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zhoulin00001UID: 189304

题目
101The following appeared in a memo from the president of a company that makes breakfast cereals.
"In a recent study, subjects who ate soybeans at least five times per week had significantly lower cholesterol levels than subjects who ate no soy products. By fortifying our Wheat-O cereal with soy protein, we can increase sales by appealing to additional consumers who are concerned about their health. This new version of Wheat-O should increase company profits and, at the same time, improve the health of our customers


In this argument, the arguer recommends that the new version of Wheat-O should increase company profits, at the same time, improve the health of their customers. At first glance, this argument seems very specific and convincing. A careful examination of it, however, would reveal how groundless it is.
Firstly, the mere fact that people who ate soybean at least five times per week had significantly lower cholesterol levels than subjects who ate no soy products is insufficient evidence to conclude that soy products can help lower the cholesterol level. Since it is no evidence show that the subjects in the study are chose randomly, it is quite possible that soy products have high cholesterol content, the people have the low cholesterol levels are people are young and health, they are not afraid of the high cholesterol food, while people ate no soy products are olds or poor healthy peoples, they do not eat soy products just because its high cholesterol content.  
Secondly, grant that soy can lower the cholesterol levels, it does not necessarily follow that the company will increase profits. First, people concern their health do not necessarily choose soy product as their health food, they might choose sports to make them more healthy. Besides, there may be a lot of other companies also producing soy products, their products may cater the custom’s tastes and customs like their food better. Furthermore too many companies must lead to serious competition, which necessarily cause the decrease of price. All of these can cause us make no profits, even bankrupt.
Finally, even if people like our soy products and we increase our profits dramatically, there is no reason to say that our customers’ health standard will be improved. Cholesterol levels are not the sole measurement of health. There so many other factors as the standard of health, we can not use one factor to represent the all.  
To sum up, the argument is not well reasoning and lack credibility because the evidence cited in the analysis does not lead to strong support to what the arguer maintains. To make the argument more convincing, the arguer would have to provide more evidence to prove that soy product do help lower the cholesterol levels and customs likes our products exclusively. Additionally, it would be essential for the arguer to make an effective and representative survey to support the argument

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tottiUID: 184291

In this argument, the arguer recommends that the new version of Wheat-O should increase company profits, at the same time, improve the health of their customers. At first glance, this argument seems very specific and convincing. A careful examination of it, however, would reveal how groundless it is. 挺好的


Firstly, the mere fact that people who ate soybean at least five times per week had significantly lower cholesterol levels than subjects who ate no soy products is insufficient evidence去掉 to conclude that soy products can help lower the cholesterol level. [第一句会不会感觉主语太长? 或者: it is insufficient to conclude that … only because of the mere fact that… 当然这样就和下面的句式重复了,斟酌一下,我觉得中心句还是简练好点] Since it is no evidence show that the subjects in the study are chosechosen randomly, it is quite possible 有点句式重复,干脆用Perhapsthat soy products have high cholesterol content, the people have the low cholesterol levels are people are young and health, they are not afraid of 或not take it into account the high cholesterol food, while people ate no soy products are olds or poor healthy peoples, they do not eat soy products just because its high cholesterol content.
Secondly, grant that soy can lower the cholesterol levels, it does not necessarily follow that the company will increase profits. First, people concern their health do not necessarily choose soy product as their health food, they might choose sports to make them more healthy. healthier Besides, there may be a lot of other companies also producing soy products, their whoseproducts may cater cater for/to 不及物动词the custom’s tastes and customs like their food better. Furthermore too many companies must lead to serious competition, which necessarilymay 不一定价格必然下降,而是利润下降 cause the decrease of price. All of these can cause us make no profits, even bankrupt. 论证充分

Finally, even if people like our soy products and we increase our profits dramatically, there is no reason to say that our customers’ health standard will be improved. Cholesterol levels are not the sole measurement of health. There so many other factors 能随便举出几点更好vitamin等  as the standard of health, we can not use one factor to represent the all.
To sum up, the argument is not well reasoning and lack credibility because the evidence cited in the analysis does not lead to strong support to what the arguer maintains. To make the argument more convincing, the arguer would have to provide more evidence to prove that soy product do help lower the cholesterol levels and customs likes our products exclusively. Additionally, it would be essential for the arguer to make an effective and representative survey to support the argument

论证的层次感很强,递进式很紧凑,无需多少改动啦,保持就好~

上次你问调查样本算不算主要攻击问题,我觉得很重要呀.看猴哥孙远以及网络上的都算一大类错误的.
我觉得一篇argument至少有下面4种错误中的2个: 1)调查样本不全面回应者与全体者差别;  2) 忽略其他原因,只认一个理,无证据表明这个论点: 3) 全国推某个地区或某地推全国 4) 类比错误把A措施借鉴到
B

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In this argument, the arguer recommends that the new version of Wheat-O should（） increase company profits, at the same time, improve the health of their customers. At first glance, this argument seems very specific and convincing. A careful examination of it, however, would reveal how groundless it is.
Firstly, the mere fact that people who ate soybean at least five times per week had significantly lower cholesterol levels than subjects who ate no soy products is （）insufficient evidence to conclude that soy products can help lower the cholesterol level( ). Since it is no evidence show that the subjects in the study are chose randomly, it is quite possible that soy products have high cholesterol content, the people have the low cholesterol levels are people are young and health, they are not afraid of the high cholesterol food, while people ate no soy products are olds or poor healthy peoples, they do not eat soy products just because its high cholesterol content. 应说明作者可能故意选择那些对其有利的例子
Secondly, grant that soy can lower the cholesterol levels, it does not necessarily follow that the company will increase profits. First, people concern their health do not necessarily choose soy product as their health food, they might choose sports to make them more healthy. Besides, there may be a lot of other companies also producing soy products, their products may cater （to）the custom’s tastes and customs like their food better（prefer their product）. Furthermore too many companies must lead to serious competition, which necessarily cause the decrease of price. All of these can cause us make（去掉us make） no profits, even bankrupt.
Finally, even if people like our soy products and we increase our profits dramatically, there is no reason to say that our customers’ health standard will be improved. Cholesterol levels are not the sole measurement of health. There so many other factors as the standard of health, we can not use one factor to represent the all.（这段要放在前一段之前）.
To sum up, the argument is not well reasoning（reasoned） and lack credibility because (since) the evidence cited in the analysis does not lead to( lend)  strong support to what the arguer maintains. To make the argument more convincing, the arguer would have to provide more evidence to prove that soy product do help lower the cholesterol levels and customs likes our products exclusively. Additionally, it would be essential for the arguer to make an effective and representative survey to support the argument.
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