issue26 historic building and modern development

jorgeUID: 108878

Issue 26"Most people would agree that buildings represent a valuable record of any society's past, but controversy arises when old buildings stand on ground that modern planners feel could be better used for modern purposes. In such situations, modern development should be given precedence over the preservation of historic buildings so that contemporary needs can be served."


Along with the prosperity of modern society, people always come into contact with the conundrum of how to deal with the old buildings when they are against the new development of the city. Some people acclaim that people should give the precedence to modern development while others hold their attitudes that people should preserve the historic buildings. As far as I concerned, I believe that historic buildings are so important that people should keep them the first whatever situation is. People can not destroy them when they reschedule their new city plans.

In the first place, historic buildings are the witness of the history; hence, people should admire them just like their ancestors. When one generation turns to the next generation, historic buildings are always standing at the same places. They serve as like the fathers of our human beings, watching and caring us, witnessing the change of our society. People do not to look so far in China, even in my home town, a small and beautiful city; they would find these evidences of past history.  Through a role of old houses in west city which are the center of a salt market, however they are very small and in poor situation, people could memory the past prosperity. Through the theater in the east part of the city and these black and while walls, people will know that it is the place, bringing a lot happy and fun to people’s grandmother and fathers. Through the broken floor in a temple, people will never forget that nation defense towards invaders. These all illustrate that historic buildings witness the history of our society.

In the second place, another essential factor why people should consider conserving these historic buildings is that if once these buildings are destroyed, people would never see them again; even more, people will never to restore these buildings if they are destroyed. A case in point is the Culture Revolution in China. During the movement, Chinese government releases one rule that all old things should be destroyed including these historic buildings. From then on, many precious historic buildings are ruled out. When this movement is over, people realized that they will never see his or her familiar temples again, and they find that they are losing something that they never could restore. Temples are gone, even special old style homes are changed into the regulation structure. This illustration shows that our people have made such mistakes and they have regretted for what they have done; people should preserve these historic buildings.

However, people should realize that any rule is not based on the constant regulation. Historic buildings are definitely important, but people have to make a good select of these buildings or to make some adjustments to fit with the new city development. For example, when people have to build a modern entertainment center in an old historic building which turns to be an old movie theater and many people are used to appreciate his place. In this situation, what about the planner to make the modification toward this old theater? They could enhance the size or the height, but hold the previous appearance. This method not only conserves the old building, but also satisfies the modern necessary amusement center.

To conclude, historic buildings are the precious possessions bestowed by our ancestors and people should put them into first in any condition and circumstance. But in order to follow the development, people can make some adjustment so that these buildings can fit the new city as well. Following this policy, the new city will become the most beautiful without losing the precious culture.

so猫UID: 148633

占位置
等偶自己搞定自己的那篇写完了上来改~~
兔兔表着急的说~

victoriazhizhiUID: 163135

Along with the prosperity of modern society, people always come into contact with the conundrum of how to deal with the old buildings when they are against the new development of the city. Some people acclaim 欢呼？claim that people should give the precedence to modern development while others hold their attitudes that people should preserve the historic buildings. As far as I am concerned, I believe that historic buildings are so important that people should keep them the first keep them the first不顺 whatever the situation is.绝对了，whatever the situation is? 还是不要把话说的这么极端 People can not destroy them when they reschedule their new city plans.前面还whatever呢后面就有条件了，可见你上句说过头了

In the first place, historic buildings are the witness of the history; hence, people should admire them just like their ancestors.又夸张了吧，古迹是历史的见证，所以要仰慕祖先一般？ When one generation turns to the next generation, historic buildings are always standing at the same places. They serve as like as还是like？选一个 the fathers of our human beings, watching and caring us, witnessing the change of our society. People do not to to去了 look so far in China, even in my home town, a small and beautiful city; they would find these evidences of past history. Through a role of old houses in west city which are
the center of a salt market, however they are very small and in poor situation, people could memory the past prosperity.这句啥意思？开头a role of罗嗦，however又转的什么？怎么又very small,in poor situation?很奇怪一句，兔子解释一下 Through the theater in the east part of the city and these black and while walls, people will know that it is the place, bringing a lot happy and fun to people’s grandmother and fathers. it is the place that brought...强调句好点Through the broken floor in a temple, people will never forget that nation defense towards invaders.宾从的谓语哪里去了？ These all illustrate that historic buildings witness the history of our society.说是历史的见证不错，强调一下他的历史意义和保留的价值，开头那个should admire像祖先一样有点夸张，展开的第一句话因为stand那里看着我们长大，有些牵强了，这么说周围的东东们都看着我们长大了呢，是不是为了要表达你那个“像父亲/祖先一样”的观点才这么讲？觉得TS有些问题了影响你后面的展开，而且你的例子呼呼的什么east,west,都说的是一个小地方的各个方面，未免有些不典型，过于特殊

In the second place, another essential factor why people should consider conserving these historic buildings is that if once these buildings are destroyed, people would never see them again; even more, people will never to 莫非你系统自动往外蹦to？ restore these buildings if they are destroyed. A case in point is the Culture Revolution in China. During the movement, Chinese government releases 过去式,后面陈述这个例子都要过去式，你看看你一会are一会will的。粗心，kick一个 one rule that all old things should be destroyed including these historic buildings. From then on, many precious historic buildings are ruled out. When this movement is over, people realized that they will never see his or her their，这个his or her... familiar temples again, and they find that they are losing something that they never could restore. Temples are gone, even special old style homes are changed into the regulation structure. This illustration shows that our people have made such mistakes and they have regretted for what they have done; people should preserve these historic buildings.貌似你很稀饭用分号，我感觉分号前后的句子应该是对比了类比了或者什么有联系的，你的分号后是另一个意思拉。这段观点不错，不过，毁灭古迹就不能修复的例子很多啊，比如塔立班炸的卡米杨大佛世界谴责，中国为了保存故宫实行大规模的细致的修复，埃及阿斯旺水坝为了保留古迹聘请世界各地专家进行遗址云云，这个文化大革命的例子虽然也可以，但是你说的有些模糊，不够具体，只说temples没了人们regret云云，也没说有什么名胜估计毁坏了多大历史损失了什么的，人们怎么痛心疾首。说服力不够。而且题目要说和当代发展了什么满足需求的矛盾，那个文化大革命就四个动乱嘛，其实卡米杨大佛估计也不恰当。

However, people should realize that any rule is not based on the constant regulation.没什么一成不变，为虾米不说no rule(晕读着还别扭)而要any rule is not这么疙疙瘩瘩 Historic buildings are definitely important, but people have to make a good select selection of these buildings or to to可去 make some adjustments to fit with the new city development. For example, when people have to build a modern entertainment center in an old historic building which turns used to be an old movie theater and many people are used to appreciate his place.and many people后半句没明白，这句when引一从句，主句呢？ In this situation, what about the planner to make the modification toward this old theater? what about the planner to...病句They could enhance the size or the height, but hold the previous appearance. This method not only conserves the old building, but also satisfies the modern necessary amusement center. 这段的作用不明显例子不典型

To conclude, historic buildings are the precious possessions bestowed by our ancestors and people should put them into first in any 又any了，后面又条件 condition and circumstance. But in order to follow the development, people can make some adjustment so that these buildings can fit the new city as well. Following this policy, the new city will become the mostmost最高级没有范围 beautiful without losing the precious culture.

1.严正批评，及其粗心！一堆小错误！kick！ :mad:
2.B1的TS有些奇怪，使得后面的展开受到了影响，而且从你的展开看也没有很好的扣了TS，建议修改TS。B2的例子不太好，而且叙述的罗里八嗦的，呵呵。B3作用不明显，对加强你的观点使不上劲，为了严整你可以让步，说也不是什么情况都一定要保存等等，因为时代是向前发展的云云，说那个寻求平衡了两不误了什么的最后呼吁一下下就可以，放在这段有些多了，而且举例过于特殊，那要是不能接着利用呢？怎么平衡？

还有一个问题，一些语句上总是有罗嗦的感觉，具体不指了读一下就发现。

偶考T时候你和genie都热心帮助，感激一个。兔子继续加油呢！一起努力 :p

BTW，惊讶发现3点了噢，饿死我了，要吃烤兔子！ :o

so猫UID: 148633

Issue 26"Most people would agree that buildings represent a valuable record of any society's past, but controversy arises when old buildings stand on ground that modern planners feel could be better used for modern purposes. In such situations, modern development should be given precedence over the preservation of historic buildings so that contemporary needs can be served."


Along with the prosperity of modern society, people always come into contact with the conundrum of how to deal with the old buildings when they are against the new development of the city. Some people acclaim that people should give the precedence to modern development while others hold their attitudes that people should preserve the historic buildings. As far as I 是不是少了个am？ concerned, I believe that historic buildings are so important that people should keep them the first whatever situation is. People can not destroy them when they reschedule their new city plans. 强烈顶 这种开头我喜欢 可惜自己不会写

In the first place, historic buildings are the witness of the history; hence,这么快就hence了啊 总觉得这个词语要说说说说一堆以后再用的咧 呵呵people should admire them just like their ancestors. When one generation turns to the next generation, historic buildings are always standing at the same places. They serve as likeas like一起用 汗一个 the fathers of our human beings, watching and caring us, witnessing the change of our society. People do not to look so far in China,这个话是虾米意思？？？ even in my home town, a small and beautiful city; they would find these evidences of past history. Through a role of old houses in west city which are the center of a salt market, however they are very small and in poor situation, people could memory the past prosperity. Through the theater in the east part of the city and these black and while walls, people will know that it is the place, bringing a lot happy and fun to people’s grandmother and fathers. Through the broken floor in a temple, people will never forget that nation defense towards invaders. 这些乱七八糟的方位词彻底把我弄郁闷了~为什么不说简单点呢 或者 换个我们熟悉的地方嘛 而且说实在的 说了那么半天我没发现你提到了什么古建筑These all illustrate that historic buildings witness the history of our society.
来找个最大的毛病 就是觉得例子有问题 说了半天不知道为什么你说古建筑是城市的见证者 哪见证了啊 就躺那就算见证了 总得有些关于历史的东西吧 比如 哪个建筑比较洋化证明这里以前是租界什么的
这些都喵 怎么能就说是见证人了呢

In the second place, another essential factor why people should consider conserving these historic buildings is that if once these buildings are destroyed, people would never see them again; even more, people will never to restore these buildings if they are destroyed.这个逻辑 你这么说好奇怪啊~~~要保护 因为破坏了就不能再修了 感觉这里面不是因果关系吧 那还有很多东西坏了也不能用了 那你怎么不保护呢 你的旧牙刷坏了就不能要了 那你怎么不当宝贝一样的供着呢~ A case in point is the Culture Revolution in China. During the movement, Chinese government releases one rule that all old things should be destroyed including these historic buildings. From then on, many precious historic buildings are ruled out. When this movement is over, people realized that they will never see his or her familiar temples again, and they find that they are losing something that they never could restore. Temples are gone, even special old style homes are changed into the regulation structure. This illustration shows that our people have made such mistakes and they have regretted for what they have done; people should preserve these historic buildings.
明白你的意思啦 第一个body的意思是说 这个东西有价值， 第二个body说这个东西没了就没了
相当于从两方面论证
不过建议这个TS弄成说 这些东西很脆弱 而且很珍贵 所以需要保护 那个TS里的逻辑实在是太奇怪了
至于例证 总觉得好象平淡了一点 没什么震撼 而且感觉这个例子第一段第二段都能用嘛

However, people should realize that any rule is not based on the constant regulation. Historic buildings are definitely important, but people have to make a good select of these buildings or to make some adjustments to fit with the new city development. For example, when people have to build a modern entertainment center in an old historic building which turns to be an old movie theater and many people are used to appreciate his place. In this situation, what about the planner to make the modification toward this old theater? They could enhance the size or the height, but hold the previous appearance. This method not only conserves the old building, but also satisfies the modern necessary amusement center.
发现兔兔的例子总是太过于细节化 少了总结的东西
感觉有点小眉小眼的不够大气
人要根据你这issue写argu 肯定就说你这例子不typical

To conclude, historic buildings are the precious possessions bestowed by our ancestors and people should put them into first in any condition and circumstance. But in order to follow the development, people can make some adjustment so that these buildings can fit the new city as well. Following this policy, the new city will become the most beautiful without losing the precious culture.
中规中矩的一篇文章 没啥波澜起伏的地方 偶说实话兔兔表打我
这样发展下去再加强一下论证4分是肯定没问题的 5分我不好说
总体感觉 第三段的让步写得比前两个好
前两个本来是想分层次的 但是例子太单薄了
但是我觉得1个珍贵1个脆弱的角度很不错
兔兔再想办法修饰下 呵呵~~~~
加油加油加油~~~~~

快早上5点了 我却是再没力气了
兔兔表怪我哈

鬼谷子UID: 159645

兔子又写了啊，竟然12：00你还在写作文
努力啊
占一个
晚上给你改

jorgeUID: 108878

兔兔怎么舍得打so猫的说。:D

谢谢. :p

jorgeUID: 108878

支支. 忘记了issue 是45分钟了。:p

jorgeUID: 108878

有劳鬼鬼了。:)

victoriazhizhiUID: 163135

最初由 jorge 发布
[B]支支. 忘记了issue 是45分钟了。:p [/B]

虾米？我不该批评你粗心么？还是说你当成阿狗用了30分钟写的？ :eek:
服死了。。。。无语
破兔子，害人。看的累死了，头晕眼花的。再kick一次 :mad:

jorgeUID: 108878

:mad: 什么叫当作阿狗啊。

victoriazhizhiUID: 163135

我说你是不是把issue的时间当成argu那么多 用了30分钟写的？

jorgeUID: 108878

so 猫评的很不错 :p 当时确实实在连想一下例子的时间都很紧.哎,这个怎么克服的说.

jorgeUID: 108878

最初由 victoriazhizhi 发布
[B]我说你是不是把issue的时间当成argu那么多 用了30分钟写的？ [/B]

:(  恩.

乒乓球爱上九月UID: 162925

最初由 jorge 发布
[B]:(  恩. [/B]

:eek: 我说你上次给我看得issue为什么37分钟呢，汗死。



2005年度乒乓球崇拜人物排行榜首位: Jorge

so猫UID: 148633

最初由 jorge 发布
[B]so 猫评的很不错 :p 当时确实实在连想一下例子的时间都很紧.哎,这个怎么克服的说. [/B]

这个问题 偶也在郁闷当中
偶的做法是把具体的例子弄到一块狂用排比给它列出来
但是说实话 排比不是那么好写的
那种中规中矩的 take sth for an instance 或者for supporting example sth could be referred (mentioned) that 怎么怎么样
但是酱紫好象举出的例子要非常的persuasive
一般就是高人牛人怎么样之类的
偶是刻意不要自己酱紫写 除非赶时间或者没办法

但是有一点是肯定D
要找那些很typical的来写
比如你文章里面的那两个例子就肯定不行

呵呵 一起想办法来着
加油哈 兔兔