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legendhfwangUID: 191674

Issue 4
No field of study can advance significantly unless outsiders bring their knowledge and experience to that field of study.
1.        内行受到过专门训练，尤其是现在这个分工更加明确的时代。
2.        知识是有连续性的
3.        当然外行有的时候也会带了重大变化

Whether significant advance in certain field depends on the insiders, say experts and professionals or outsiders who inject the knowledge and experience from another field to the former one, as the speaker asserts has been always a controversial issue. In my opinion, although there are occasions where some historic breakthrough maybe attributed to layers, it’s insiders indeed who play a decisive role in the progress of every field.

To begin with in the era of rapid social and technological development leading to increasingly life complexity, work division is becoming more and more specific. That’s to say, without some proper training, a crewman even can’t drive a car, not to mention making it more environment-friendly, though both the car and the ship are made of mental. To become a good doctor involves in years of study and numerous practice, to be a successful lawyer needs to memorize abundance of laws and regulations, to be a excellent economist one must familiar with every major economist in the history from Simi in 1700s, grasp their pith and first of all be good at math. All of those are not an overnight job. And without necessary basis, there’s no way to deepen one’s research in a very areas.

What’s more, just as Newton said (and I paraphrase):”If I have seen further, it is by standing upon the shoulders of giants.” In almost every field, there is a context. Forerunners have laid foundations for us, and then the specialist in their times use it and generate new methods which in turn facilitate other specialist to make use of. Imaging a talented layer tries hundreds of ways and takes several years to prove a mathematical formula only to find that it has been achieved by a mathematician 100 yeas ago. In fact what the layers lack is not anything but systematical knowledge. In other word, he or she doesn’t climb to the shoulders of the giants. As far as I am concern there’s a danger for every outsider that is pursuing of another walks of life doing something that are totally wasteful, which not only can’t help to stimulate the progress in a strange fields, but also do great harm to themselves.

Admittedly, there’s no denying that outsiders can bring some major changes in certain field. And as many subjects interlace with each other, it will provide a broader perspective and therefore accelerate the improvement of related areas. But that’s not the mainstream, which just gives us a happily surprise instead of sustainable accomplishment.

Above all, from what has been discussed above, we may safely arrive at the conclusion that outsiders who maybe full of passion and energy can hardly take over the task to endow human beings influential changes. What we rely on is the industrious work of the specialists in each field who have solid basis and without doubt, stand on the shoulders of giants.   

davidjackyUID: 135962

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No.1 Issue 2 欢迎版砖
Issue 4
No field of study can advance significantly unless outsiders bring their knowledge and experience to that field of study.
1. 内行受到过专门训练，尤其是现在这个分工更加明确的时代。
2. 知识是有连续性的
3. 当然外行有的时候也会带了重大变化

Whether significant advance in certain field depends on the insiders, say experts and professionals or outsiders who inject the knowledge and experience from another field to【into】 the former one, as the speaker asserts has been always a controversial issue. In my opinion, although there are occasions where some historic breakthrough maybe attributed to layers, it’s insiders indeed who play a decisive role in the progress of every field.【这句本来就是强调句型，indeed多余】

To begin with in the era of rapid social and technological development leading to increasingly life complexity, work division is becoming more and more specific. That’s to say, without some proper training, a crewman even can’t drive a car, not to mention making it more environment-friendly, though both the car and the ship are made of mental【ship放在这里是什么意思】. To become【be】 a good【professional，而good更多用来说医生人品好】 doctor involves in【in不要】 years of study and numerous practice, to be a successful lawyer needs to memorize abundance of laws and regulations, to be a【an】 excellent economist one must 【be】familiar with every major economist in the history from Simi in 1700s, grasp their pith and first of all be good at math. All of those are not an overnight job. And without necessary basis, there’s no way to deepen one’s research in a very areas 【area】.
全文讲specific，在引入without论证前，最好中间过渡一下，总体说：thus，没有trainning，很难进入一个领域。

What’s more, just as Newton said (and I paraphrase):”If I have seen further, it is by standing upon the shoulders of giants.” In almost every field, there is a context. Forerunners have laid foundations for us, and then the specialist【s】 in their times use it and generate new methods which in turn facilitate other specialist to make use of. Imaging a talented layer tries hundreds of ways and takes several years to prove a mathematical formula only to find that it has been achieved by a mathematician 100 yeas ago. In fact what the layers lack is not anything but systematical knowledge. In other word, he or she doesn’t climb to the shoulders of the giants. As far as I am concern there’s a danger for every outsider that is pursuing of another walks of life doing something that are totally wasteful, which not only can’t help to stimulate the progress in a strange fields, but also do great harm to themselves.

Admittedly, there’s no denying that outsiders can bring some major changes in certain field. And as many subjects interlace with each other, it will provide a broader perspective and therefore accelerate the improvement of related areas. But that’s not the mainstream, which just gives us a happily surprise instead of sustainable accomplishment.

Above all, from what has been discussed above, we may safely arrive at the conclusion that outsiders who maybe full of passion and energy can hardly take over the task to endow human beings influential changes. What we rely on is the industrious work of the specialists in each field who have solid basis and without doubt, stand on the shoulders of giants.
尽管文章没有什么太大的亮点，但是这种保守的写法足以应付考试，个别段落和词句还要斟酌。

legendhfwangUID: 191674

非常非常感谢

legendhfwangUID: 191674

though both the car and the ship are made of mental【ship放在这里是什么意思】. 因为前面提到了crewman
To become【be】为什么要这么改呢

chrisyUID: 160364

个人认为B2的分论点不是很清晰
我理解搂主的意思是说本学科内知识的成体系和传承 外行有可能不能掌握 但其实说穿了这一点和B1中的内行受过专业训练有专业素养没有什么本质区别 作为内行受到的专业训练其实就是指学科内的知识体系和前人的成果 所谓的门外汉就是因为不知道学科内的研究发展到了什么程度 B1的论点在B2中等于又重复了一遍

同时B3有必要多扩展一下

楼主加油 大家一起努力:)

legendhfwangUID: 191674

chrisy 说的对，B2一定程度上有写重复，但是再从哪个方面写呢