issue5 大家基本都写过这篇的吧,互相讨论讨论

ivyshoulUID: 195537

5. A nation should require all its students to study the same national curriculum until they enter college rather than allow schools in different parts of the nation to determine which academic courses to offer.


As I deem, it is true that a nation should provide national curriculum to all its students before undergraduate education which most schools should accept and follow. However, there are still some special schools which should be given full right to decide its academic courses. In addition, a nation should also be flexible to give local schools certain rights to add some courses to that national curriculum.

When we go to school, we learn not only knowledge and skills, but also values and virtues. Mostly we begin to form our own value system when we are only kids, in which lies one important reason of requiring national curriculum in primary schools. A nation should let its future citizens know what she values, for children are the future of the nation. Love for the motherland, respect for the old, a spirit of never give up, diligence, creative and much more, all such virtues a nation values can be reflected in the courses determined in the same national curriculum. If such national curriculum hasn’t made compulsory in primary schools, it is possible that though equip with similar basic knowledge and skills, children from different parts of the nation are holding different value systems. Then, when they grow up and become main force of the nation, problems might arise.

Furthermore, there is another advantage of national curriculum. If students all over the country are given the same courses, it is convenient for teachers and educators to work out a common standard to judge the level of their students. Thus students of the same age all over the country are made sure not have knowledge spans from each other. Otherwise, if there is need for a child of higher-educated school to transfer to a lower-educated school, he/she has two choices: to enter a class of his/her age and find out courses given are too simple, or to choose a class of same knowledge level but has no company of the same age. Apparently, neither is good. Similar problem emerges on the contrary situation.

However, as mentioned before, there is a special kind of school which needs consideration—the art school. Children fond of art and have certain talents may aim at art school at early age. In my opinion, after they have finished the twelfth grade, they have enough knowledge and skills for daily life and can be perceived as cultivated people, thus afterwards they can choose an art road. If fact, there are already art high schools. For art high schools, common educators cannot decide what to teach, so leave the task to experts.

Though I admit that a nation should impose a national curriculum on all students of common schools before they enter college, I will argue that local schools should be given right to some extent to provide additional courses beside national core lessons thus to make the final curriculum more flexible, student-oriented and compatible. Students may want to learn more beside compulsory courses due to their own interest. Since their interests vary a lot from individual to individual, moreover, when taking into account the specific condition of every school, it is not practical for educators to design this kind of lessons as well as include them in a national compulsory curriculum. However, to encourage more learning, such courses are needed. More important, different part of the country may have different culture, especially true for a multiracial nation. These different cultures are precious for all human-being so any attempt to maintain them will make sense. And education is surely an efficient way. Nonetheless, this task can only leave to local educators, who are familiar with local culture. So come forth the need to grant local schools to provide additional courses.

Therefore, to imbue the students with national value system and to make foundation for a standard to judge to learning progress of children, a nationwide compulsory curriculum is needed. On the other hand, a nation should give local schools certain right to determine additional courses, as long as these courses are designed to hearten students’ learning desire, or to serve as a means of maintaining local culture.

:cool:

鬼谷子UID: 159645

好长啊，我占一个吧
明天给你看

ivyshoulUID: 195537

超时N久,中途还吃了饭洗了碗收拾了半天...慢慢想是写得好长哦...
要让我限时肯定没那么多...
鬼鬼大人是斑竹,你告诉我吧,Imong大人的头像是谁叻?
很好奇啊...

鬼谷子UID: 159645

这个问题。。。
我也不知道啊
我问问他。。

ivyshoulUID: 195537

感觉就像银英之类的动画里面的某某某...

volcanochenUID: 194083

我是基本同意：
1。有助于不同地区的教师和学生之间的交流
2。有助于新生适应新的学习环境
3。有助于教师对课程的安排
4。节省地方政府教育开支
5。-对于文化背景不同的地区（如加拿大的魁北克，中国的西藏等）很难实行。
：（感觉前三点都比较牵强
没办法，这是我的第2篇

ivyshoulUID: 195537

也是我的第二篇:)
水平不够哦...每次读issue题目,脑袋里面是有一些东西冒出来,可仔细一想,又很空泛,感觉提取不出什么有用的.
然后花了很多时间拼凑一篇出来了呢,自己都觉得没有说服力:)
继续努力才是王道啊!

鬼谷子UID: 159645

No.1  issue5 大家基本都写过这篇的吧,互相讨论讨论
5. A nation should require all its students to study the same national curriculum until they enter college rather than allow schools in different parts of the nation to determine which academic courses to offer.


As I deem, it is true that a nation should provide national curriculum to all its students before undergraduate education which most schools should accept and follow. 【感觉这个定从有问题】 However, there are still some special schools which should be given full right to decide its academic courses. In addition, a nation should also be flexible to give local schools certain rights to add some courses to that national curriculum. 【我觉得与大学之前的教育相对的应该是研究生教育postgraduate education了吧，如果你however后面要说special schools，那么前面应该说common/ordinary schools吧】

When we go to school, 【这里用的不好，应该说在学校里面我们学到了。。。】 we learn not only knowledge and skills, but also values and virtues. Mostly we begin to form our own value system when we are only kids, in which 【which？value system？】lies one important reason of requiring national curriculum in primary schools. 【reason呢？怎么没有说明一下解释一下啊？】A nation should let its future citizens know what she【who？nation？】 values, for children are the future of the nation. Love for the motherland, respect for the old, a spirit of never give up, diligence, creative 【这个是形容词】and much more, all such virtues a nation values can be【应该证明只有统一课程能，而不是简简单单的can，那不是在说其他的也可以达到吗】 reflected in the courses determined in the same national curriculum. If such national curriculum hasn’t made compulsory in primary schools, it is possible that though equip with similar basic knowledge and skills, children from different parts of the nation are holding different value systems. Then, when they grow up and become main force of the nation, problems might arise. 【绕来绕去觉得你还是没有说清为什么只有国家统一课程能够教给学生value，virtue】

Furthermore, there is another advantage of national curriculum. If students all over the country are given the same courses, it is convenient for teachers and educators to work out a common standard to judge the level of their students. Thus students of the same age all over the country are made sure not have knowledge spans from each other. Otherwise, if there is need for a child of higher-educated school to transfer to a lower-educated school, he/she has two choices: to enter a class of his/her age and find out courses given are too simple, or to choose a class of same knowledge level but has no company of the same age. Apparently, neither is good. Similar problem emerges on the contrary situation. 【前面的论点很不错的，但是后面说到knowledge spans这点我觉得就不是很好了，你可以说这样的common standard可以保证所有的学生都能得到同等的教育，而地方课程可能导致一些学校的教育落后】

However, as mentioned before【above】, there is a special kind of school which needs consideration—the art school. Children fond of art and have certain talents may aim at 【这样说不是很恰当】art school at early age. In my opinion, after they have finished the twelfth grade, they have enough knowledge and skills for daily life and can be perceived as cultivated people, thus afterwards they can choose an art road. If fact【in fact？？】, there are already art high schools. For art high schools, common educators cannot decide what to teach, so leave the task to experts.
【明白了你的意思，但是你表达的不是很清楚，中间的两句似乎没什么必要，重点应该是论述art课程的特殊性，与一般学校的不同性】

Though I admit that a nation should impose a national curriculum on all students of common schools before they enter college, I will argue that local schools should be given right to some extent to provide additional courses beside national core lessons thus to make the final curriculum more flexible, student-oriented and compatible. Students may want to learn more beside compulsory courses due to 【according to】their own interest. Since their interests vary a lot from individual to individual, moreover, when taking into account the specific condition of every school, it is not practical for educators to design this kind of lessons as well as include them in a national compulsory curriculum. However, to encourage more learning, such courses are needed. More important, different part of the country may have different culture, especially true for a multiracial nation. These different cultures are precious for all human-being 【应该说是当地居民吧，这样才能证明local课程有必要】so any attempt to maintain them will make sense. And education is surely 【is surely an？】an efficient way. Nonetheless, this task can only leave to local educators, who are familiar with local culture. So come forth the need to grant local schools to provide additional courses. 【没有主语】
【中间有一些语言比较罗嗦，明白了你的意思但是有些地方没有说到重点】

Therefore, to imbue the students with national value system and to make foundation for a standard to judge to learning progress of children, a nationwide compulsory curriculum is needed. On the other hand, a nation should give local schools certain right to determine additional courses, as long as these courses are designed to hearten students’ learning desire, or to serve as a means of maintaining local culture.

【总体来说思路是好的，论证的过程要加强，语言尽量简洁和流畅一点，加油！】

鬼谷子UID: 159645

imong不告诉我，
我看像寒羽良。。。

ivyshoulUID: 195537

寒羽良么...感觉有点像,但是我没看过这个版本的寒羽良.

谢谢鬼鬼大人的修改,待我再仔细研究研究:)

ivyshoulUID: 195537

试图用那个变色工具改,没弄明白怎么用
5. A nation should require all its students to study the same national curriculum until they enter college rather than allow schools in different parts of the nation to determine which academic courses to offer.

As I deem, it is true that a nation should provide national curriculum to all its students before undergraduate education which most schools should accept and follow. 【感觉这个定从有问题】 However, there are still some special schools which should be given full right to decide its academic courses. In addition, a nation should also be flexible to give local schools certain rights to add some courses to that national curriculum. 【我觉得与大学之前的教育相对的应该是研究生教育postgraduate education了吧，如果你however后面要说special schools，那么前面应该说common/ordinary schools吧】
(题目说的” until they enter college” 就是说上大学之前吧,我以为undergraduate education 就是说的大学教育,那句是想把题目的should换个说法肯定一下,不过定从确实有问题, 看来还是老老实实的照着写算了,大学之前的教育有统称的么?)


When we go to school, 【这里用的不好，应该说在学校里面我们学到了。。。】 we learn not only knowledge and skills, but also values and virtues. Mostly we begin to form our own value system when we are only kids, in which 【which？value system？】(我想表达的是在以上那个事实中…待我修改修改)lies one important reason of requiring national curriculum in primary schools. 【reason呢？怎么没有说明一下解释一下啊？】(我的reason就是mostly那句话, 看来表达不清呢)A nation should let its future citizens know what she【who？nation？】( the nation) values, for children are the future of the nation. Love for the motherland, respect for the old, a spirit of never give up, diligence, creative 【这个是形容词】and much more, all such virtues a nation values can be【应该证明只有统一课程能，而不是简简单单的can，那不是在说其他的也可以达到吗】 (其实这个地方是自己底气不足啊, 都不敢说得那么肯定…) reflected in the courses determined in the same national curriculum. If such national curriculum hasn’t made compulsory in primary schools, it is possible that though equip with similar basic knowledge and skills, children from different parts of the nation are holding different value systems. Then, when they grow up and become main force of the nation, problems might arise. 【绕来绕去觉得你还是没有说清为什么只有国家统一课程能够教给学生value，virtue】 ( 自己底气都不足, 不敢说得太肯定, 鬼鬼大人觉得这个观点可行么?)

Furthermore, there is another advantage of national curriculum. If students all over the country are given the same courses, it is convenient for teachers and educators to work out a common standard to judge the level of their students. Thus students of the same age all over the country are made sure not have knowledge spans from each other. Otherwise, if there is need for a child of higher-educated school to transfer to a lower-educated school, he/she has two choices: to enter a class of his/her age and find out courses given are too simple, or to choose a class of same knowledge level but has no company of the same age. Apparently, neither is good. Similar problem emerges on the contrary situation. 【前面的论点很不错的，但是后面说到knowledge spans这点我觉得就不是很好了，你可以说这样的common standard可以保证所有的学生都能得到同等的教育，而地方课程可能导致一些学校的教育落后】(思考ing…)

However, as mentioned before【above】, there is a special kind of school which needs consideration—the art school. Children fond of art and have certain talents may aim at 【这样说不是很恰当】( 为什么不恰当呢?那么应该怎么说那? 求教…) art school at early age. In my opinion, after they have finished the twelfth grade, they have enough knowledge and skills for daily life and can be perceived as cultivated people, thus afterwards they can choose an art road. If fact【in fact？？】, there are already art high schools. For art high schools, common educators cannot decide what to teach, so leave the task to experts.
【明白了你的意思，但是你表达的不是很清楚，中间的两句似乎没什么必要，重点应该是论述art课程的特殊性，与一般学校的不同性】( 说到论证art课程的特殊性, 鬼鬼大人会怎么着手? 我觉得这个是大家都知道的常识性问题, 要怎么说那? 想不出来…)

Though I admit that a nation should impose a national curriculum on all students of common schools before they enter college, I will argue that local schools should be given right to some extent to provide additional courses beside national core lessons thus to make the final curriculum more flexible, student-oriented and compatible. Students may want to learn more beside compulsory courses due to 【according to】their own interest. Since their interests vary a lot from individual to individual, moreover, when taking into account the specific condition of every school, it is not practical for educators to design this kind of lessons as well as include them in a national compulsory curriculum. However, to encourage more learning, such courses are needed. More important, different part of the country may have different culture, especially true for a multiracial nation. These different cultures are precious for all human-being 【应该说是当地居民吧，这样才能证明local课程有必要】so any attempt to maintain them will make sense. And education is surely 【is surely an？】an efficient way. Nonetheless, this task can only leave to local educators, who are familiar with local culture. So come forth the need to grant local schools to provide additional courses. 【没有主语】
【中间有一些语言比较罗嗦，明白了你的意思但是有些地方没有说到重点】

Therefore, to imbue the students with national value system and to make foundation for a standard to judge to learning progress of children, a nationwide compulsory curriculum is needed. On the other hand, a nation should give local schools certain right to determine additional courses, as long as these courses are designed to hearten students’ learning desire, or to serve as a means of maintaining local culture.

【总体来说思路是好的，论证的过程要加强，语言尽量简洁和流畅一点，加油！】

ivyshoulUID: 195537

不会用变色工具,看起来很麻烦,鬼鬼大人还是要不吝赐教啊:)
谢谢