Issue5 第一篇 请大家多指正非常感谢

clearskyUID: 195091

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A nation should require all its students to study the same national curriculum until they enter college rather than allow schools in different parts of the nation to determine which academic courses to offer.

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I agree with the statement that all students of a nation should study the same national curriculum until they enter colldge. In my opinion, however, allowing schools in different parts of the nation to make choice of academic courses is as important for the nation as the same national curriuclum in some respects.  

Before students enter into colleges, they should be introduced the same curriculum made by a national government. It should be easily understood that these can help colleges set up  necessarily unified and just entrance examinations. As we know, if absent of the same national curriculum, a nation will have a great difficulty in evaluating academic level of  all its students in different parts. Even if the nation manage to accomplish it, it is impossible for each college to prepare different test papers each year to cater to its candidates who, at different adademic degrees, come from various parts of the nation. Furthermore, even though the colleges are willing to spend their time on the preparation for diverse examanation papers, the examinations will lose their values, for these various standards test papers per se mean injustice. Thus, without the same national curriculum, not only a nation but a college might be stumbled merely by entrance examinations.

However, when the elementary and secondary schools obey the identical curriculum, to great extent they should have right to determine other helpful courses offering to their students. If not, they would therefore be imprisoned in a stark state.

Firstly, allowing schools choosing differnet useful courses can make students learn something different with other parts of the nation and consequently facilitates students to study in a more favorable enviorment after they enter into colleges. Unarguably, as with some different  acedemic experinces and knowledge background, students will be attracted one another to communicate and absorb those useful unlikeness. After all, no one in the world would live with another individual who has identic characteristics and habits. Varied thinking and experiences are pleasant and easier to enlighten students who are familiar with other fields. Accordingly, schools whose courses are unlike may assist their students to acquire more not only at present but also in the future.

Secondly, distinct courses in some parts of a nation are indispensable. Some special districts need school education to preserve their unique characteristics. For instance, in China, some schools located in multiracial areas will need offer such courses as native lauguages, peculiar tradition and proprieties, special cultures about peoples. In these regions, people do not share common religion, culture, languge, or inherited condition of life with others, and there are often handed down many special and precious national merits. In addition, it has been generally accepted that no any culture is the best one, so diversified cultures should be protected and they can help students to realize this complicated world. Therefore, under this circumstance, a nation should empower its schools to provide relevant courses in order to save these rare treasures but not just follow the same curriculum.  

In conclusion, though the statement points out that a nation should require all its students to study the same national curriculum until they enter college, it fails to recognize the significance of schools which, in many ways, should offer some special courses which are beneficial to the nation and the students. At the time of a nation announces its uniform curriculum, it should simultaneously grant schools permission to determine courses to offer.

乒乓球爱上九月UID: 162925

互改一下吧 :)
http://211.151.90.54/bbs/showthread.php?s=&threadid=248643

foreverlovesUID: 166930

agree with the statement that all students of a nation should study the same national curriculum until they enter colldgecollege. In my opinion, however, allowing schools in different parts of the nation to make choice of academic courses is as important for the nation as the same national curriculumcurriculum in some respects.

Before students enter into colleges, they should be introduced the same curriculum made by a national government. It should be easily understood that these can help colleges set up necessarily unified and just entrance examinations. As we know, if absent of the same national curriculum, a nation will have a great difficulty in evaluating academic level of all its students in different parts. Even if the nation manage to accomplish it, it is impossible for each college to prepare different test papers each year to cater to its candidates who, at different adademicacademic degrees, come from various parts of the nation. Furthermore, even though the colleges are willing to spend their time on the preparation for diverse examinationexamination papers, the examinations will lose their values, for these various standards test papers per se mean injustice. Thus, without the same national curriculum, not only a nation but a college might be stumbled merely by entrance examinations.

However, when the elementary and secondary schools obey the identical curriculum, to great extent they should have right to determine other helpful courses offering to their students. If not, they would therefore be imprisoned in a stark state.
我不大明白这里other helpful courses ,是additional的吗,前面不是说curriculum已经统一了吗
Firstly, allowing schools choosingto choose differentdifferent useful courses can make students learn something different with other parts of the nation and consequently facilitates students to study in a more favorable enviormentenvironment after they enter into colleges. Unarguably, as with some different academicacademic experiencesexperiences and knowledge background, students will be attracted one another to communicate and absorb those useful unlikeness. After all, no one in the world would live with another individual who has identic characteristics and habits. Varied thinking and experiences are pleasant and easier to enlighten students who are familiar with other fields. Accordingly, schools whose courses are unlike may assist their students to acquire more not only at present but also in the future. 这段论证比较松散,可以想个例子什么的来充实一下

Secondly, distinct courses in some parts of a nation are indispensable. Some special districts need school education to preserve their unique characteristics. For instance, in China, some schools located in multiracial areas will need offer such courses as native lauguageslanguage, peculiar tradition and proprieties, special cultures about peoples. In these regions, people do not share common religion, culture, langugelanguage, or inherited condition of life with others, and there are often handed down many special and precious national merits这句话语法错. In addition, it has been generally accepted that no any culture is the best one, so diversifieddiverse cultures should be protected and they can help students to realize this complicated world. Therefore, under this circumstance, a nation should empower its schools to provide relevant courses in order to save these rare treasures but not just follow the same curriculum. 这一段论证的还可以

In conclusion, though the statement points out that a nation should require all its students to study the same national curriculum until they enter college, it fails to recognize the significance of schools which, in many ways, should offer some special courses which are beneficial to the nation and the students. 写的象ARGUE At the time of a nation announces its uniform curriculum, it should simultaneously grant schools permission to determine whichcourses to offer.
第一篇写成这样挺好的了,语言上有待加强,加油吧
ps:下次再贴的时候注意先放在WORD里检查一下

clearskyUID: 195091

最初由 乒乓球爱上九月 发布
[B]互改一下吧 :)
http://211.151.90.54/bbs/showthread.php?s=&threadid=248643 [/B]

没问题，我去看看 :)

clearskyUID: 195091

呵呵谢谢了
写这第一篇真是不容易，花了很长时间。由于我的水平本来就弱，所以对自已没太苛求。不过，一定会加油! 我们都是!
对于语言的加强方面，请问是否有什么好的建议？先谢谢
另，下次再贴之前我会放在word里面先check一下的，呵呵。。。

foreverlovesUID: 166930

不客气,要谢版主呢,
GTER就是一个大家庭,这里氛围挺好的,
最近比较忙,都很少来
语言上可以看看新概念,孙远的工具箱,这个不是一天两天可以做好的
另外就是多看别人的文章,多写,多改,积极的参与到论坛里,你会有很大进步的