisdom accumulated by sages in all times, and can learn more profoundly and easily. In fact, books can give us more in the same time during which we experience directly. Thus, in many cases, we can gain much deeper and richer knowledge from books than from direct experience.[这段与上段相比就略显单薄了]

Acknowledging that in most cases we can learn much from books than from direct experience, we also should the indispensable role which direct experience play in learning[we should also admit that direct experience play an indispensable role in our learning], and under some circumstance, knowledge from experience are [more去掉] richer and [加在这more]profound, since books, which record much brightness of human beings, however, can not involve all the knowledge we needed. First, in some realms needing more practical knowledge, direct experience seems more important, [For knowledge of such fields in books改为 while knowledge from books in such fields] are usually dogmatic and superficial. For example, we can learn much about how to riding[ride] a bicycle from practicing actually than from books. And, knowledge from direct experience seems richer and deeper to a stock broker in Wall Street, for knowledge from books can help little solve the fluctuate [fluctuant] situation. In addition, in some areas predecessors did little or only record little in books, direct experience can make our knowledge [richer and deeper用得有点多呀]. For example, researching a aboriginal tribe whose society is seldom recorded by books, the anthropologist should live with them in a proper way for some time, observing, recording, reflecting. Thus, such direct experience benefits much to rich and broad our knowledge of the tribe. Also, some knowledge in books are not profound or even incorrect, by direct experience we can gain much profound and perfect knowledge. Accordingly, in some cases, the knowledge gained from direct experience are more[要去掉了] richer than from books.

In sum, the depth of knowledge from books is much richer and broader than that from direct experience under many but not all circumstance[加s], yet, direct experience also play a indispensable role in human learning. Thus, we should well utilize both the two important knowledge resources to learn more effectively.
[1 段落划分上不太清晰，
2 例子都很不错，要讲的再简练点就更好了，
3 思路上好像还有点问题]
赞一个！写出这么多，真的很不易呀。我是怎么也写不出这么多阿。

山坡羊UID: 169978

非常感谢snowfx,你的意见和鼓励啊！
等着你的文章！

dengfuUID: 195080

You have such a skilled writing in mandarin. Now this skill is gradually apprearing after these days' practice. So nice to see such a promising improvement.

山坡羊UID: 169978

thanks a lot!