issue207 ritual and ceremony 谢谢大家多指点

ouenoUID: 194212

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Rituals and ceremonies help define a culture. Without them, societies or groups of people have a diminished sense of who they are.

提纲:
1 improtance of ritual, ceremony
2. results of discarding them
3. globalization upset the existence of rituals and ceremonies and therefore the government should take measure to preserve them

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I strongly agree that rituals and ceremonies are important composition of a culture, without which, societies and groups of people may be at a loss in who they are. Moreover, with the irreversible trend of globalization, nations should pay attention to preserve their traditional cultures to prevent its fade.

On one hand, while cultures consist of many parts, rituals and ceremonies are indispensable ones of them. Rituals and ceremonies are the revelation of our traditional good merits and core of our ancestors’ value systems. For example, in rural areas in China, some peoples still keep the traditional custom of inviting forebears to enjoy the festivals, which may be considered ridiculous by the western. However, it shows the traditional merit of reverence to the old and our ancestors for their diligent work that the later generations benefit greatly from. Some rituals also indicate the value systems of our ancestors: many Americans have the habit of going to church on Sunday. The  ceremony is passed down from generation to generation, revealing the religious belief and social value of the early settlers , that is, believing in the Jesus and regarding honesty, goodness, benevolence as the good moral of an individual.

On the other hand, if nations overlook their rituals and ceremonies and discard them, societies and groups of people may lose their social identity. They do not know who they are, where they evolve from. Moreover, they have no reverence to their nations and no commitment to national loyalty, as a consequence, leading to the elimination of patriotism. Many political problems are indirectly caused by the loss of social identity. For instance, the Nazis distort their social value by identifying Germans are superior to other peoples in the world and bring a great disaster to human beings. Another case in point, the Moslem countries are all small countries with limited military forces, but they are always involved in the endless wars because of abundant petroleum resources in their continent. How can they survive and protect the sovereign of the country? It is their tenacious belief that God will protect them whatever difficulties they meet with. They strengthen this belief by holding rituals and ceremonies regularly in a year, to inspire themselves and their descendents, reminding them the national loyalty they are obliged to commit to. In this method, they survive and still have autonomy.

Moreover, with the irreversible trend of globalization, nations should look up to preserve their rituals and ceremonies from ruining. The complex connection of economy between the nationals threatens the independence of their cultures. Many traditional cultures are faced with the danger of disappearance. The United States is typical in this culture trend. The nation is composed of heterogenetic residents due to large numbers of immigrates during the past century, the cultures who brought crash with traditional cultures passed down from the early settlers. As can be seen in religious belief, more and more residents no longer believe in Christianity and shift to Buddha or Rome Catholicism. Less and less ceremonies and rituals are held every year because people have no time to spare from business and industry to culture. This can be a dangerous signal for the nation and the government should take steps to preserve these cultures. Firstly, they can subsidize the rural areas, where the traditional cultures are not severely affected by globalization. Secondly, the government can instruct the importance of traditional culture among students, who represent the future of the United States. In doing so, the nation can preserve, at least part of its rituals and ceremonies and may not end up in mental poverty.

In sum, cultures are composed of several parts, among which rituals and ceremonies account for indispensable parts and these two parts help strengthen patriotism and national loyalty of their people, and therefore should be preserved if their existence are threatened.

foreverlovesUID: 166930

本来已经贴到WORD 里头了,看完第一段和提纲,感觉有点跑题,下边就不敢看了,怕误导了
第一句话里面的composition of a culture 和define a culture 应该是不同的吧,所以你下面都是讲
的importance 了,不知道我的感觉对不对
继续讨论

ouenoUID: 194212

我认为define是表示其在culture中的重要性
所以没了这两点, culture 也就衰退了, 进而影响到价值标准, 和道德规范,
不知楼上的同意吗?

foreverlovesUID: 166930

我认为define 就是说通过rituals and ceremonies 可以反映culture, 到底重要不重要,也不一定吧
我觉得你需要讨论不同的rituals and ceremonies 会有不同的culture
例子一时想不起来,我也拿不准

你还是问一下大牛们吧,我也怕我搞错了

ouenoUID: 194212

你这么说有道理, 但怎么写呢?
有点深入到专业领域了

你看题目后半句, 说没有这些society , people就会怎样怎样
那是否是暗示要同社会, 个人相结合呢?

foreverlovesUID: 166930

这道题够变态,我是一点头绪都没有,因为没有这放面的知识呢
是应该和社会,个人相结合的,因为人是仪式的载体

louchen1984UID: 172975

这篇我参考了老外280还看了些别的资料
define 这里应该是侧重于distinguish one from others 的意思， 所以应该是讲从rituals and ceremonies可以代表其文化的独特性， 而且我发现ETS很喜欢identity相关的东东， 可能他们比较重视这个吧，呵呵

louchen1984UID: 172975

随便说说， 仅作参考
这样的变态题目太多了， 我已经照顾不过来了

louchen1984UID: 172975

body 1有些散，说的都是一个意思
body 2从without them 到lose national loyalty,还提到了纳粹和穆斯林，觉得有些怪，而且纳粹是identity太强了吧不是loss
从整个主题来说body 3应该是强调全球话是必然趋势，而为了阻挡这种趋势政府应该怎么怎么，个人以为不是很恰当，这篇issue 不应该强调should怎么怎么样上
个人意见，说的可能不对，别见怪：）

ouenoUID: 194212

我今天请教了一个牛ppmm
觉得分论点还是可以的, 但论述有点散, 就象louchen说的
主要是例子支持性不够
不过已经有方向了
谢谢foreverlove, louchen宝贵意见
要好好思考一下


to louchen:
看了你的那篇, 你能从那个角度入手满不容易的
我就算想到了,也没好的论据
看了你那篇挺有启发的
不过两个论述段是受限于时间还是没有东西可论述
考场上这样写我会慌的