augument 11 21号就考了 请拍砖

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11The following appeared in a memo from the mayor of the town of West Egg.

"Two years ago, our consultants predicted that West Egg's landfill, which is used for garbage disposal, would be completely filled within five years. During the past two years, however, town residents have been recycling twice as much aluminum and paper as they did in previous years. Next month the amount of material recycled should further increase, since charges for garbage pickup will double. Furthermore, over ninety percent of the respondents to a recent survey said that they would do more recycling in the future. Because of our residents' strong commitment to recycling, the available space in our landfill should last for considerably longer than predicted."

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The arguer claims that the available space in West Egg’s landfill should last for considerably longer than predicted because the town’s ability of recycling materials improves greatly and the residents have strong commitment to recycling. At first glance, the argument seems well reasoned, but in my point of view, the reasoning has several problems and the facts the author bases on for his conclusion are also doubtful. So the conclusion is unconvincing.

First, the fact that West Egg’s residents have been recycling twice as much aluminum and paper as they did last year can hardly be effective evidence to conclude that the town’s general ability of recycling materials have improved too. We know that aluminum and paper are important materials in the field of recycling because among all recycled materials these two things may stand a big part in quantity. But there are many other materials that we are able to recycle nowadays, such as plastic and copper, so aluminum and paper may not be all that people recycle in West Egg. Therefore the fact that the ability of recycling aluminum and paper has improved, as the author mentioned in the memo, cannot guarantee the improvement in general recycling ability of West Egg, although I admit that it is possible.

In addition, admitting the improvement in West Egg’s ability to recycle aluminum and paper during last year, we are nevertheless not sure if for a few following years this ability will improve too because there is no evidence to show that. A long time improvement is only a tendency rather than a well-proved conclusion.

The survey that the author mentioned in the memo is even more of a problem, because it is not sufficiently representative of all the residents in West Egg. In the survey, over ninety percent of the respondents said they would do more recycling in the future. The problem is that the survey fails to indicate what portion of the people surveyed actually responded; it is entirely possible that most people who responded were responsible citizens willing to do more recycling, and that a lot of the people surveyed who are not willing to do more recycling simply have not even responded. If this possibility is unfortunately the case, residents’ commitment to recycling is only a false appearance.  

In sum, I must say that the author’s conclusion about the service life of West Egg’s landfill is not convincing. As mentioned in the memo, the consultants’ prediction of the 5-years service life of West Egg’s landfill two years ago seems plausible because these experts may have already taken into account the improvement that is very likely to happen in the future. Anyway, to assess the service life of the landfill, still we lack a lot of specific information; we need more thorough investigation about West Egg’s actual ability of recycling materials as well as the residents’ true attitude toward recycling.

dragonflyljUID: 185331

头尾太长。。。。。头上那个at first glance ..就可以不要了，直接表示作者文章有错。
尾巴，提一点建议就结束。不要写好多好多。。。

中间，第二段短了。。没有具体理由比如工厂垃圾，不可回收垃圾，居民人口变多，具体点
少了个重要错误，就是那个钱收多了不能推出垃圾回收升高。
居民们还是会去倒垃圾的。而且收钱不一定就是按斤收，也许按次数，根本不影响垃圾回收

body 第1，3段还不错,你想想把尾巴的字数放到第二段多好！

欢迎拍砖

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谢谢你的意见！

dragonflyljUID: 185331

不用：）你就要考试拉，把每题的漏洞最好过一下，这样考试起来，中间就容易写多，头尾就容易短而精。